sylvelle posted a comment on Friday 23rd October 2015 8:47pm for Live in Their Dark Tents

I may have mentioned this before. I'm not so sure Dumbles is 'using Harry's money to fight Voldermort' even if he is he needs permission

Keats449 posted a comment on Monday 25th January 2010 6:10pm for Live in Their Dark Tents

Really liked the 'Hagasaurus Rex' term, he used to describe Sanchez, lol.

flynhghr posted a comment on Thursday 19th November 2009 3:21pm for Live in Their Dark Tents

Harry playing with his identity is fun, and he should have invited the girl while he changed just to see the reaction. It's not like they're going to know eachother for more than a week or two, right. Plus maybe she would have got more friendly than a walk home. I mean come on, he is 15/16 right? Gah, I dunno what Harry is thinking, but Jamacian Rum and coke is one of the best drinks on earth for chilling out. Oh well, at least he got to show off his Stag, just needs a doe for the day.

Lathena posted a comment on Sunday 18th January 2009 10:16am for Live in Their Dark Tents

I'll probably review again, but I just had to comment that this second person thing, while confusing at first, seems to be catching as I kept doing it when I was forced away from reading. Anywho, I'm enjoying where this is going and can't wait to read more.

fyrecat posted a comment on Wednesday 24th December 2008 2:22pm for Live in Their Dark Tents

And the plot thickens...
I like the Canadian girls. great touch.

I'm really enjoying this story!

OK editorial comments time:
"Now that I have introduced to the real you,..." - have been introduced

"Your letting this whole issue distract you..."
- you are letting = you're letting.
'Your' means 'belongs to you.'

"...she pretty much roles her eyes."
- rolls

TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Tuesday 8th January 2008 5:51pm for Live in Their Dark Tents

Very good chapter.

gunny

JBern replied:

Thanks.~Jim

Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Wednesday 7th March 2007 6:43am for Live in Their Dark Tents

Transoceanic curse option was superb. The continued letters between Luna and Harry are developing their relationship really nicely. I also adore Harry going out for fun but balancing it with darkness. Excellent chapter.

JBern replied:

Look for the correspondence relationship to continue.   Harry should be a teenager and doing the same stupid things that teenagers given their first taste of freedom end up doing.~Jim

MonkeyAxman1302 posted a comment on Monday 22nd January 2007 3:33am for Live in Their Dark Tents

Absolutely great line; "No ugly nightmares about Tommy. Maybe he was too cheap to pay for the transoceanic option for the curse connection."

Really like that you put a human face on a manipulative Dumbledore. Most people just paint him as the bad guy until he gives into Harry. Its nice that you explain that he is still all for the "greater good" even if he was mis-guided in what he was doing.

LOL at Harry going out clubbing and getting trollied. That hangover ain't going to be pretty.

Thanks for writing!

Monkey

JBern replied:

Thanks again.   I swear I already responded to this, but oh well what can you do?   Like I said visit the forum to see a preview of chapter 18.~Jim

Musings of Apathy posted a comment on Saturday 6th January 2007 9:24am for Live in Their Dark Tents

Just started the story and found a couple of mistakes. Really, I'm not trying to be a stick in the mud, I really like the story, else I wouldn't say anything. I like the perspective that you are telling it from, although it took some getting used to.

Now to the corrections:

It’s a change form having people fall all over themselves in front of you. She obviously thinks you are the Boy-Who-Shouldn’t-Be-Here.

Should be "change from having"

Second: Luna's return letter should be in Italics, so that it looks like the rest of the letters.

Thanks for writing a great story and I'm glad that you have joined us. After I get caught up with this story, I'll read your other.

Mike (MoA)

JBern replied:

Thanks.   I don't mind at all.   I'll add them to the list of corrections for the next time I do housekeeping on the story.   I always wanted to do a second person story.   If done properly, it gives the reader a truly immersive experience.~Jim

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 8th November 2006 2:09pm for Live in Their Dark Tents

Very interesting that you make Dumbledore manipulative and then give him a good reason to use Harry's money. I wonder if you'll make us a little more sympathetic with Ron, Hermione, and Ginny.

Thoght provoking.

JBern replied:

Like I said, many of his 'friends' motivations won't come to light until the sequel.   This story is tenatively planned to end with his return to England.~Jim

fx posted a comment on Tuesday 7th November 2006 11:15pm for Live in Their Dark Tents

Another Luna letter not italicized

"YOU UNBELIEVEABLE GIT!!! COULDN’T KEEP A SECRET FOR TEN FREAKING MINUTES! Just kidding. I understand. You have a lot going on and plus I think I recognized a certain eldest brother, so I guess we are even. Tell anyone else and all bets are off."

JBern replied:

Got it.   I'll fix it as soon as I catch up.   You haven't said whether or not you are enjoying the story so far.~Jim