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MrRobertsIII posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 2:01am for The Geist and the Grotto

Loved the idea of Krum being on magical version of steriods.

temperamental Bulgarian Bon Bon can
-had me laughing

The MILF interview was amusing and had Luna nicely in character. I wouldn't mind seeing her in the story more.

It's probably an extra service that Poppy doesn't provide
-great idea.

I knew she and Alice were never on the best of terms, but come on!
-Excellent touch. ONe of the joys of reading your fics is that your characters are such regular, flawed people.

Snape or Slughorn might have a better chance of doing it, but who in their right mind would trust either of those two with the secret to eternal life?
-Good point. Excellent job with not only who he chose to give the elixer to but also how you presented in the story.

The leg injury is the lemon from which I get to make lemonade.
-both fitting and rather gross. I'll never be able to hear that phrase again without thinking of this scene.

The whole battle with the Giest was fun to read. After years of reading fanfic magical battles can get a bit old, but yours are also exciting.

Best to let him think nothing about the harmless little Peeves roaming the castle."
-Now that is how a poltergiest should be - scary.

Let the other fic sit for awhile. Looking forward to the next chapter in this one. Congrats on the real world writing going well!

JBern replied:

I don't know how much room I'll have for Luna in this story, but when I use her, I'll try to use her effectively.   Roid rage anyone?

Next chapter in about 10 days.~Jim

Silo posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 1:47am for The Geist and the Grotto

lol good to see u updating faster

JBern replied:

Thanks.   More coming soon.   I'm planning to finish this story before going back to TML.~Jim

MonkeyAxman1302 posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 1:44am for The Geist and the Grotto

Great chapter! I don't think I've ever read a story thats had an actual Ghost on Ghost battle going on. Really a very clever idea. Gotta love "Nearly Headless Nick" asking to become "Completely Headless Nick"! Lol!

The hat and Fleur being travel show presents whilst a bit silly was good too.

I think that was a really good way for Fleur to discover the pronghorn secret. They way that they managed to finally kiss was also very good.

I like the fact that you are pacing out the cure of Neville's Mum. Some things even in a magical world can take time.

The ending with the tirade about the word "snog" and then "shag"; is this something you feel would be true of a French woman or your own personal grudge against us Enleesh? lol!

Thanks for writing; can't wait for more!
Monkey

PS - You seem to be writing Lie much more easily than TML. Are you struggling with TML like you did with TFtCD? My only comment would be is that you write wonderfully dark and comic stories but they seem to get to a stage of darkness that slows down your writing process. Just an observation but it might be worth some thought.

JBern replied:

It's just how I picture Fleur.   Very hot, but prone to occasional bouts of bitchyness.   Next chapter in about 10 days.~Jim

Renzo7 posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 1:39am for The Geist and the Grotto

Awesome work, as always, Jim. Excellently written and well paced, it was an entertaining chapter. I liked the touch with the ghosts, and Now-Headless-Nick can probably back me up :P. Nice to see Harry's getting together with Fleur, at last.

JBern replied:

Next chapter in 10 days.   Book details on www.jimbernheimer.com.   Thanks for all your reviews.~Jim

Clell65619 posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 1:14am for The Geist and the Grotto

- Wow, the Ghosts killed the Geist.

- Just wow.

- Of course Harry's injured the night before a task, again.

- Minerva's an idiot, Draco's an ass and Krum is a bigger one, so situation normal in the story.

- Fleur was far more accepting of Harry's visiting her than I thought she would be, very well done.

- This is easily the best WIP fan fic around.

JBern replied:

Thank you for the compliements.   Hope I can continue to impress you.   Next chapter in about 10 days.~Jim

morriganscrow posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 1:13am for The Geist and the Grotto

Okay - I take it back....

Harry and Fleur are a good pairing.

Never thought I'd type that. Still, you've converted me - by the Power of Grayskull, or something.

Excellent chappie, loved the Geist's demise and the Twins comeuppance.

