Fenris Ulf posted a comment on Friday 12th December 2008 4:23am for The Dykstra Shuffle

hehehe Loved the scene the the end with dumbledore, fawkes and Harry. The medical scene was great as well wish I had some of those spells and salves to use in the feild. I would question the possibility of infection transmission when swapping out the lungs.

JBern replied:

Let's just assume magic trumps things like that and tissue rejection.   My hat is off to you, since it sounds like you are a first responder.

Regards,

Jim

romero posted a comment on Friday 12th December 2008 4:22am for The Dykstra Shuffle

This was interesting and I liked the clever way HJ got the egg from the dragon (Using the Rolling Stones 'Paint It Black' was great). He was robbed of points just like cannon. The medical emergency was realistic and I thought the idea of the lung switch coming from Dark Magic just shows how DM can be useful too. Very nice job as usual.

JBern replied:

Well, they weren't impressed with his use of household magic like Dumbledore was.

Glad you liked it.   More coming soon.~Jim

Wolf550e posted a comment on Friday 12th December 2008 4:20am for The Dykstra Shuffle

>>when the time cones to go public<< - comes

>>Let's a healer feel<< - remove the apostrophe

>>before it fully regains conscious<< - consciousness

>>older witches were your more your taste<< - extra "were"

>>Aimee's rational<< - you want "rationale", the noun.

Some good lines. magical ER was good and original.

JBern replied:

Thanks for the error check.~Jim

Cuey posted a comment on Friday 12th December 2008 4:20am for The Dykstra Shuffle

Silly me. I somehow thought the Dykstra shuffle was some kind of dance when I read the title. Krum winning the competition and ruining more HJ/Fleur interaction is offset by the irish national team jersey. All in all, a great chapter.

JBern replied:

Glad I can still keep you on your toes.~Jim

grovepjp posted a comment on Friday 12th December 2008 4:12am for The Dykstra Shuffle

Hell,

did i have a good laugh.

I have read this one and the other 2 about four times and every time it is as if i find something i missed.

Keep it up.
g

JBern replied:

Thanks for the compliments.~Jim

Wonderbee31 posted a comment on Friday 12th December 2008 3:58am for The Dykstra Shuffle

Wow, and awesome chapter filled with one of the most intense versions of the Dragon sequence that I've read of before. I could feel the pain HJ was as well as Aimee's, who he likely does have some feeling for now, and the way he handled himself was brilliant. Looking forward to what will happen next time with them visiting the ship and what this will mean if he meets Giest again, and the follow up with hopeffuly Aimee getting to at least comeback, if unable to compete.

JBern replied:

Thank you for the compliments.   Aimee's rehab will continue into the sequel - not even magic works those level of miracles that quick.~Jim

Banner posted a comment on Friday 12th December 2008 3:46am for The Dykstra Shuffle

That was heart-pounding. I reread the scene from the moment Aimee entered the ring to the end of the chapter three times. It packs quite a punch.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   I'm glad you enjoyed it.~Jim

metrobluejay posted a comment on Friday 12th December 2008 3:34am for The Dykstra Shuffle

Good chapter again, looking forward to more.

That said I loved the interactions between Harry and Fleur and am going to enjoy what happens when she learns what Harry did for Aimee.

The thing that bugged me though is that you have Krum winning the whole thing. I'm sure that there is a reason for this but meh.

Also are you going to keep the original tasks as they were? You already have the dragons, what about the Lake and the Maze?

JBern replied:

The lake and the maze will most likely be different if I use them at all.   Krum hasn't won and event yet, he was due.~Jim

M2J MandalorianJedi posted a comment on Friday 12th December 2008 3:25am for The Dykstra Shuffle

Nice! Your fics keep getting better and better as they progress. It's good to see the Harry/Fleur interaction, though you have plenty of time in 4th year and even more beyond to get them together.

Plus, there's the fact that Harry isn't perfect and he makes his mistakes as noted from his conversation with Remus.

Hope the reconcile soon, though I don't see it happening for some time.

JBern replied:

Thanks for the compliment.   I like a hero who has his flaws.   More coming soon.~Jim

MrRobertsIII posted a comment on Friday 12th December 2008 3:21am for The Dykstra Shuffle

After years of reading HP fanfic, it was a pleasure to read a very original take on the dragon challenge. Also, nice to see it go horrible. The medical scene was a treat.

Poor Lupin. Always fun to see HJ lose his cool. More please.

So, has the golem the Hat rides been repaired or upgraded? Since it is still rather large, I'm going with repaired.

What a simple and nasty prank to play on the twins! Thanks for making them HJ's enemies. 99.9% of fanfic has them as friends, and this makes for a needed change.

