The Midnight Poster posted a comment on Sunday 10th June 2007 6:00pm for Closets and Secrets

Finally! A story where Harry takes on those Death Eaters during this event. Looking forward to what he does.

JBern replied:

Well he won't go charging in there blasting, but he's definitely going to do something.   Next chapter in 2 weeks.~Jim

tlslick posted a comment on Sunday 10th June 2007 5:36pm for Closets and Secrets

loved it cant wait for more
thank you for you time and effort
tlslick

JBern replied:

Thank you for reading and reviewing.~Jim

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Sunday 10th June 2007 5:26pm for Closets and Secrets

Ah, this is getting rather interesting and invovled. I suspect getting everything merged properly is still going to take time. I do admit, the Sorting Hat is an entertaining bit of habdashery.

Quite the interesting chapter here, with the dynamic tension between the older James and the young Harry in personality and preferences. How this settles out should be "fascinating".

JBern replied:

Glad you like that HJ is still and evolving person.   Obviously James Potter's knowledge of teenaged girls wasn't quite as useful as HJ had hoped.   I hope I can continue to impress you.~Jim

Musings of Apathy posted a comment on Sunday 10th June 2007 5:00pm for Closets and Secrets

That was excellent. Harry/James is really going around the bend with the women in this chapter. That sucks, all lead up and then the rug pulled out from under him. I would like to see the sorting hat song with influences from Harry/James. It could be interesting, if you can pull it off.

Thanks for writing.

Mike (MoA)

JBern replied:

Thanks for the review.   I appreciate it.   I don't know if I can do the Hat's song justice.   I'll play around with it in what little free time I seem to have nowadays and see what I can come up with.

Regards,

Jim

Prince Charon posted a comment on Sunday 10th June 2007 5:00pm for Closets and Secrets

You're very good at this. Just the right mix of funny and dramatic.

Thank you for the update.

More soon, please.

JBern replied:

Next update in 2 weeks.   I have to go help Neville whack someone in TFtCD.~Jim

draalder posted a comment on Sunday 10th June 2007 4:20pm for Closets and Secrets

I am liking this story just as much, if not more than Bungle; good job! I am not sure you even need to go through the whole sorting song though. We all have an idea of what Hat is like and if we have a lead in I am sure we all can fill in the blanks. The payoff for that part in the story is the reaction to it from everyone. Whatever you go with, I am sure it will be entertaining. Looking forward to your next chapter, take your time.

JBern replied:

Thank you very much for the review.   Next chapter is in 2 weeks.   Maybe I'll be able to craft a Sorting Hat song, but I won't fixiate on it.~Jim

Sterling posted a comment on Sunday 10th June 2007 4:00pm for Closets and Secrets

Wonderful work as always. I look forward to your next chapter :-)

JBern replied:

Thanks~Jim

tdougla posted a comment on Sunday 10th June 2007 3:28pm for Closets and Secrets

Great chapter, I agree that you moved quickly through the summer, but it was a part of the story that seems to be more set up/prolog for the rest of the plot. You did a good job of making sure we knew what was different from cannon in your story, and then kept moving without getting bogged down.

As for the song, I can think of a way to skip it that might be moderatly funny if you don't have a song planned out and don't want to take the time to write one. If you take the narrative right up to the point of the song and then cut away, you can then referece back to the song with out useing specific lyrics, letting us, the readers, use our imagination to fill in the blanks. For example (and I'm compleatly makeing this up as I go along):

"Oi Dean, what kind of twisted mind would think of doing THAT with a flobberworm!?"
"You're right Seamus, I'll never get that image out of my head as long as I live!"

I'm not sure why you would cut, perhaps something dramatic happens somewhere else, or HJ is distracted for some reaseon. Just a general thought and would get you out of composing a whole song if you didn't want to. Otherwise, keep up the good work!

JBern replied:

Thanks.   I'm glad you appreciate it.   I may even use some of your suggestions.   There's a good chance HJ may miss the sorting ceremony only to see a pair of newly sorted boys exiting saying 'Hey what was  word it used that rhymed with Delores?   I don't think I've ever heard that before?'

Jim

Greg Johnson posted a comment on Sunday 10th June 2007 3:22pm for Closets and Secrets

Another great chapter!! Can't wait for more. Keep up the great work.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Next chapter in 2 weeks.~Jim

gadriam posted a comment on Sunday 10th June 2007 3:21pm for Closets and Secrets

A complete riot!

Well, he sure does the best of a bad(ass) situation.
It would be fun to make him sort of "explore" Ginny's possibilities, but i think this partially failed casanova thing is too great. The real options he has are ones he just don't want. Life's like that, sometimes. Great job.

You don't have to write the song. Just write HJ's reactions to particularlely saucy lines and you'll be home (poetry)free.

Keep at it, polish Darkness off and start the new one.
I'm really looking forward to both the Dark conclusion and Turn Me Loose.

g

JBern replied:

Glad you enjoyed it.   I'm running out of steam after replying to all these reviews so forgive my brevity.   I'll do the song if I can do it justice.   If not, I'll use some innuendo and leave it up to everyone's fertile imagination.~Jim

david abbey1 posted a comment on Sunday 10th June 2007 3:04pm for Closets and Secrets

Hey Jim,
please oh please use the lyrics from this chapter! you've got me laughing my ass off already and its only ch. five! can't wait to see six. i swear, this site is addicting all the writers are the bomb!especially you!
bigD

JBern replied:

Maybe, if I can do it justice.   Otherwise, I won't hold up the chapter just to write a song.   Next chapter in 2 weeks.~Jim

Mark Blaine posted a comment on Sunday 10th June 2007 2:32pm for Closets and Secrets

Good work. I feel sorry for Ginny, I guess, but she kinda deserved it.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Ginny kind of gets a raw deal in my stories, but she has entire websites devoted to giving her her happily ever after, so I don't feel too bad.~Jim