JBern replied:

Aha!   A convert to all the HJ/Fleur goodness.   I'll have another chance to impress you in about 10 days.~Jim

darkschneider posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 12:46am for The Geist and the Grotto

Very good chapter as usual! I especially liked the article, it was wonderfully biased.

JBern replied:

Rita in all her glory.   More in about 10 days.~Jim

Tabi posted a comment on Tuesday 24th February 2009 12:20am for The Geist and the Grotto

Ah, I'll never see Professor Binns in the same light ever again. Hes as bloodthirsty as the goblins he always drones about...

JBern replied:

Glad you enjoyed it.   Next chapter is in about 10 days.~Jim

koppe posted a comment on Monday 23rd February 2009 11:56pm for The Geist and the Grotto

Great story so far, can't wait to see where this is going!

How will HJ and Fleur relationship progress? What will their friends, other students and the teachers -- who doesn't know his true age -- think about a 14 y/o boy dating a 17 y/o veela? What will the press think? What will the Hat say? Will HJ confide his other secrets with her?

What will Dumstrang think when they start missing their geist?

Will HJ and Draco soon come to blows? What about Snape?

I would like Hermione to get some more story-time, even though HJ doesn't need her so much as Harry... after all, she doesn't need to know that.

Keep up the great work, and update soon!

JBern replied:

I thing Durmstrang will be more worried about what is happening to their ship without the Geist...Fall of House Usher anyone?

You'll have to wait and see how HJ and Fleur's relationship progresses.

Next chapter in about 10 days.

Banner posted a comment on Monday 23rd February 2009 11:53pm for The Geist and the Grotto

That was fun and immensely satisfying. Nothing like some really vicious violence to work off the anger. I did catch one grammatical awkwardness:

"My word is my honor, last of my line. If you can ensnare it again, this will go much quicker."

It would be easier to read if you change "it" to something that specifies the Geist. At the moment, "it" refers to "my honor."

JBern replied:

Thanks for the correction.   Next chapter in about 10 days.~Jim

borsikk posted a comment on Monday 23rd February 2009 11:13pm for The Geist and the Grotto

Another excellent chapter! I never can decide whether I like TLIL or TML best...

And I am happy to say I just ordered your short story collection - even though it will take more then twenty days to arrive here in Switzerland :(

Will you continue writing fan fiction when your book-deal comes through? Either way is of course fine by me - while fan fiction provides instant gratification when you update, it is also nice to have real books in my hand. Also, it's probably much nicer for you to get paid for your writing... which could lead to greater productivity!

Cheers,
Boris

JBern replied:

Thanks for ordering my book.   I hope you enjoy it as much as I enjoyed writing it.   I don't plan on abandoning ff any time soon.

Next chapter in about 10 days.~Jim

Patches posted a comment on Monday 23rd February 2009 10:47pm for The Geist and the Grotto

Harry really let Krum have in the interviews. I'm glad. Krum is crummy in this story and deserves what he gets. (Please excuse the pun!)
I like what Harry did to the twins. It isn't often when someone gets to them, especially this good. Of course Dumbledore would complain about Harry's method. The scene with Harry and Fleur serving Krum and his "guests" was pretty brutal. Krum having a stuffed Pronghorn on the ceiling was really cruel. I'm glad Harry was truthful with her. That helps. Having the ghosts from the castle destroy the Geist was great. I never have seen anything like that before. It looks like Fleur and Harry are going to get together. I look forward to more of this story. Thanks so much for writing. I am going to look up your book. pms

JBern replied:

Glad you like Krum as an a-hole.   I like to give different characterizations with my stories.

