HopelessFan posted a comment on Sunday 2nd November 2008 6:06am for Dancing in the Whirlwind

i was thrilled to see an update. i'm on pins and needles waiting for the "whirlwind" to hit, but i understand you aren't exactly being paid for this :-p

thanks for your time and energy in bringing this story alive for us.

JBern replied:

Glad you liked it.   More coming soon.~Jim

Ken Warner posted a comment on Sunday 2nd November 2008 5:06am for Dancing in the Whirlwind

Dear Jim,
great chapter, especially for an unbeta'd work, you pretty much do not seem to need them any more.

I liked the more mature and kinder Harry, with his help to Neville, Aimee and Fleur, as well as the conversation with Hermione.

thanks so much for sharing

JBern replied:

Considering that you're one of them, I definitely still need them, but my prose is improving.   Glad you appreciated the maturing version of HJ.~Jim

Lee Dickie posted a comment on Sunday 2nd November 2008 1:46am for Dancing in the Whirlwind

Another great chapter, thanks.

JBern replied:

Thanks for reviewing.~Jim

Ltank687 posted a comment on Saturday 1st November 2008 8:28pm for Dancing in the Whirlwind

awesome, been checking every day for an update. thanks!

JBern replied:

You can sign up for email alerts.   It's easier that way.   Thanks for the review.~Jim

Anthony May posted a comment on Saturday 1st November 2008 7:19pm for Dancing in the Whirlwind

J-Bern, I must say I love this story. I love Hat - you have given him a dimension that brings great depth and humor to the story. Fleur is wonderful - all your characters are great and few could match your story telling.(Not just in FanFiction but all authors, including NY Times BestSellers) Keep up the great work, can't wait for the next update to all of your works! - Anthony E. May

JBern replied:

Thanks for the compliments.   I hope you'll feel that way when Dead Eye finally makes it's debut and buy a copy.

I posted an original work on this site today.   Tell me what you thought of it when you get a chance.~Jim

kainboa posted a comment on Saturday 1st November 2008 7:14pm for Dancing in the Whirlwind

great chapter as usual, loved how Harry came clean with Dumbledore and then got all his expectations of how the meeting would go blown out of the water.

keep up the great work :)

JBern replied:

Glad you liked it.   Thanks for the review.~Jim

jeffstrauser@yahoo.com posted a comment on Saturday 1st November 2008 6:47pm for Dancing in the Whirlwind

Outstanding chapter!!!! So who did Lily cheat on James with???? I hope it wasn't snape that would just be wrong on all levels!!!! Will we be seeing Harry and Fleur getting together at some point???? Are Krum and Paulina dating or was she just a one time date???? I loved Harry's insults to Paulina and Krum all at the same time!!!! Do keep up the outstanding work and update soon please!!!!:):):):)

JBern replied:

Glad you liked it.   It was revealed in an earlier chapter that Remus and Lily had a brief fling shortly before James and Lily went into hiding.   Odds are yes since this is a HJ/Fleur ship.   Krum and Paulina?   Perhaps.

I put an original piece up on ffa today - hope you get a chance to enjoy it.~Jim

Kaerion posted a comment on Saturday 1st November 2008 6:40pm for Dancing in the Whirlwind

Another excellent chapter!

I have to admit that I've been wondering when HJ would confide in Dumbledore (and even if he would at all), so that conversation was a nice surprise. Assuming that he was honest, and I see no reason not to at this point, this Dumbledore is very close to how I see canon!Dumbledore, which was also a nice surprise. I have no idea how this story will turn out in the future, or even how long you plan on making it, but if HJ and Dumbledore do get to cooperate more closely after the Tournament is over, I can only imagine how awesome that will be. It's also becoming clear that Dumbledore has lost a lot of trust in Snape over the course of the year, which is nothing but great news. It's fairly obvious that having Snape out of his immediate control could end up being a bad thing, but having him *too* close (especially when he's also more or less trusted) could lead to even worse consequences, so overall, I'd say HJ's plan to get him out of Hogwarts (and hopefully into Azkaban or an early grave) will end up being a net positive.

I know I've mentioned it before, but you also keep impressing me with the slow build-up of HJ and Fleur's relationship. Something like that seems to be almost extinct in most fics these days, so it's a true pleasure! I will admit to being slightly impatient, and hoping that they'll actually get together soon, but I'm enjoying this too much to ever complain about it, and the way you've chosen is much more suitable anyway. And in combination with the relationships between HJ and his other friends (Hermione and Aimee in particular), and all the action, this is an incredibly wonderful fic on all levels.

As much as I've loved this fic from the very beginning, I actually didn't imagine that it would eclipse Bungle, but it has, and I can honestly say that this is now easily my most favorite WIP.

So thanks for writing, congratulations on yet another sale, and keep up the great work! :)

JBern replied:

Thanks for the compliments.   I am trying to realistically build a relationship between 14 yr old HJ and 17 yr old Fleur that doesn't involve the words soul bond or male veela.

Hopefully you enjoyed my take on the whole pureblooded Veela thing.

Now back to work on TML 10.

warpwizard posted a comment on Saturday 1st November 2008 4:58pm for Dancing in the Whirlwind

Good stuff. Much revelation. Good character interaction. Fic continues to grow on me, slowly.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Glad you liked it.~Jim

Jon posted a comment on Saturday 1st November 2008 4:48pm for Dancing in the Whirlwind

A rather maudlin chapter, but nontheless I sense that you're building up for the next "arc". What will be in the next chapter, the world wonders? =)

Thanks for updating!

