Bungle in the Jungle
Thunder and Lightning Couldn't Be Bolder
By JBern
Reviews
cmatbmed posted a comment on Thursday 15th March 2007 8:38am for Thunder and Lightning Couldn't Be Bolder
Wow didn't see that coming. Brilliant though.
I actually think that Bill being killed off is not that bad at this point in the story. Obviously it hurts because he is a great character but bill also fulfilled the role he was meant to perform, get to the horcrux. Now let the star of our story go the last mile. Also it causes Harry to take charge of not only the expedition but also his own life moving forward. So I think you should leave Bill Dead.
I like the statue de Soto, if anyone could do it Bernini could.
Maybe Harry can show some of that power the dark lord knows not and use it on Chilotha.
Great Story.
JBern replied:
The fates of the characters were pretty much decided long ago. Glad you appreciate the works of Bernini. I was suitably impressed after googling sculpters of the 1600s.
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
creaothceann posted a comment on Thursday 15th March 2007 8:29am for Thunder and Lightning Couldn't Be Bolder
I say you watch too much Tarantino. :/
Dare I say that the Order will be involved in taming that Demon? It seems possible...
Can't wait for the next chapter.
JBern replied:
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
JoFarries posted a comment on Thursday 15th March 2007 7:52am for Thunder and Lightning Couldn't Be Bolder
Well, I just found this story, and I must say that I'm fascinated by it! I can't believe you killed off Bill Weasley, tho. He was a good guy. Sanchez I can believe, even tho Hack was a little sad about it. But Bill? Too cruel! I'm looking forward to reading more in this story. How fast do you write? Can you possibly write quicker than you already do? I need more of this story! :-D
Jo F.
JBern replied:
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.
To answer your question, I have 3 stories in progress. Generally, I put up a chapter a week on a rotating basis. You should try my other two for more fun and enjoyment.~Jim
Claudia R posted a comment on Thursday 15th March 2007 6:53am for Thunder and Lightning Couldn't Be Bolder
I just can't believe you killed Bill...
he was the greatest... I loved him and Fleur and now he is dead...
I am very sad now... and I had been looking forward to this chapter for such a long time...
he will always be in our hearts...
poor Fleur... they had finally gotten engaged
th chapter was very good but this end it saddened me so much that I can't even gush about the rest
JBern replied:
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.
On a side note, it is a high compliment to tell a writer that his work actually evoked some emotion on your part. Since I'm not making any money off of this, it's the largerst reward I can get.~Jim
shlager_5321 posted a comment on Thursday 15th March 2007 6:23am for Thunder and Lightning Couldn't Be Bolder
noooooooooooo!!!!!!
not bill!! :-(
how could you kill him????
i mean after all he did for Harry up until now and after everything that happend to Harry until now and you kill his best and only friend!!!!
unless you plan on somehow bring him back then sham on you ..
but still aside from that....
great chapter
keep up the good work
and update soon
JBern replied:
Seems to be a reoccuring theme among the reviews. I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
Ivy posted a comment on Thursday 15th March 2007 6:16am for Thunder and Lightning Couldn't Be Bolder
I love this story, it's full of surprises.
The plot is twisted and although narration style was a bit annoying at the beginning I got used to it.
BUT PLEASE PLEASE DON'T LET BILL BE DEAD!!!!
Think of something, anything that would let him get out of it somewhat unscratched. He is the most dissent of the Weasleys. Harry still needs help and well delivered life wisdom and a real friend, and no, I don’t think a ghost of Bill would be such a big help to him. And especially, it wouldn’t be good for his mental health. And besides Bill has a weeding to attend to :-), and lots of small one-eight Veelas to make ;-)
Thanks for the story.
Ivy
JBern replied:
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
Rake posted a comment on Thursday 15th March 2007 6:06am for Thunder and Lightning Couldn't Be Bolder
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!
Now that thay's out of my system let the review comence. While I don't like the statue as a plot device and I hate you for the cliffhanger, I loved this chapter.The death of Bill, while sad, was expected.I am looking forward to the rest of the battle (if yow want to be trully evil, you should make the next chapter in Dumbledore's POV :P). Keep up the good work
JBern replied:
Sorry you didn't like De Soto. He'll continue to have a minor role at least for the next few chapters. I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
Yonexcannon posted a comment on Thursday 15th March 2007 5:58am for Thunder and Lightning Couldn't Be Bolder
Wow! Great chapter as always. I have gone back and read it three times looking for details that I may have missed the first time. For instance, I wonder what Lone Thundercloud "opens his mouth to say" that Harry doesn't stick around to hear.
There are a ton of possibilities that mean that Bill could still be alive. I find it entirely possible that Chilotha kept Bill alive for no other reason than to "help" with any curse breaking that he may need after he becomes re-embodied.
However, having said all that I am fascinated by your decision to have Harry face a dark lord on his own before facing Riddle. This confrontation has tremendous potential. Its almost like its Harry's "warm-up" dark lord before he moves on to bigger game. Who knows, maybe the "power he knows not" will manifest itself during Harry's battle with Chilotha.
No matter what, it was a great chapter and I look forward to reading more as soon as it is available. Keep up the great work.
JBern replied:
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
warpwizard posted a comment on Thursday 15th March 2007 3:52am for Thunder and Lightning Couldn't Be Bolder
Good chapter, and a nice dramatic ending. Next chapter should be exciting. Good job. :)
JBern replied:
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
Quizer posted a comment on Thursday 15th March 2007 2:56am for Thunder and Lightning Couldn't Be Bolder
Aw man, you killed Bill. Didn't you say he was the one you gave the best chances to survive this? Or is this just a ruse and Bill is not really dead? Unfortunately I don't think so.
Either way, Harry will now give the undead dark lord-wannabe hell. Looking forward to the resolution. Now hurry up and write it! ;)
Quizer
JBern replied:
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It should be done by the end of the week. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
kainboa posted a comment on Thursday 15th March 2007 2:52am for Thunder and Lightning Couldn't Be Bolder
great chapter as usual, can't wait for the next one
keep up the great work :)
JBern replied:
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
amulder posted a comment on Thursday 15th March 2007 2:12am for Thunder and Lightning Couldn't Be Bolder
You just keep building it up, don't you...
JBern replied:
Would you want it any other way? :-)
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
uthamm posted a comment on Thursday 15th March 2007 1:54am for Thunder and Lightning Couldn't Be Bolder
WHAT!!! YOU DID NOT JUST KILL BILL!!??!! Forget Harry - I want a piece of that BSTD Chilotha/Collins!
Seriously. Please - not Bill! How is it that everyone who likes Harry bites it? I suppose that this sets up the order of the <insert magical animal name here> - Kwan, Hack, Thundercloud & Hernando taking England by Storm! That might be cool - but KILLING BILL ISN"T COOL! This is definatly worse than the Hack/Sanchez imagery from a few chapters ago.
Good job also on hitting one of my main complaints with the books - why didn't DD teach Harry anything?
JBern replied:
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It should be done by the end of the week. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
jzysman posted a comment on Thursday 15th March 2007 1:12am for Thunder and Lightning Couldn't Be Bolder
HOLY SHITE!!!! I don't know whether to curse you or congratulate you. Probably the latter as you obviously achieved the effect you were going for. That was incredible, and of course incredibly evil. How the heck will Harry keep the team together. Bill was the leader, will they now just call this a bad deal and flee? MAN! I can't wait to see the duel between wannabe Volde and Harry.
JBern replied:
Someone told me that I would do great but terrible things with a keyboard....
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
Meteoricshipyards posted a comment on Thursday 15th March 2007 1:00am for Thunder and Lightning Couldn't Be Bolder
You certainly know how to play our emotions. Very exciting. Excellent feeling of danger and threat to the main characters. Great plot. I like that Harry figured out that Chilotha set the wards around the daemon.
Without Bill, I hope Harry can successfully stand up to Dumbledore.
Hate that you left it at a cliffhanger, but you post very regularly, so it's not so bad.
Thanks for a great story.
Tom A.
JBern replied:
Someone once told me that I would do great and terrible things with a keyboard....
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It should be done by the end of the week. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
Crys posted a comment on Thursday 15th March 2007 12:28am for Thunder and Lightning Couldn't Be Bolder
Patronus is fading. Not surprising, but it's a bad sign.
> "Harry, the nice ones call us ‘tomb raiders’. The not so nice ones call us ‘grave robbers’. There’s a reason for that."
*think* You're going a lot further into the world of the curse breakers than anyone else I've read. The fact that Bill says this and isn't embarassed by it speaks volumes. Fascinating stuff.
*frown* I still think the target could be further down in the goblin tunnels.
> I’ll show you ‘Fun with Severing Charms’. It slices, it dices, and it even makes julienne fries!
*chuckle* Is that what's called "bleak" or "gallows" humor? :)
> skip the part about you and the statue of Hernando de Soto, in a bathroom wrestling with a frail, but surprisingly strong dead thing that looked as much snake as it did man. It has all the makings of some outrageous joke.
*laugh*
One little thing is bugging me. The inferi numbers seem to be going down. But earlier you said they'd just keep getting back up. What changed?
Oh, shit. Bill . . .
*deep breath*
Okay, on the surface this looks very, very bad. However, it's possible that Bill isn't actually dead.
I'm not going to quote odds on that, though.
As a reader, I hate where you left it. As a fellow writer, I applaud the story.
JBern replied:
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
Wonderbee31 posted a comment on Wednesday 14th March 2007 10:48pm for Thunder and Lightning Couldn't Be Bolder
Whoa, talk about intense. Going to be interesting to see how things go down from here, and Harry is building to a towering rage, with his opponent, the Order, and other things that he wants control of, but seems unable to do so, looks like it wouldn't take too much to push him over the edge into darkness itself.
JBern replied:
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
DrT posted a comment on Wednesday 14th March 2007 10:30pm for Thunder and Lightning Couldn't Be Bolder
Yes, Harry was blun t in his draft to Dumbles, but not nearly as blunt as he could have been, under the circumstances. We'll see if it was really Bill or not. A shame if it was.
"T"
JBern replied:
You should have your answer by the end of the week. I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
Louise Postlethwaite posted a comment on Wednesday 14th March 2007 10:03pm for Thunder and Lightning Couldn't Be Bolder
I'm in shock, Bill is dead.
That was unexpected...
Well written, and I can't believe Bill is dead.
I refuse to believe Bill is dead and I'm currently coming up with a list of 'How Bill survived.'
1. We assume the dead dog was Bill, when Chilotha could have decided to fool Harry into thinking his best friend is dead, thus making Harry more reckless and easier to kill.
2. Zombie Bill. (Bad thought, very bad thought.)
I wonder if Dumbledore will find some way of blaming Bill's death on Harry. Molly probably will.
Looking forward to the next chapter, you're very good at balancing action, charater interaction and personal thoughts, and the plot is moving swiftly along.
JBern replied:
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
Cholera posted a comment on Thursday 15th March 2007 11:20am for Thunder and Lightning Couldn't Be Bolder
JBern replied: