Taegeous posted a comment on Wednesday 25th February 2009 11:10am for The Geist and the Grotto

Great chapter. Disappointed that we didn't see the twins getting a good beating, but they are aren't really central to the story. And you more than made up for it with the ghost fight. Very good point about the ghosts dying during horrible and violent times. In all truthfulness, would anyone really want to meet a ghost?

JBern replied:

Glad you liked the ghost fight.   I wanted to make it memorable.

My book details on www.jimbernheimer.com.

LifeScientist posted a comment on Wednesday 25th February 2009 10:55am for The Geist and the Grotto

Jim

Great job as always. I really liked how you moved H and F's relationship forward, giving it time to grow and finding a way to advance things that was reasonable given their experiences so far in the tournament.

Looking forward to the rest of this and definitely agree with your current prioritization scheme.
Matt

JBern replied:

Thanks for the compliments.   Next chapter in about 10 days.

Book details at www.jimbernheimer.com

Crys posted a comment on Wednesday 25th February 2009 9:06am for The Geist and the Grotto

Thanks for smacking Victor down. At least as far as the TWT goes.

I'm sure Victor will try to paint Harry and Fleur in a bad light regarding the bet. Easy out: "We made an honorable bet. Once he began to act dishonorably (uninviting McG, going for psychological torture against Fleur) about it, he relinquished the right to get our cooperation."

Why didn't Harry or Fleur spike the food with emetics? Or something even worse?

Hmm. Killing the Geist. Interesting move. Also shows an unexplored side of the resident ghosts.

Ah, and finally the realistic possibility of H/F comes out.

JBern replied:

Glad you enjoyed it.   I'm thinking of doing a Fall of House Usher on the DS boat.   We'll see how it goes.

You and me need to talk about Zombies sometime soon.~Jim

Anthony May posted a comment on Wednesday 25th February 2009 8:28am for The Geist and the Grotto

You are truly a Master and a Genius writer and story teller - your fight scenes really set the standard and your imagination obviously knows no bounds. The development of the relationship between Harry and Fleur is perfect. I am never disappointed and can't wait for the next update.

JBern replied:

Thank you for the compliments.   Next chapter in about 10 days.~Jim

My book details on www.jimbernheimer.com.

MarinePotterfan posted a comment on Wednesday 25th February 2009 7:57am for The Geist and the Grotto

Another great chapter, I have really enjoyed the plot of this story. This has become my favorite story you have written.

Thanks for writing
MPF

JBern replied:

Glad you liked it.   If you try my book, and I hope you do, let me know what you think of Lieutenant Armchair.

Next chapter in 10 days.~Jim

keebler_elmo posted a comment on Wednesday 25th February 2009 7:38am for The Geist and the Grotto

Congrats on the story collection! This was an excellent chapter. In particular, I loved the conflict with the Poltergeist and I really reallyl hope that he somehow brings it up to Krum or Karkov about how he destroyed it. Great stuff and keep up the good work..

JBern replied:

Considering how attached the Geist was to the DS ship, I'm thinking of doing a Fall of House Usher riff on it.   Next chapter in 10 days.

Regards,

Jim

Book details on www.jimbernheimer.com

Magnificent the Destroyer Lord posted a comment on Wednesday 25th February 2009 6:33am for The Geist and the Grotto

Great story as always - when in April will the E-book version be available? Are the spells (i.e. spirit shackles) considered "Necromancy" (death magic) or "ectomancy" (spirit magic)?

Thanks, by the way, for the connection to Meteoric Shipyards on FF.net; seeing the "rhinomagus" wasn't quite as enjoyable as the scenes in "Out of Africa"... *snickers* On Tantor!!! *rides off on rhino*

M*T*D*L*

JBern replied:

E-Book available no later than April 1st.   It will probalby be on Smashwords.com and Payloadz.com.

Glad you enjoyed Luna's Hubby.   Next chapter of this in about 10 days.~Jim

Muad'Dib posted a comment on Wednesday 25th February 2009 3:05am for The Geist and the Grotto

Ta tata ta ta taaaaa!

There we are, good things come to those who are patient! An excellent chapter as usual, mate. Unexpectedly early for an update but all the better.