JBern replied:

Glad you enjoyed it.   The golem has just been repaired at this point.~Jim

dogbertcarroll posted a comment on Friday 12th December 2008 3:14am for The Dykstra Shuffle

Dumbledore was in rare form there. Great chapter. The prank on the twins was evil yet harmless, if you don't count the mental scars.

JBern replied:

Glad you liked it.   Not too many comments on the prank.   I guess it's a bit overshadowed by everything else.~Jim

Clell65619 posted a comment on Friday 12th December 2008 2:51am for The Dykstra Shuffle

- Ok, wow. That was about the most intense magical medical scene I've ever read in any fic. Well done.

- I love how you've made Karkaroff into the magical world's East German judge...

JBern replied:

Thanks.   It's always good to be recognized by other high caliber authors.~Jim

morriganscrow posted a comment on Friday 12th December 2008 2:49am for The Dykstra Shuffle

From an ex-nurse - excellent medical emergency!
Great chapter, and this continues to be a brilliant story.

JBern replied:

I'm glad I could impress someone who has experience in the field.~Jim

borsikk posted a comment on Friday 12th December 2008 2:40am for The Dykstra Shuffle

Ohh, another excellent chapter - your updates always make my day!

I hope your novel will come out as an ebook as well, so we poor Europeans can enjoy it too? I for one are already lined up and waiting to buy it...

Cheers,
Boris

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Glad you enjoyed it.   The collection of short stories will be available in ebook format.   More info on that when available.~Jim

uthamm posted a comment on Friday 12th December 2008 2:40am for The Dykstra Shuffle

OMG. You owe me a keyboard for: "Too bad Hat isn't here. We could be at war by the time the weekend was over." and "so perhaps your physician can handle the cranial-rectal extraction".

Funniest.Lines.Ever.

Very nice - the interactions (Harry/Twins, Harry/Amiee, Harry/Fluer, Harry/Lupin) were perfect. The interactions mixed with the magic make the story.

JBern replied:

I'll try and come up something even funnier for the next chapter.   Sorry about the keyboard.~Jim

Jon posted a comment on Friday 12th December 2008 2:32am for The Dykstra Shuffle

I would pay good money to read about Aimee's and Fleur's upcoming conversation with HJ.... =)
The medical scene is gripping and had me totally on the edge. Without a doubt this is a kickass chapter! =)

JBern replied:

Hopefully, I'll deliver on some conversation next chapter.~Jim

dic posted a comment on Friday 12th December 2008 2:26am for The Dykstra Shuffle

well, maybe harry being such a martyr will make fleur rethink her opinion of him as a little boy...

all in all, nice chapter. a little bit naive of harry to think that his approach to the dragon would win him this round, but then again, when it was just him and fleur in the bet, both winning and losing would have been okay...
so, how's it look with your original work? is that now nearly done and you get back "fulltime" to fanfiction? (I know this sounds a little unappreciative... but just tell me you put some of that humour in your original work and I'll buy it...)
so.. nice chapter, thx.
cya dic

JBern replied:

Well remember what Remus said - James often did things based on what amused him the most rather than the best solution.

I don't plan on tackling any original fiction for the moment so we'll see how much time I can devote to ff with that new daughter of mine.~Jim

Trscroggs posted a comment on Friday 12th December 2008 2:21am for The Dykstra Shuffle

I thought it was very intresting myself, and makes a lot of sense from what little we actually know about the broader wizarding culture.

First rate chapter, I'll sit here and patiently wait for the next.

Oh, and because I forgot to say it when it came out, I LOVE the puzzle box events.

JBern replied:

Glad you liked it.   Thanks for the compliment on the previous chapter.~Jim

Asad posted a comment on Friday 12th December 2008 2:13am for The Dykstra Shuffle

Very nice, Jim. I had to read slowly to prolong the time it took to complete the chapter. :D

The medical part was a nice and rather unique touch. Perhaps Madam Beaucourt would be more agreeable once she has understood what happened. It will also be intriguing how this affects the friendship/relationship between Aimee and Harry.

Since Krum won, I eagerly await to read whether the Poltergeist on the Durmstrang ship takes some revenge or not.

Keep up the good work and update soon. :)

JBern replied:

I think you'll get your wish on the boat.   Next chapter should be coming soon.~Jim

Apocalypse Thou posted a comment on Friday 12th December 2008 1:45am for The Dykstra Shuffle

I loved the chapter. Having just started (and finishing) watching House, the medical side of magic is now very interesting to read and unfortunately rarely done... I suppose Doctors have more important things to do than write fanfiction.

I'm definately looking forward to the next chapter and the reactions from the French at Harry doing what he did to save Aimee.

JBern replied:

Thank you for the compliment.   I'm a big fan of House as well.   Next chapter will be coming soon.~Jim