To Fight the Coming Darkness

Love what you've done with the Percy/Penny subplot. Really. Very muchly so.

One thing you might want to double-check before you post is whether or not you're using the correct 'your' in your sentences. I've seen a couple of times where 'your' was used where 'you're' should have been. Oh, and when quoting thoughts, you have the person thinking refer to themselves with the wrong pronoun a couple of times. Otherwise, your grammar (or your beta's) is much better than quite a few other ficcers I could mention!

Enough with my blathering, I want to know what happens next!

NICE!!! LOL! - a little bit 'Deus ex Machina' but still very amusing!

Percy returning was a good moment in the story.  I thought I set it up pretty well with the oath he swore and no one saw it coming.

That, was $#%^@$%^ awesome!!!I think I woke my wife up laughing at the end with Percy!!! You are a awesome writer and have a brilliant imagination. I am going to be late for work tomorrow...if I go in at all. Keep it up mate

Apologies to the spousal unit.  Hope you weren't too late getting to work.~Jim

Nicely handled!

Thanks.  I enjoyed using Penny in this story.~Jim

Haha, that was brilliant! Really well built up to leave Penny in her less rational thinking state of mind. Percy's ghost is a nice touch, too. :)

I got a number of compliments on Percy's ghost showing up.  Thanks.~Jim

Haha nice, I almost feel sorry for Penny...but then again no...no I don't.

Thanks for writing,
Matt

I liked giving her character a bit of development.  Notice in The Lie I've Lived, I used the same basic backstory for Penny only different choices...

Jim

Loved the Hermione shit line. One of my few criticisms of this fic, other than the relationship between Harry and Susan felt a bit rushed, is that it lacks the black humour of your other stories. The more humour, however black you want it to be, the more enjoyable the story as it gives a bit of a reprieve from the constant bickering.

The final revelation was absolutely superb. Loved this chapter. You write Dark!Penelope really well.

It's hard to force such humor into a story.  I try in parts, but I freely admit that I am no Nonjon by any stretch of the imagination.~Jim

I sensed that things might not go entrely smooth for Penny when Dobby led Harry upstairs. Percy though was certainly unexpected; kudos to you for that one.

*summons the popcorn*

Percy the ghost was one of my most deviously unexpected ideas.  I'm glad I could keep you guessing.~Jim

Brilliant bit with the ghost. Never saw it coming.

Thanks.  Glad I can keep you on your toes.~Jim

Now THAT!!!! was something new. Definately something I'll remember about this story...

Percy's ghost caught everyone by surprise.  It is nice when I can spring one on the readers and have them go, 'Damn!  I should have seen that coming!'.  Thanks.~Jim

Lies upon tricks all wrapped up in mystery, suspense, and multiple misdirections. You, my friend, have talent. Did you every find yourself getting confused over who was supposed to get the drop who while writing?

Thank you and to answer your question - my wife and daughter always have the drop on me.  Oh you meant during the story!  No, I have a good handle on what is happening.  If only real life were so accomodating.  Chapter 26 is almost done.  I have the big Harry versus Snape fight to write.  See you then.~Jim

Excellent Hermione insult.

Why do Hagrid's wound bother me so?

Great reason to stop Penny.

Glad you liked it.  Insulting Hermione is a hobby of mine, probably my sense of betrayal at JKR not going with Harry and Hermione as love interests.

Again your sense of foreboding amazes me.  We'll see about Hagrid soon...

Jim

Okay, okay its official, you have turned me into a zinger junkie. I now will be drawn to stories that have a particularly nice/nasty/surprising/horrifying twist at the end of each chapter.
I’m hooked, and it’s entirely your fault.
I hope you can live with yourself.

I'll try to manage.  I actually owe a large debt to Nonjon for that.  He convinced me that most readers decide in the last 4 paragraphs whether or not they will review.  Since then, I have concentrated on making the ending of the chapters as interesting as possible.~Jim

The last screen of this chapter was the most vindictively beautiful page I've ever read. Beautiful. :D

I like the team of Bill and Harry making the evil folks lives miserable.  I guess that shows.  Glad you liked it.~Jim

Wow, you've managed to greatly surprise me with this amazing resolution to thwart Penny's plan. I'm looking forward to see how it all came together.

Bringing Penny here as an enemy spy into #12 is a good plot element and really makes the most out of you turning her evil. I'm still looking for an explanation why she turned evil in the first place. I also still believe that the whole Voldemort as Godfather thing is a huge mistake, story-technically. It does not work at all, it seems just off. Would Voldemort really go into such a bond with someone, even if she is his servant? Would she really call him 'Godfather' in a letter instead of 'Master', especially talking in third person? It sounds terribly contrived to me and I fail to see the actual point of it. I think 'Penny as a Death Eater' would have worked just as well without her calling Voldie 'Godfather'. You could have had him describe her as his protegée in his thoughts.

Having Percy come back as a ghost is also a great idea to come up with and well executed. I certainly didn't expect that one!

Well, time to read the last of this batch of chapters. I hope it's just as exciting as this one!


Quizer

Glad you enjoyed it.  I am pleased to say no one anticipated Percy's return.~Jim