Please do us Brits a huge favour; if HJ ever gets right pissed off at Fleur, which is bound to happen with their tempers, have him use some proper Cockney. Maybe write her a little Valentine's note in Cockney Rhyming Slang. If that doesn't do her head in, haha...

I have been a fan of your writing for a very long time now and will most definitely visit Amazon in the nearby future.

As for bribes, none will be needed. However, I do look forward to your interpretation of Harry the Seer! Do you have a timetable on that one? From the sound of it, it will trump The Hat in the funny department. No pressure of course.

Cheers mate

Ps.

You've got a 'Fluer' at the end of the chapter, right after the snog, erm sorry about that, kiss.

JBern replied:

I don't know if I can do Cockney Rhyming Slang, but I'm sure HJ will get in a few good natured jabs at Fleur.   Hope you get my book and enjoy it.   If shipping is too expensive, I'll have an e-book available soon.   Just want to make certain that those that order the book have a chance to receive it.~Jim

Ph34r_n0_3V1L posted a comment on Wednesday 25th February 2009 1:34am for The Geist and the Grotto

Awesome Chapter.

I can't wait to see the fall out for Durmstrang over the fact that their geist tried to off the people ahead of Vikki in the tournament.

JBern replied:

Wait until I do a Fall of House Usher on the DS ship since the Geist is gone...

skulLXeon posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 7:08pm for The Geist and the Grotto

I have to say.... two days late as i am... that this chapter is filled with awesomesauce! And, damn if i kinda saw the dead geist coming... =) awesome job this chapter.... see you at either TML or the next Lie.... =)

JBern replied:

Hopefully I have more awesomesauce on order.   Next chapter coming in about 10 days.~Jim

Book details on www.jimbernheimer.com

whatareyouevensaying posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 2:34pm for The Geist and the Grotto

I'm not entirely sure how it happened, but I got out of the habit of leaving reviews on this site, possibly the place most deserving of a huge number of reviews.

This story, like your others, ranks in the highest echelon of fanfiction in my mind. Your ideas and execution (as well as the help from the AFC) are beyond superb. This story, in particular, blew all other AU fourth year stories out of the water.

Another huge positive, of course, is the way you manage to show us a side of every character that we hardly ever (or never) see. And everyone develops along with the story.

Now, I'll attempt to tell you what I'm looking forward to the most in future chapters:

1. Bill's comeuppance, whether it lasts a paragraph or half of a chapter.
2. The next task (which Harry might no longer be a shoe-in to win).
3. Well...more next time.

Looking forward to more.

JBern replied:

Thank you for the compliments on my plot and characterization.   I'll do my best to give you more entertainment in roughly 10 days.~Jim

Meanwhile I have a book out.   Haven't you heard?   Details on www.jimbernheimer.com

scaryisntit posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 2:11pm for The Geist and the Grotto

Nice to see quite a few minor plot points brought back and ended in what was probably the best chapter so far. The fight with the Hogwarts Ghosts (nice touch with Myrtle coming in) and the Giest was fantastic, and definitely a new sight for me. It wasn't quite how I pictured Fleur finding out about HJs Animagus form, but it worked.

I liked the tidbit about Fleur wondering if she was going to fast for HJ. Made me chuckle to myself.

As always, stellar writing. You kept me hooked from beginning to end.

Oh, and while I like TML, I concur that Lie is currently the more interesting one. If you have the momentum on Lie, there's no point in forcing TML to work for you.

Regardless, I'm looking forward to either of your updates.


scaryisntit

JBern replied:

Glad I could keep you guessing.   Thanks for the review.   Next chapter in roughly 10 days.~Jim

msgupy posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 12:17pm for The Geist and the Grotto

Merlin! I love this story.
I shall be going to your website shortly to purchase your e-book. Your writing is superb
Thank you.

JBern replied:

The e-book won't be available until probably April 1st.   I want to give people who have ordered the book a chance to receive it.~Jim

Sect posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 12:09pm for The Geist and the Grotto

Great chapter. Like the reviewer before me, I was also surprised that the ghosts were able to destroy the Geist; however, it's not unreasonable, and makes sense considering that very few things can permamently harm a ghost in HP (as explained by Nick, who can only be decaptiated by a ghost). In any case, it was an awesome way for them to defeat the Geist, and I have a newfound appreciation for Binns (though, that will likely change the next time he instructs).