Next chapter in 10 days.~Jim

Wonderbee31 posted a comment on Monday 23rd February 2009 9:58pm for The Geist and the Grotto

Very well done sir! Must say, you continue to do things with this that I've not seen in any other triwizard fic, and this Harry continues to push the envelope. Something to see the way the ghosts were the ones to put the Giest down like they did, including the image of a giant demonic Peeves. Krum and his own idiocy continues to show that some people are stupid no matter what, like Draco who seems to have no more subtlety than Ron and he's the Prince of Slytherin? Wouldn't it be nice to see the house of the cunning finally decide to strip some dead branches from itself, and see Draco be most emasculated? Sweet scene with Neville, and really have to wonder what is going on with Augusta, and finally the twins: These are guys who have no more sense than Draco in their way, they just are unthinkingly greedy and petty, and wonder if they'll try something anyway, even after they've been warned? Can't wait for the next part.

JBern replied:

I'm glad I can still keep you on your toes.   Next chapter in about 10 days.   I hope I can continue to impress you.~Jim

DrT posted a comment on Monday 23rd February 2009 9:34pm for The Geist and the Grotto

Will the Weasleys learn their lesson? Maybe. Will Draco? Doubtful.

As for the Geist, that was a brilliant concept, and v well executed

JBern replied:

Thank you for the compliment.   I'll have another chapter in about 10 days.~Jim

ShadeHawk posted a comment on Monday 23rd February 2009 8:39pm for The Geist and the Grotto

Very, very nice chapter. (Although please be careful about character-bashing.)

JBern replied:

Sometimes, bashing is the only way to go.   Next chapter in about 10 days.~Jim

jeffstrauser@yahoo.com posted a comment on Monday 23rd February 2009 7:00pm for The Geist and the Grotto

Outstanding chapter!!!! So Harry and Fleur, I love it!!!! I mean not only is it a little used ship its also a great one!!!! Will we be seeing some of Harry and Fleur's dates???? Will we be seeing Aimee's reaction to Harry and Fleur???? What will be others reaction???? Will Alice be waking up soon???? Do keep up the outstanding work and update soon please!!!!:):):):)

JBern replied:

You'll have to wait and see.   Fortunately, the wait won't be too long.~Jim

xeromercy posted a comment on Monday 23rd February 2009 6:53pm for The Geist and the Grotto

I really liked how you gave the ghosts a more intriguing role than just being a movable wallpaper that was in the book. That is what is so great about your story, you take even the overlooked aspects and give it a more realistic feel. Grey lady skirt riding for the win!

JBern replied:

Thanks for the compliment.   I hope to continue impressing you with the next chapter in about 10 days.~Jim

Ken Warner posted a comment on Monday 23rd February 2009 5:49pm for The Geist and the Grotto

very very good - I love the way you have them fighting side by side.

I placed my order on amazon within the hour of receiving the Caerazkaban digest with the link.

thanks for all the great writing you share

JBern replied:

Thanks Ken.   Don't forget to give it a review when you're done.~Jim

M2J MandalorianJedi posted a comment on Monday 23rd February 2009 4:49pm for The Geist and the Grotto

YES! At last! Though I would have still waited more chapters for them to finally 'see' each other. I've practically been waiting on the edge of my seat for it.

I tell ya, even without cliffhangers, you know how to keep a loyal reader loyal and eagerly awaiting your next update.

I had a feeling that you would choose Alice. Secretly, I was hoping you'd pick her of the two. Can't wait to see the confrontation between Augusta and Harry.

JBern replied:

Can't end every chapter on a cliffhanger.   Otherwise, they lose their effectiveness.   Next chapter in 10 days.~Jim

Magus posted a comment on Monday 23rd February 2009 4:41pm for The Geist and the Grotto

Double month, thank you...

I had forgotten about that little bet, and we fianally see the true relationship between Fleur and HJ.

Alice coming back gives the posibility of also having Frank back, you sneaky guy.

As always a great chapter, easely made even greater by the battle of the ghosts and the after battle words of the Baron.

Please keep up the great work.
A Fan anxiously waiting for April because Amazon's delivery here in Mexico SUCKS huge time

JBern replied:

The e-book will be available no later than April 1st at either Payloadz.com and/or Smashwords.com.~Jim