The Lie I've Lived
The Geist and the Grotto
By JBern
Reviews
Wolf550e posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 8:20am for The Geist and the Grotto
"during the tournament then it does with" - than
"I was always resented" - grammar
"I've all but run Snape out of this school" - ran
"and, frankly, I what I" - extra I
So Harry planned to lure the geist out of the ship? How will he duel with a broken knee? Great action, BTW! I'm not so sure about the romance though. The ball scene was better, IMO.
JBern replied:
Thanks for the grammar corrections. HJ didn't plan to lure the Geist off the boat, but he was prepared for the eventuality.~Jim
Meteoricshipyards posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 8:17am for The Geist and the Grotto
The fight with the giest was good. Will Karkaroff blame Krumm for the missing demon?
Interesting fallout on the amulet. Wonder if it will be a problem for Harry to fix.
Unique in fanfiction - Harry running low on money! That might have implications, too.
Not sure if the broken leg will hurt him in the next event. I can see Krumm getting pissed and trying to hex Harry off a high platform. Cheating has always been part of the tournament, you know.
And finally - Alice. Yea! I'm glad she's starting to get better. And an interesting idea - to reverse engineer the elixer of life. It was created over six hundred years ago. Potion theory and practice has advanced a little in the intervening time.
Thanks for a wonderful story!
Tom A.
JBern replied:
Wait until I do the Fall of House Usher on the DS ship. HJ will have to do some serious work to sanctify the grotto. Yeah, HJ has a credit crunch at the moment (sounds hauntingly familiar).
Next chapter in 10 days. Details on my book at www.jimbernheimer.com.
baumgal2 posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 7:53am for The Geist and the Grotto
Thanks for the update, I found it to be very enjoyable!
JBern replied:
Thank you for the compliment. More coming soon.~Jim
Shepherd posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 7:28am for The Geist and the Grotto
An excellent chapter with a few great plot developments. Nice to see the Harry/Fleur relationship developing while getting an update on the Longbottom situation and learning about the next task. The fallout of the destruction of the Durmstrang Geist should also be interesting.
JBern replied:
Hope that I can continue to impress you with this story. Naturally, I need to plug my book. (www.jimbernheimer.com)
Next chapter in about 10 days.~Jim
Lathena posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 7:19am for The Geist and the Grotto
Excellent chapter. They finally kissed! several times. And now Harry has fewer secrets from her so increased chance of repeat.
I always enjoy the insults and Krum was a fool to believe HJ would take anything lying down.
The battle with geist was great too. I love your smart and powerful, but not superpowered-and-unstopable Harry. That would get boring. research, allies, and a clear head make for a much more entertaining read.
I can't wait for more!
JBern replied:
Thank yo for the compliments. Hopefully, I can continue to impress you. I'll have my next opportunity to do that in about 10 days.
Meanwhile you can check out my book. Details at www.jimbernheimer.com. :-)
coolboy55 posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 7:10am for The Geist and the Grotto
I love this story. This chapter was awesome. I wish I had your gift for comedy. Thank you for getting the bet out of the way cuz I was worried you were going to have some really angsty cliff hanger chapter where Harry is in deep trouble without it being resolved in that chapter. I love how you are finally getting Harry and Fleur together for real. Please have Harry off Voldy in this story. Please don't wait for the sequel. With your talent you shouldn't have to much trouble coming up with many humorous, non-angsty, action packed material for the sequel. I look forward to more exciting chapters of this fic.
JBern replied:
I haven't even had Voldy recreated yet and you're wanting me to off him? Sadly, that's going to wait until the sequel.
Next chapter in about 10 days.~Jim
DvorakQ posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 7:05am for The Geist and the Grotto
Further bribes? Yay! HHH should be arriving today (hurrah for amazon prime), keep us readers updated on Dead Eye!
This chapter in particular re-affirms my partiality of this fic above all others. I definitely would encourage you to put TML(which I think is excellent, but at the moment doesn not have me on tenterhooks) on a short hiatus and continue to focus on this series if at all possible. The H/F interaction was topnotch, even better executed than my expectations. The ghost scenes were superb, I especially like your bloody baron. He exudes a sense of gravitas that makes me hope that HJ will be able to redeem his forefather. Binns was particularly amusing, I'm actually sorta suprised that he would be lucid enough to be present for the geist.
All in all, I really really appreciate your efforts and hope that when you do make it big, you'll continue to make a little room for us online readers.
JBern replied:
Thanks again for the review of HHH. Next chapter in 10 days. Hopefully, it will impress you just as much.~Jim
riegert8 posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 5:55am for The Geist and the Grotto
interesting chapter
JBern replied:
Thanks. Next chapter in 10 days.~Jim
Zicou posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 5:44am for The Geist and the Grotto
Too great! I can't wait to see the Durmstang reaction (and krum's one) when harry is going to tell them!
That was an other awesome one so ...
continuuuuuuuuue!
Z.
JBern replied:
I'll tttttttttttttttttttttttrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrryyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
SerendipitousNightcrawler posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 5:43am for The Geist and the Grotto
Wonderful chapter. Thanks for finally telling us who Harry gave the elixir to as well as not making it a "quick fix".
I was surprised to see Draco there after receiving the Mark and whatnot. Krum may be scum, but he's plenty media savvy and I find it hard to imagine that he'd want to have Draco's reputation within the same walls as him if he could avoid it. McGonagall was less of a surprise, though I agree with Harry that Snape or Karkaroff must have had something to do with that as I don't think she's that gullible.
That said, I think that the rest of the evening was magnificently done and the pronghorn was very apropos to Krum's style.
