The Lie I've Lived
A House of Cards
By JBern
Reviews
amulder posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 8:19am for A House of Cards
Interesting start. Another take on a redo fic? Or something else? Hmmm.
Your Brit-picker will no-doubt turn Ollie's one finger salute into a proper two-finger one.
I like the quick/light chapter. Nice to have quick reading chapters every now and then.
Good snarky internal monologue from Harry, without being completely over the top. What other interesting abilities will he discover - apparition?
But what caused it - not the time turner, or it would affect Hermione also. Why would the Dementors do this?
Hmm, Dementors... is it NOT a redo fic? is it actually bits and pieces of other peoples souls being absorbed by Harry after tussling with and defeating all those dementors?
Hmm,
thanks
...art
JBern replied:
Sadly, no beta or britpicker on this one. The challenge I agreed to says I fly solo. After the story ends I will solicit the services of anyone who'd like to clean the story up for me.
The irony is it was his father that saved him at the lake...
Jim
Cary1 posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 8:11am for A House of Cards
Very nice.
You've got me reading three stories now!
JBern replied:
Thanks. Now if I could just win the lotto, I could write full time....
Jim
reimanr06 posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 8:06am for A House of Cards
sweet story... I can't say I've ever heard of this idea being written before. I look forward to reading it, especially if its the same quality as your other work.
JBern replied:
The storytelling should be, but my mechanics are lackluster and the challenge prohibits betas and britpickers, so we'll see.~Jim
Yojo posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 7:57am for A House of Cards
That looks very nice so far, but I am very interested to see how in high hells Harry got so smart so fast. The dementors didn't deposit a soul in him, he hasn't been possessed by Voldie, and he hasn't been possessed by a previous version of himself. My guess is something to do with the time turner, but I'm not sure how it did whatever it did. Keep up the good work! I eagerly await the next installment.
JBern replied:
Part of the irony is his father really did save him at the lake...
Glad you are enjoying it. Hope to continue to deliver a quality read.~Jim
curtis posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 7:56am for A House of Cards
this is a very nice start, definately one i'll keep my eye on
JBern replied:
Thanks. Next chapter in 1 week.~Jim
WNabors posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 7:53am for A House of Cards
Whoot - good story ya got here .Lookin sweet in that 1st. person way.
JBern replied:
Thanks. Next chapter in 1 week.~Jim
loralee posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 7:37am for A House of Cards
Way cool, great start, more please :)
I didn't notice any errors and i like the idea and am very curious at this point.
Harry know thing he shouldn't, is more mature, noticing girls and flirting. So i'll guess some sort of time travel and the future he wasnts to change is showing up in dreams?
Looking forward to more.
JBern replied:
Thank you. Things will become more apparent after chapter 2 is up next week. You should have your answer then...~Jim
zac posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 7:28am for A House of Cards
woah...great start...sharing a body with James Potter? different...
JBern replied:
Like I said things will clear up in chapter 2. It'll be out next Friday.~Jim
Daniel Hensley posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 7:25am for A House of Cards
From what I have read I love it. I think this could actually be a very intense story when you get a few more chapters into it. It has the possibility of being a HUGE story. This is the start of one of those stories that can go two or three hundred thousand words.
JBern replied:
Good lord I hope not. The challenge I'm doing says it has to be complete by August 1st. Though it could warrant a sequel.~Jim
Jamey posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 7:25am for A House of Cards
Oh, this is going to be *FUN*!!!
JBern replied:
Thanks. Next chapter in 1 week.~Jim
coronal posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 7:21am for A House of Cards
this is....interesting.
something of a combination of the two different Harrys so far, I find, in his attitude. We'll see what comes of it.
as for 3rd, 2nd, 1st POV, well why the hell not? :)
JBern replied:
And I'm doing it all at the same time. Though the swap between 2nd and 1st person was a bit difficult.~Jim
Jason Karr posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 6:57am for A House of Cards
are you going to hook Harry and Hermione up. looking forward to the next chapter
JBern replied:
Err, it's filed under Harry/Fleur for a reason. Next chapter in 1 week.~Jim
Black's Phoenix posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 6:45am for A House of Cards
Really liked this chapter, and I like the idea of this fic. I think that it will be really cool to see what will happen next. THis is going to be alot of fun.
JBern replied:
Thanks. Next chapter in 1 week. Glad you are enjoying it.~Jim
Tommy posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 6:40am for A House of Cards
LOVE IT! :P I'm really looking forward to the next chaps, so keep on.
May The Words Be With You!
Tommy
aka
Fanfix
JBern replied:
Thanks next chapter in 1 week. It's already mostly written.~Jim
Particle_Accelerator posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 6:37am for A House of Cards
liked the start, and you've got me intrigued. Didn't see anything major, plot-wise or style wise to be fixed. Looking forwards to more!
JBern replied:
Thanks. Next chapter in 1 week. Glad you are enjoying it.~Jim
Frank Hacklander posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 6:36am for A House of Cards
good start, very engaging. however, you're killing me! let's see. what's going to happen to harry in the jungle with or without luna? and, pray tell, what's going on with susan and harry. aarrrgghhh. must be some little bit of tom manifesting itself. the question is, what was the trigger? the time turner?
JBern replied:
The trigger will eventually become apparent. I'll write as quickly as I can on all 3 stories.~Jim
Lufio posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 6:28am for A House of Cards
Uh-huh! This is an interesting twist to the image of Harry being a clone of his father. Like a reverse Severitus. Kind of. In an Alice in Wonderland kind of way.
Okay, maybe not. Still, this is kind of intriguing. I'm curious as to what'll happen during the summer, and I can't wait for what you have in store for the Tri-Wizard tournament.
JBern replied:
You'll barely be able to recognize the tournament when I'm through with it.~Jim
Lourens posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 6:21am for A House of Cards
Your stories are a joy to read, and this looks damn promissing!
Now Snape will have a case when he says that Harry is just like his father *rofl* poor guy. :D
Imagine: "...just like your no good father!"
"At least I have a reason to act like I'm 15!You're still the same dark-obsessed bat-like hygiene-optional piece of dementor offal with dirty underwear Snivellus!"
JBern replied:
Just the angle I've been considering as well. Thanks for the chuckle.~Jim
Scott Sakraida posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 6:19am for A House of Cards
This is an interesting start to a story. I hope this is gonna be continued after the rest, because bungle is one of my favorites right now.
JBern replied:
It goes into the mix. Sorry. I need to have it done as part of the challenge before August 1st.~Jim
Carlos posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 8:21am for A House of Cards
JBern replied: