To Fight the Coming Darkness
By JBern
Motivating Patronus lesson - how fun.
Killer patronus - only Harry, better than the next best thing.
Gripping fight for the rock.
In all too many fics, someone runs into #12 and says "Azkaban has been cleaned out!"
I thought wouldn't it be more fun to see it happen? The 'patronus kiss' has been done in several stories, but I think it came off well. There will be more on Harry's patronus later and it becomes important to the overall storyline.~Jim
"Her partner was gone as were both police officers four of the six firefighters."
...I'm thinkin' you might need an "and" in there somewhere. Also, closing quotes are in order in the last paragraph describing events from Voldemort's point of view - it just runs from his statement
right into a description of what he does.
"He simply pointed his wand at the dementor, felt that same draining pulse of energy and said the only thing that came to mind."
I've read so, so many fics that involve Harry having some special knack for killing dementors... and this one treats it the best of all! That was a blast to read. You've got solid talent for what I
consider an appropriate level of drama. I also really like the way you had Moody set things up in the last paragraph... good times, even if we all know in advance that it'll be for naught until Harry
does his thing. I'm really looking forward to reading how it plays out!
Thanks for the grammatical nitpicks. I'll add them to the growing list of things that need 'fixin'. Much more on Harry and the dementors coming soon.~Jim
Good work. I liked the thought of Hufflepuffs feeling like others regarded them as the remainders.
You notice that there are very few stories that strongly feature Hufflepuffs.~Jim
Lurrrrrrrve this action -- this has the foundation of a really good adventure and I hope you'll continue the chapter.
Next chapter is already up. The rest of hte chapters will be up soon to catch you up to chapter 25. Thanks for the review.~Jim
Great Chapter! I love Harry's patronus!
Thanks.