JBern replied:

Thanks.   There are those pesky dragons in the forest to take care of...

Jonathan Langford posted a comment on Saturday 1st November 2008 3:18pm for Dancing in the Whirlwind

Very nice. I like Dumbledore-bashing as much as anyone, but it's nice to see that part finally reach what seems to be a point of resolution. I also really like Harry's conversation with Fleur.

This feels like it could be the ending of the story, actually. Not that I'm suggesting you should end it here, but it has some of that feel.

JBern replied:

Glad you liked it.   It's the end of a story arc, but not the end of the story.~Jim

Clell65619 posted a comment on Saturday 1st November 2008 2:38pm for Dancing in the Whirlwind

- Very nice. Love the party, especially HJ shutting down the Veela Diva... Asking if Krum was paying by the hour or had the whole evening... priceless.

JBern replied:

Glad you liked it.   I wonder what a Veela diva's going rates are?

Magus posted a comment on Saturday 1st November 2008 2:18pm for Dancing in the Whirlwind

Even though it is not one of the usually full of action chapters this one conveys much more than those, I specially liked the way frienship began between Fleur and Harry.


Thank you for another great chapter and I will be looking for the book, best of luck with that endevour

JBern replied:

Thanks.   As soon as I have a definite date for Dead Eye, I'll be shouting it from the hills.~Jim

Gardengirl posted a comment on Saturday 1st November 2008 1:35pm for Dancing in the Whirlwind

Cheers, great update! Very nice touches with the Yule Ball - lots of fun to read.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Glad you liked.   More coming soon.~Jim

matthew2c4u posted a comment on Saturday 1st November 2008 1:11pm for Dancing in the Whirlwind

Great chapter, Its intertwine the romance and action really improves the story.
i cant wait for the next Lie and TML
-Night

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Work on TML 10 begins soon.~Jim

MrRobertsIII posted a comment on Saturday 1st November 2008 1:07pm for Dancing in the Whirlwind

That was a bit of a surprise. I was expecting Krum with Hermione but this time he really was out for info on Harry.

Phineas's end was rather amusing.

The Head Boy enamored with the fourth year Gryffindor
-Cute reversal of Harry and the Head Girl

Are you charging Krum by the hour or is this a set fee?"
-Ouch.

They only procreate with non-magical humans.
-original. Never come across that idea in fanfic.

Love the slow buildup with Fleur.

JBern replied:

Glad you enjoyed all the little things in the story.   More coming soon.~Jim

Paladin11 posted a comment on Saturday 1st November 2008 1:02pm for Dancing in the Whirlwind

This was a good chapter, excellent character developement and a few important plot points explored.

i like your humble, admits to his mistakes Dumbledore- a big change from your Dumbledore in your other stories.

i am curious to know-will we ever find out how Harry got James' memories?

JBern replied:

I like to vary my characters between stories.     It keeps things fresh.   Perhaps yes, but probably not.

Thanks for the review.~Jim

Wolf550e posted a comment on Saturday 1st November 2008 12:05pm for Dancing in the Whirlwind

"Since I know you're paths did not cross" - your

"Now that or cards have" - our?

"The quick check of my word alliance shows" - huh?

"And what is there punishment" - their

Great chapter, but the scroll bar makes it look short. Dumbledore's reaction was a surprise. The Harry/Fleur moment was good. The theory on how Veela breed is plausible. The Black headmaster's fate was lulzy.

JBern replied:

Thanks for pointing out the errors.   I'll fix them when I get some free time.~Jim

AgentScorpion posted a comment on Saturday 1st November 2008 11:35am for Dancing in the Whirlwind

The sudden shift in Dumbledore from the avoid list to the ooh isn't he a nice guy really list is rather jarring, and spoils this chapter to an extent.

Also in Chapter 10, Every Rose Has A Thorn the following quote is made:

Dumbledore stands, "Thank you, Igor. Indeed, the Puzzle Room is an enchanter’s challenge that will test the resourcefulness and problem-solving skills of our champions. They may brew potions and craft items to aid them in retrieving the Dagger of Wiglaf. This momentous event will take place the day following the Yule Ball.

This is at odds with the sequence that actually happens.

JBern replied:

Yeah, it's a gaffe on my part.   I always intended for the puzzle room to occur before the ball and just made that error.   Its on my list of things to be fixed.

HJ knew he couldn't avoid DD forever.   Realistically, HJ knows DD needs him more than he needs SS, so it put him in a good position to deal with DD.

Immortalitis posted a comment on Saturday 1st November 2008 11:20am for Dancing in the Whirlwind

*Cheers*

Truly, an amazing chapter. Some excellent political intrigue in conjunction with some nice Harry/ Fleur towards the end.

I was actually expecting the medal to be a portkey, to be frank.

"The fathers shall eat sour grapes, and the childrens teeth will be set on edge" seems to be a fair quote concerning how the memories bias Harry and make him more jaded.

Regards
Immo/ SA

JBern replied:

Glad you liked the chapter even without any knock down drag out fights.

Odds are those will be coming soon...

Jim