The Lie I've Lived
The Summer of Change
By JBern
Reviews
millercommamatt posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 1:57pm for The Summer of Change
I'm getting the impression that Harry is now more James than Harry. I think I was expecting more of a blending of the two, but it looks like James has taken over. Is that by design?
JBern replied:
Not so much. The readers have 3 books of canon Harry to mull over. By design I have to show what JP's life was like. HJ will be a blending of the two. In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story. Check it out. You should find it interesting.~Jim
björn nilsson posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 1:57pm for The Summer of Change
Exelent work as alvays, keep them coming
JBern replied:
Thanks. In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story. Check it out. You should find it interesting.~Jim
Boofers posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 1:52pm for The Summer of Change
Where is the Rambo referance? I missed that hmm..
Anywho.. like the chapter, and I also like how you make it a point to say that HJ just can't be attracted to the younger girls.. there are too many stoires out there where a 30 year old Harry goes back in time to his younger body and starts hooking up with a bunch of 11 year old girls.. That just seems iffy to me.. I also like how Harry has a sense of resolve at the end of this chapter.. like he is done whining and is finally ready to move ahead and take control.. I've always been a big fan of the independant Harry fics.. I guess thats all I have to say for now.. I think that this review is quite long enough..
so until next chapter.. good day to you.. and good luck
JBern replied:
Darned if I know what Rambo reference they're talking about either? I've always been a bit put off by the go back and snuggle with 11 yr olds too. HJ's problem is not too many 16-20 yr olds are going to want to snuggle with a just barely 14yr old waif of a boy. In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story. Check it out. You should find it interesting.~Jim
Fishburne posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 1:49pm for The Summer of Change
BOOYA! Awesome and wicked!
Fanboy for another week!
Keep it up old man, its getting really good!
Fish
4 favorite shirts shrunk - gotta love overzealous teenagers
JBern replied:
Thanks F-Man. Sorry about the shirts. I'm still trying to get my 5yr old to pick up her toys, but I'm sure I'll be saying that when she's a teen too!
In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story. Check it out. You should find it interesting.~Jim
FULLMETAL posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 1:35pm for The Summer of Change
Remus screwed Lily! Now that's definitely a better reason not to trust him than "we didn't trust him because he's a dark creature, although we didn't seem to mind all those years when we would transform into animagi and spend the fool moon with him." I wouldn't hold it past the old pedophile to do it. Makes you wonder if he has alternate reasons why he's banging Tonks. Great chapter! and thanks for the food for thought!
JBern replied:
Well thanks. I always thought that whole reason for not trusting Remus was pretty Vanilla. Why wouldn't they say, "We can't trust Sirius because he comes from a Dark family!"
In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story. Check it out. You should find it interesting.~Jim
millercommamatt posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 1:34pm for The Summer of Change
You made a Rambo reference. I think that's a HP fanfiction first.
JBern replied:
Email me back and tell me the Rambo reference. It wasn't intentional. I'd just like to know where I made it!~Jim
in-fanficauthors posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 1:21pm for The Summer of Change
Interesting. I guess HJ and Riddle are equals in sanity. An interesting way for them to be equal, but whatever works.
JBern replied:
Thanks. Well HJ can get better. Riddle - not so much...
In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story. Check it out. You should find it interesting.~Jim
Musings of Apathy posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 1:06pm for The Summer of Change
Getting quite a bit confusing, but altogether a great story. The revelation about Lily and Remus's one time affair hurts, all the more that they died before they could patch it up. It will certainly make Harry's relations with Remus stilted, at the very least.
This will gain a lot from some Beta work, but I won't point out how and where right now.
Thanks for writing.
Mike (MoA)
JBern replied:
If I don't see anything from my competitor by the time the next chapter is ready, then I'm going to call it off and start working with my team. It's annoying to know that I'm doing my best and still go back and see the gaffs, areas where it made perfect sense to me, but not everyone else. At some point if there is a priori incantem effect there should be an interesting minute of discourse with HJ and Lily...
And now for the cut-n-paste section of the reply...
In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story. Check it out. You should find it interesting.~Jim
QOShea posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 1:05pm for The Summer of Change
Good chapter. The hat still hasn't been burned, I'm shocked!
Will Harry deck Remus the next time he sees him, that is the question!
JBern replied:
Of course the Hat stays around. I'm beginning to wonder whether it will push the bounds of good taste with it's song this year....
As for HJ and Remus, you'll have to wait and see. In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story. Check it out. You should find it interesting.~Jim
Particle_Accelerator posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 12:58pm for The Summer of Change
Hmm, that was an interesting chapter. The revelations about Lily's sexual behavior were a departure from the norm, but from what we know about Remus and Lily, one could make a case for them being involved at some point. LOVED the imagery about JP summoning the ladies' panties, I need to learn that trick. :D
I realize this is part of a contest, but there were some punctuation mistakes that, if fixed, would make some of the passages more readable.
JBern replied:
Imagine the trauma if Neville found out what JP did to his mother with that trick! Glad you liked the chapter. If I don't see something from my competitor by the time chapter 4 is ready, I'm just going to start working with my usual team on it. There's no sense in delivering unbetaed work when I know I can do better.
In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story. Check it out. You should find it interesting.~Jim
Black's Phoenix posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 12:43pm for The Summer of Change
That was some unessesary shit, no offense but Lily and Remus are both the type of characters where they never would have engaged in what happened. THat was over the line I mean really that would never happen and it shouldn't have been even put into the chapter. Now I am not saying that Lily was all good, but it is just compeletly out of character from her as given by JKR to cheat on James just as James would not cheat on Lily. Sure they might have fights and they will have flaws but it was well known by everyone that knew James and Lily that niether would cheat on the other no unless they were drugged or under a spell and had no control over their actions.
JBern replied:
Again, I like the challenge, but I do disagree with you on your points. All humans are capable of weakness. You need only look at the TV each night to see someone admitting the errors and asking for the public's forgiveness.
Of course Harry would only recieve the ideal version of his parents from Hagrid, DD, McG and the rest. Hell, DD won't even say bad things about Snape!
Regards~Jim
reimanr06 posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 12:24pm for The Summer of Change
drat i forgot to add "of James's mindset and the general situation right before the end"
JBern replied:
Thanks.~Jim
reimanr06 posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 12:23pm for The Summer of Change
wow, the characterization of James is pretty standard, but this is the first time I've ever seen Lily portrayed as she is here. Authors tend to make her into some kind of perfect saint. This is probably the best and most realistic representation ive ever read.
JBern replied:
Thanks. I strive for realism and making the readers see the characters in a whole new light. In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story. Check it out. You should find it interesting.~Jim
Yojo posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 12:22pm for The Summer of Change
Very nice chapter, esp the insight about James being left handed; that truly threw a curve ball that I had not anticipated into the story. Hermione would pick up on that in an instant, not to mention ripping apart Harry for doing something so drastic. I loved the little part about James' sex life, and really want to hear more about his failures: surely he wasn't born smooth like that, right? So just throw in a few memories of him screwing up and I'll be laughing my ass off.
Keep up the amazing work.
JBern replied:
I'll work a failure or two into the mix. Probably about the time HJ starts pursuing FD...
Glad you liked the left handed thing. It's always perplexing how Harry would suck at some spells, but then turn around and learn a difficult one like the Patronus.
In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story. Check it out. You should find it interesting.~Jim
Crys posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 12:09pm for The Summer of Change
Though I dislike what you've done to Lily's character, it does make sense. She's human. With human weaknesses. Rubbing Harry's nose in it, while possibly cruel, is the quickest way to get him to see reality.
Interesting story you're brewing.
JBern replied:
Thanks. I'm never a fan of long and drawn out angst. Though if there is a priori incantem event in this story the discourse between HJ and Lily's echo might be fascinating...
Plus I am aiming to finish this story before I even get close to the 80K mark. Something that I was blatantly unable to do in my other 2 stories. Heck, TFtCD will probably reach 300K before it's done.
In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story. Check it out. You should find it interesting.~Jim
fuddledone posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 12:08pm for The Summer of Change
Pretty damn good. I have read a few stories with good twists but this one is definitely original. Your version of the hat is funny and has a more realistic personality than any other I have had the pleasure to read.
JBern replied:
Thank you. In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story. Check it out. You should find it interesting.~Jim
AK posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 12:02pm for The Summer of Change
I really like this story, the crude style and a good first person POV is something that's hard to come by. Accompanied by more than decent writing quality and you've got a winner.
I do hope that you will update more often than in a month.
JBern replied:
Alas, my other two stories take precedence until they are completed. Darkness has about 8 chapters left in it and Bungle has about 4. After that, you should see an increase in this story's production. In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story. Check it out. You should find it interesting.~Jim
Greg Johnson posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 11:53am for The Summer of Change
Another great chapter! Can't wait for more. Keep up the good work.
JBern replied:
Thanks. In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story. Check it out. You should find it interesting.~Jim
Prospero Hibiki posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 11:50am for The Summer of Change
Sweet!
...and now i have to rush into the building and study for RP-2!
ET3 Mongoose @ 0900
JBern replied:
What's the point of adding heat? To make steam!!!!! BWAHAHHAHAHHAHAHAH
To anyone else reading the replies it's an inside joke....
Thanks for the review. In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story. Check it out. You should find it interesting.~Jim
Jalimar posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 2:02pm for The Summer of Change
JBern replied: