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Abraxan posted a comment on Monday 9th August 2010 9:53am for With Claws at Your Back to Send a Chill Through the Night Air

Gee, you're sure hard on Abraxans!! I might be a bit paranoid. . .

Abraxan

Nargus posted a comment on Monday 14th December 2009 11:43am for With Claws at Your Back to Send a Chill Through the Night Air

I believe you made Riddle a little too good here. I don't believe he have either time or power to do the spell of this level. Also with the fact that the 'City of the Damned' should have existed for far longer than him. At least, the real 'City of the Damned' does. It sound like somethings resulted from the egypt and mayan age. At most, only Grindelvold would have enough reputation to pull somethings like this. The timeline of Grindelvold reign does happen around a World War after all, while Riddle still struggle in Britain, trying to kill Harry with an AK.

flynhghr posted a comment on Friday 20th November 2009 8:04am for With Claws at Your Back to Send a Chill Through the Night Air

The golem is fun, and the Dragon/abraxen chase on the broom was simply awesome. It's too bad they can't get replies, I wonder what Bill's journal would be saying from the traitors. It's comforting to know Harry's going to get his investement back, even if he wasn't aware of putting it out there. What about bluebell fire? Why wouldn't that work? Looking forward to the part about breaking into the vaults.

fyrecat posted a comment on Saturday 27th December 2008 6:03am for With Claws at Your Back to Send a Chill Through the Night Air

Fun chapter. Inferi Clock Tower Sniping! Haha! Plus, thinning the enemy's numbers is a good idea. Lots of fun movie references too.

Editorial notes:
:...covering your strategic withdraw."
- withdrawal
- http://dictionary.reference.com/search?q=withdrawal

TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Thursday 10th January 2008 5:59am for With Claws at Your Back to Send a Chill Through the Night Air

Good chapter.

gunny

JBern replied:

Thanks.

Brian Donnely posted a comment on Tuesday 8th January 2008 3:49pm for With Claws at Your Back to Send a Chill Through the Night Air

Haha, Bill and Collins obviously find little humor in that Monty Python counting argument, eh? Good times.

I knew you were going to find a way to bring in a necrodragon somehow. Got a certain fondness for them, maybe? ;) Air battle scene was very well done. I'm not sure, but are Abraxan known for being violent creatures? Or is it just the zombified ones that'll kick your ass?

The whole situation of them just idly sitting there sniping zombies like it's no big deal made me laugh pretty hard.

JBern replied:

Now I just need a Necrodragon in The Lie I've Lived...

As for Abraxans, Madam Maxim did worry that Hagrid would have a problem "handling" them, so draw your own conclusions.

I thought it was an interesting way to end the chapter with them simply eliminating zombies that had been such a problem earlier.   This of course means there is much more terrifying things coming...

Jim

Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Thursday 8th March 2007 10:15am for With Claws at Your Back to Send a Chill Through the Night Air

I re-read chapter 1 and yes things make far more sense now. I loved Hack knowing the words to Hotel California. Bill's anger seemed very real. I can't imagine this is all a plan of Dumbledore's, though thank you for giving a humanity to his manipulative bastard role. Too often he is simply that. In this it can almost, though only ever almost, understandable. Necropegasi is a wonderful word. It conjures up such images! I also like their grim shooting game and Collins's brief backstory. More please. Excellent story so far.

PS - You need to thank MonkeyAxman1302 for this spate of reviews. He's been telling me for weeks that this story is superb, one of his favourites, that I couldn't resist any longer and I was very well rewarded. Fantastic so far.

JBern replied:

The Axman has been a prolific reviewer.   I appreciate the plugs for the story.   Next time I hear from him, I'll be sure to thank him.~Jim

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Friday 2nd March 2007 2:28am for With Claws at Your Back to Send a Chill Through the Night Air

Once again, your explanations of wards and warding concepts are amazing. The only going one-way communication with Luna should do the trick. The idea of wards to make them uncomfortable to the extreme is very interesting.