It should be interesting to see the events of the next day: Harry's and Fleur's relationship (might) become public, Harry doing the challenge with a fractured leg (though it shouldn't be too bad, since it's only teleporting darts), the fallout from the Geist's death... The reactions from people who find out that Harry and Fleur are, for the most part, steady should be interesting (Ginny, Melinda, and the tabloids mostly).

Hm. I wonder how Gabby'll react when she finds out about Monsieur Pronghorn...

JBern replied:

You'll see what happens in about 10 days.   I'm thinking Fall of House Usher for the DS ship.

Gabby and Monsieur P?   That should be interesting.

Book details on www.jimbernheimer.com

Cuey posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 11:14am for The Geist and the Grotto

Wow, that was pretty soon for another update, not that I'm complaining. My book is supposed to arrive tomorrow but I am pretty busy on Wednesdays, so hopefully I can finish it on Thursday and get a review up on Amazon.

On to the actual review: Probably my favorite thing about your writing as a whole is that there is the degree of originality in there. Even if something has been done before, you generally manage to take it in an unexpected way. Case in point, HJ presumably funding WWW but this time due to blackmail rather than out of generosity. Semi-jerky twins is very refreshing to read.

So it was Alice who received the elixir? I assume we will be seeing more developing there, that should prove interesting. Especially if HJ has to slap some sense into Augusta.

I thought HJ handled serving duties about as well as anyone could be expected to. I don't know what you have in mind for HJ's revenge for Krum or what else the spyfly will uncover but I expect it to be good.

It is interesting that the Ghosts could actually kill the 'Geist, although I suppose even in canon Peeves was afraid of the Baron. There will undoubtedly be some backlash from that.

A lot to look forward to next chapter, I've been waiting to see how you would do the apparition/target shooting contest for a while now.

JBern replied:

Review as soon as you can.   I need all the help I can get.  

Thank you for the compliments on the chapter.   I'll have another in about 10 days.   I'm glad you appreciate the twist on the twins getting money.

Regards,

Jim

Matthew Sands posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 10:41am for The Geist and the Grotto

So, do you prefer understatement, or over-effusive gushing when people complement your work?

Option 1: Nice(alternatively, Well Done.)

Option 2: Hoy crap that was seven shades of awesome! We're not worthy! We're not worthy!


I have to say, I was wondering how you were going to plausibly get Harry to reveal his form without Fleur acquiring a tasteful assortment of intestine themed garters afterwards. Not if, but how, and you did not disappoint in that regard.

Is the assorted cast of pests going to wise up sometime before their otherwise inevitable demises?

JBern replied:

Option 3 - Jim, I loved it so much I'm going to www.jimbernheimer.com to find out how to buy your collection...

Thanks for the review.   I'll have another chapter in 10 days.~Jim

midevildle posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 10:32am for The Geist and the Grotto

I don't normally review (to my shame), but I do enjoy everything you've written that I've read.

So I will be getting your short story collection, I did just purchase a Kindle though so I'll wait for that version. Keep us updated on your releases.

JBern replied:

http://www.amazon.com/Horror-Humor-and-Heroes/dp/B001U3Y94Y/ref=sr_1_1?ie=UTF8&s=digital-text&qid=1235672403&sr=1-1

That's the link for the Kindle version.   I priced it at $7, but Amazon is discounting it to $5.60.   I hope you enjoy.~Jim

Bedrup posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 10:19am for The Geist and the Grotto

Great. Just great. Like the new byplay with an informed Dumbledore. How come this isn ´t up on fanfiction.net yet?

JBern replied:

Something was wrong with ff.net.   I finally got it up there.   Glad you liked it.~Jim

MOD posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 10:00am for The Geist and the Grotto

Brilliant as always, JBern! You are a brilliant writer :)

JBern replied:

Thanks for the compliments.   I'll have another chapter in about 10 days.~Jim

PS - book details at www.jimbernheimer.com

Militis posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 9:38am for The Geist and the Grotto

Awesome! This story just keeps getting better and better. I can't wait for the next chapter!

When your short story collection is release in e-book format, I'll probably buy it. I don't know what Kindle is, and I don't think it works in Linux anyway.

JBern replied:

Ebook format by April 1st.   Kindle is Amazon's wireless book reader.   I want to make certain that those who buy the books, have a chance to receive them.~Jim