I also have to say that I feel like the Hat is nearing the point where Harry or DD is going to have to knock him down a few pegs pretty soon. Seems like his new body has gone to non-existent head more than a tad. And that would be a confrontation I would love to see.
Thoroughly enjoying the story, I can't wait for the next installment.
JBern replied:
Krum was also looking for any edge to get under HJ's skin. Since there was no press, there was no risk, or at least Krum thinks that....
I don't believe in instant fixes even with magic.
Next chapter in about 10 days.~Jim
DiscountNinja posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 5:24am for The Geist and the Grotto
YES! :D Woo! :D Great going JBern! :D this is perhaps one of the best chapters yet :D also, I loved the last scene - we get some kick-ass bits with the ghosts (much under used characters as you've just proved :D), followed by some lovin' :D
I gotta' say, that scene was perfect :D I find so many wirters, when they get down to that crucial scene, really can't do it - they just can't pull it off. In this case, my worries are completely put aside :D it was a shock, but a fantastic one :D and, more importantly, it was bloody fantastic :D the tone of that scene felt just right considering the rest of the story - not overly romantic, and set to a background of difficulty, but sweet and fun all the same :D
JBern replied:
Well I have to credit AFC for helping me out here and making the scene as good as it was.
Next chapter in 10 days. Meanwhile, go check out my book! Book details on www.jimbernheimer.com.
Tumshie posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 5:20am for The Geist and the Grotto
A wonderful addition to a unique story, thank you for writing
JBern replied:
Thanks. Next chapter in about 10 days.~Jim
Nights_Silhouette posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 5:12am for The Geist and the Grotto
A great chapter, keept it up.
JBern replied:
I'll try. Hopefully, next chapter won't be a let down. Look for it in 10 days.~Jim
matthew2c4u posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 4:14am for The Geist and the Grotto
Awesome chapter, this is matt/night, I really enjoyed chapter and im looking forward to recieving my copy of HHH
JBern replied:
Don't forget to review it on Amazon when you're done.~Jim
kate19 posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 4:08am for The Geist and the Grotto
you take your time writing and i will take time to read it! and review ofcourse to tell you that this is an amazing chapter!! nice and long. bye
JBern replied:
Thanks Kate. Next chapter in about 10 days.~Jim
grovepjp posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 3:37am for The Geist and the Grotto
Perfect as usual.
Will wait for the E-Book version of your other books.
Lugging around a paperback is so yesterday.
Keep it up.
yours
JBern replied:
Yes. The e-book will be available no later than April 1st. I want to give the people who ordered the book a chance to receive it.~Jim
Asad posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 2:58am for The Geist and the Grotto
Very nice chapter! I enjoyed it and it's good to see Harry and Fleur together. This will make this story even more interesting.
Congrats on being published! Best of luck with it all.
JBern replied:
Thanks. Next chapter in about 10 days.~Jim
amulder posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 2:53am for The Geist and the Grotto
Good Job, Jim.
I was waiting for a battle or bloodbath to start on the boat, and you surprised me by NOT having one there.
And then you surprised us again by having the Hogwarts ghosts deal out mayhem on the Durmstrang poltergeist. Again, totally surprising to this reader. Never considered it. And of course, a perfect solution for Nick! Never occurred to me that since he's a ghost, then another ghost would have to be the one to deal that blow.
Now I'm forgetting what deal HJ made with the Baron. I'll have to go dig it up.
And I'll have to disagree with HJ, yes this actually was the best time/way to tell about the Pronghorn. With all the kerfuffle it nicely distracted her, gave her some focus, showed Harry being a hero again, and other such things to help her see more than just the "little" betrayal. Not to mention I notice that it has been a long time (at least in chapters, not sure about book-time) since he visited her as such.
It's a minor point, but I would be curious to see resolution to how Minerva was tricked into not attending, and some fallout on that behalf.
And it's odd to call this refreshing, but in fanon terms, Victor is so often a minor but noble character. So I find it rather refreshing to see him portrayed as such a slimeball -- and a well plotted, fully rounded character of a slimeball as well.
Maybe it would be best for HJ and Fleur to not take credit for dealing with the geist. Better to just smile mysteriously and keep quiet? Hmm?
Interesting end to the Weasley twins' feud as well, assuming it really is the end. Again, I'd have to backtrack a bit in the chapters to see if I can discern what it was they really heard. I note that you didn't actually reveal details of they oath they signed. And yeah, I can see Dumbledore's point. I'm rather curious to see how Albus dealt with Bill, or not.
And that's long enough.
thanks for the cracking great story, Jim.
...art
JBern replied:
I'm glad I can keep you on your toes. HJ must sell the land granted to the Baron by Henry the Second for killing Becket. Ask for forgiveness from the current Archbishop of Canterbury and make a tithe of contrition on behalf of the Bloody Baron.
Too often Viktor is an "awe shucks" version of Tiger Woods. I wanted cocky, arrogant NBA star instead. The ultimate competitor.
Thanks for the long review. Next chapter in 10 days.~Jim
uthamm posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 2:44am for The Geist and the Grotto
Awesome. Just . . awesome. The Rita article was classic and right on tone. Krum is an ass - can we please have him taken out? I will be interested to see what the consequences of McGonagill skipping out will be. Loved Harry's interaction with the younglings - ran circles around them. Tender Harry/Fluer interaction . . . kudos all around.
All this plus the Ghost Battle for the win!
I will have to re-read the interaction with the twins . . not too clear if Harry really did oblivate them or just played at it . . might just be me.
Thanks for sharing!
JBern replied:
Yes, HJ obliviated them. Glad you liked the chapter. I'll have another in about 10 days.~Jim
Immortalitis posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 9:26am for The Geist and the Grotto
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