I most certainly HOPE Bill is not playing along with Dumbledore taking Harry there as a training exercise. Although, if the prophecy can be interpreted as no one else can kill Harry, I guess.... Please tell me this isn't a Harry-goes-back-kills-Voldie-and-then-everyone-else story.

Harry's aerial battle was quite brilliant.

JBern replied:

Thanks for the compliments.   I take a view on warding much like computer programming.   You need to create a ward to do something specific....

It's not necessarily the wards making everyone uncomfortable, it's the 'great evil' that was perpetrated in the ruined city - or that's what the heroes believe it is....

Bill is on Harry's side.   Rest assured.   I have specific plans for the sequel and many of the characters (notably Dumbledore and Hermione) have some explaining to do.

Jim

Syaoran posted a comment on Wednesday 21st February 2007 7:28am for With Claws at Your Back to Send a Chill Through the Night Air

Holy crap. This is one of the best well written story's I've every read. Your ideas are ingenious and very breathe taking. Nice job. Hopefully you update soon, can't wait for another Bungle in the Jungle!

JBern replied:

Thanks.   The new chapter is up and I hope you enjoy it as well.~Jim

gaul2000 posted a comment on Monday 19th February 2007 2:11am for With Claws at Your Back to Send a Chill Through the Night Air

great chapter, wonderful story, wonders what kind of other creatures will be inferi in the city, and the different kinds of wards that would be inventive with mass destruction of inferi, byes

JBern replied:

Thanks.   The new chapter is up and might answer some of your question about other wards and whatnot.~Jim

Alan Salazar Slytherin posted a comment on Sunday 11th February 2007 2:56pm for With Claws at Your Back to Send a Chill Through the Night Air

sorry, comp messed up the links slightly me, that last review of mine was meant for living lies fic of yours you just started ^^;;;;

JBern replied:

Figured it out.   Was slightly confused at first.   Glad you like both the stories.~Jim

Alan Salazar Slytherin posted a comment on Sunday 11th February 2007 2:53pm for With Claws at Your Back to Send a Chill Through the Night Air

Heya! Just me again, I went back and read something that confused me the first time through and thought I might point out to ya ;)

Wouldn't the part where Harry pointed out the mistake in Runes paper of the seventh year show that he was channelling a bit of Lily seeings as I remember in the books JK mentioned that Runes was one of Lily's specialties in school where Jame's was Transfiguration and Charms?

Not criticizing ya here, but was something that I thought you might want to know, asides I still stick by my first review in saying that this is a great fic you got started here and a nice original path that you are taking with Harry :)

Alan
Alan_salazar_slytherin@yahoo.com

JBern replied:

I think I answered in the correct thread, but there's no reason that James couldn't have taken Runes as well.   Lily was always pegged as being great at charms.   There's no real indication that she took runes, other than a fanon assumption because Hermione does as well.   Still, the Marauders came up with the map and it had to use some Rune work as well as charms work~Jim

Blackstone4005 posted a comment on Saturday 10th February 2007 11:09pm for With Claws at Your Back to Send a Chill Through the Night Air

Outstanding story. Your style is very witty, well paced and a complete delight. Thanks for a great read. I look forward to the coming chapters.

JBern replied:

I don't know.   Given that only 8 weeks have passed in a story of nearly 150k words my pace might be a bit off.   Still glad you are enjoying it.   New chapter is now up for your enjoyment.~Jim

uNople posted a comment on Wednesday 7th February 2007 12:16pm for With Claws at Your Back to Send a Chill Through the Night Air

Wow. Your story just keeps getting better chapter by chapter. Harry's maturing well, and learning lots of skills. I can't wait for him to get out of the city, and have his confrontation with Dumbledore, and see Luna again.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   I start on the next chapter probably this weekend.~Jim

Cass posted a comment on Friday 2nd February 2007 9:38am for With Claws at Your Back to Send a Chill Through the Night Air

This story is addictive, truly. Every time you update, I have to go through and just read as much of it as I can to enjoy the sheer quality of it.

JBern replied:

Thank you for the compliments.   The fact that so many people tell me that my stories stand the test of rereading that makes me think I am doing somehting right.~Jim

Foolhammer posted a comment on Friday 2nd February 2007 8:29am for With Claws at Your Back to Send a Chill Through the Night Air

Less zombies soon, please. Am definitely looking forward to that (doubtless) distant chapter where Harry confronts the Order in person. More Luna too, please!

JBern replied:

Less Zombies by request.   By the end of the chapter with the group on the balcony taking potshots at the crowd below, they had become marginalized as a threat.   Clearly, that means that there must be something else down there.   The Order confrontation is in the sequel, though we should begin to see some communication with them as soon as the Gobs fix the Bulk Transfer System they can send their journals outside the wards to get them updated.   The Order will clearly reply.   The question is, did Luna take the journal with her?   Is it stuffed in the back of the trunk?   Has she read it already and is too ashamed of herself to reply?

Questions, questions, and more questions...

Thanks for the review.~Jim

Alan Williams posted a comment on Thursday 1st February 2007 3:41pm for With Claws at Your Back to Send a Chill Through the Night Air

As with many others I am looking forward to seeing how Luna and the Order responded, I am also looking forward to the sequel. And having reviewed some of the other reviews I saw you plan to finish your other story before starting the sequel. How long will we have to wait? One comment on the chapter. When did Harry learn the portkey spell? I'm pretty sure he did not know it in chapter 2. And Kwan's speed learning for the pain deprived was for apparating and silent casting.

JBern replied:

After the incident with the Dragon at the first ruins is when Harry learned how to make a Portkey.   I didn't specifically include it in his training, but considering the number of sticky situations Harry gets himself into he'd learn it.   Thundercloud taught him.   I'll mention it in the next chapter.   Thanks for keeping me honest.

This story has about 5-7 chapters left in it.   The other has roughly 10. Assuming I can keep my pace, it'll be about a month and a half after Bungle finishes that TFTCD is wrapped up.   I'll start laying out Bungle's sequel after that.   I have a 3rd story started that I will post in the interim period.

Hope that makes sense.~Jim

Lufio posted a comment on Thursday 1st February 2007 10:20am for With Claws at Your Back to Send a Chill Through the Night Air

Huh. So there'll be other critters besides the living dead? Interesting. Or are you referring to traps?

JBern replied:

Thanks for the review.   Yes.   How's that for a vague enough answer.   You'll see soon enough... ~Jim

MonkeyAxman1302 posted a comment on Thursday 1st February 2007 5:38am for With Claws at Your Back to Send a Chill Through the Night Air

You really like the word "Necrodragon". The concept is great and works equally well both in TFtCD and Bungle.

I need to catch up and review some of the previous chapters coz this story is so unbelievably good. I really like To Fight and I kind of hate you for writing two such totally awesome stories, but because this has the humourous side I think this is a better all round story. I still love T fight and its an almost impossible decision to make but Hey I made it!

Random questions, are the "Abraxan" winged horses named after the author of the same name on this site?

Thanks for writing, please write more!

Monkey

JBern replied:

Necrodragon just flows off the tongue doesn't it?   The Abraxan were the horses used to pull the Beauxbaton carriage for the Triwizard tournament.   It might have been where my colleague pulled his name from, I haven't asked him.

I like the darkly humorous aspect of this story as well.   It is actually much easier to write this story than my other.   I don't know what that says about me!~Jim

atlantis-rob posted a comment on Thursday 1st February 2007 12:00am for With Claws at Your Back to Send a Chill Through the Night Air

Excellent update as usual. Good bits with the slight background on why collins is half a jerk due to what happened in his youth. Harry's air battle with the undead was very enjoyable and an exciting read for sure. The various treks to the up levels as they cleared em were entertaining. Awesome job on the letter to the order from bill. Cheers!!!!

JBern replied:

One reviewer was kind enough to praise me saying that she hadn't seen a story with such rich and believable OC's before.   I think it is their flaws and the tiny bits of info I hand out that help.   If I give you a paragraph or two on them every now and then, it makes them more believable and increases your emotional investment in them.

It also has the nice effect of making it more meaningful when I start eliminating them.   (Insert evil laughter here).

Thanks again~Jim