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Aurilia posted a comment on Thursday 23rd July 2009 1:51am for Confrontation

This is not a horcrux story.



Thank fucking Christ for that. I loathe horcruxes (horcruces? horcruci?). My opinion of this tale just skyrocketed on that alone.

Vilkath posted a comment on Tuesday 30th June 2009 4:32pm for Confrontation

Not entirely sure why Harry defended Snape when he's found at the scene the attack, and maybe even caused Susan's mother or Aunt to die.. and yet not a single Order member showed up to help in the fight. Come on.. how much worse could it look?

fyrecat posted a comment on Wednesday 17th December 2008 5:25pm for Confrontation

Oooooh! Nice. I really like the realistic portrayal of people in this fic! Aurors who think and act like real cops, a Moldyshorts to be truly respected and feared, it's amazing!
Keep up the AWESOME work!

JBern replied:

Glad you liked it.  Hope you enjoy the rest.

Brian Donnely posted a comment on Saturday 22nd December 2007 3:12pm for Confrontation

Ohhh, I'm going to enjoy this immensely. You do have a knack for fight scenes, can't wait for more of 'em.

JBern replied:

There are some pretty good ones in here.  I'll be looking forward to your reviews for the chapters in the early 20's.~Jim

David305 posted a comment on Monday 12th November 2007 5:58pm for Confrontation

Enjoying! Note:
"She has been so happy since she got rid of her mutt of a brother." Bellatrix was Sirius' cousin, not his sister. Says so in book 5, ch. 6 -- remember the tapestry?
'Oh, yeah, her mother Andromeda was my favourite cousin,' said Sirius,
examining the tapestry closely. 'No, Andromeda's not on here either, look'
He pointed to another small round burn mark between two names, Bellatrix and
Narcissa.
'Andromeda's sisters are still here because they made lovely, respectable pure]
blood marriages...'

Cheers,
David

JBern replied:

Probably the most glaring of my many errors in this story and when I do housekeeping, it'll be the first to get fixed.  Glad you are enjoying.~Jim

Kontrast posted a comment on Sunday 29th July 2007 3:03pm for Confrontation

I just started this story to kill the time until you start on the sequel to Bungle. ;)
I'll leave a more detailed review to Bungle and this story later on but wanted to point out two things:

1. Sirius isn't Bellatrix' brother - he's her cousin. Bellatrix only has two sisters: Narcissa and Andromeda. Sirius has a brother: Regulus.
2. You change the POV a tad too often for my tastes, but that's your choice.

These points aside, good read so far.

Greetings from Germany...

JBern replied:

Thanks.  I thought I edited that early error.  I'll get it next time.  Sorry you don't like the pov shifts, I think I've gotten better at it as the story has progressed.

Bungle sequel chapter 1 in the first week of September.~Jim

Frank Hacklander posted a comment on Thursday 28th June 2007 5:03am for Confrontation

Dumbledore usually has his golden child in the suburbs...HAD probably works better here than "has."

"Make sure you take there wands first." THEIR

and [have] the audacity to plan

edge of[f] the pain

Still dislike the way Harry saves Snape in this chapter, especially when he deservedd to be fed to the dogs.

JBern replied:

Thanks.  I'll add these to the errata and next time I do some house keeping on the story I'll fix them.~Jim

Merle Corey posted a comment on Sunday 14th January 2007 5:23am for Confrontation

It's not like Harry to back down from Snape, but I guess he is still feeling guilty over being tricked into going to the DoM. It is good to see him thinking quickly on his feet, and looks like Susan will do so as well. She is becoming an interesting character!

JBern replied:

Thanks.  You are correct about the Harry and Snape interaction.  In this fic, everyone makes mistakes.~Jim

dboris posted a comment on Wednesday 15th November 2006 7:54am for Confrontation

Good fan fiction, I guess it is your first? There are still things that could be improved but the good thing is that it makes me want to read the next chapters :)

Dialogs are maybe not the best, but they usually get better the more you write.

The one thing out of place there was, I think, when Harry felt 'empty' for killing someone. This kind of thing don't happen right after you kill someone. It happens the night after, when you are alone and have nothing else to worry about. (I'm not speaking of personal experience :p)

When there are battles, people don't rely much on words but more on body language. 'Fight now, talk later' isn't something I would encounter were something similar to happen.

I'm not really good with English, however these things are universal ;)

And you can check and correct these things later. Or get a beta ;)

Anyway I can't tell much until I read further.

JBern replied:

Glad you enjoyed it.  I do have a beta as of the later chapters.  I will be reposting the earlier ones soon.~Jim

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Monday 13th November 2006 12:38pm for Confrontation

Just a great fight scene. I wish Harry had doen in Snape/ I have a feeling he will too before long.

I like Harry's acceptance of the fact that he's a killer now.

JBern replied:

You have a profound sense of impending doom... ~Jim

anonymous5 posted a comment on Sunday 5th November 2006 2:32pm for Confrontation

Did I mention in last chapter's review that I liked action? I like action. If the rest of these chapters are a fraction of the fun that the first two have been -- this is spectacular!

Might want to capitalize "Ministry" when Harry is pondering Lestrange's death, but I couldn't find anything else. The way you intertwine character analysis with realtime events is just informative enough to be interesting without overpowering the *wham* *bang* nature of the scene itself. I'm really enjoying these - this is the first time in five years of fanfic that I'm reviewing chapter-by-chapter. Thanks for the ride!

JBern replied:

Glad you like it.  You'll see some more interesting character analysis in chapter 5 featuring Marietta Edgecombe and Terry Higgs of all people.  Sometimes purebloods don't have many options.~Jim