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Aurilia posted a comment on Thursday 23rd July 2009 4:37pm for Of Death, Rememberance and Dark Magic

‘Perfect! Better Living Through Magical Herbs! As boring a subject as there ever was. Though, it would be easier to just ask Peter to kill me now?’ He thought sarcastically. As if in response, Voldemort heard Peter’s voice behind him and felt the swirl of magical energy, "Tonare!"



I know it can't be that easy (not with something like nineteen chapters left), but I cheered out loud at that bit.

fyrecat posted a comment on Saturday 20th December 2008 7:47pm for Of Death, Rememberance and Dark Magic

WOOO HOOO!!! What a ride! That's one hell of a cliffie! If I didn't know that this chapter was only 1/2 way through the story I'd be DYING! This on top of still being injured from the fight with Hagrid ought to leave a mark.
This story is AWESOME!

There are lots of little grammar and spelling errors throughout the whole story so far. Too numerous to bring up in this space.
I'd say run it through the spell and grammar checker to start.
2 frequent errors I have noticed are inappropriate use of the ('s) an apostrophe is not used when simply pluralizing.
Also there are frequent misuses of homonyms. there/their, then/than etc. A grammar checker might not catch those...
If you need an editor I'd be willing.

Thanks again for an AWESOME story!

Fyrecat
Fyrecat@hotmail.com

JBern replied:

Thanks.  To be honest, I don't reread this story.  I know there are all kinds of little errors inside it and it would only frustrate me to reread it.

I might take you up on that editing offer, but at the moment, I am more interested in moving forward rather than backward, if you know what i mean.

Regards,

Jim

Andrius posted a comment on Tuesday 28th October 2008 12:17am for Of Death, Rememberance and Dark Magic

OMG cliffhanger

JBern replied:

I have a way of doing that.~Jim

Magnificent the Destroyer Lord posted a comment on Sunday 27th April 2008 2:43pm for Of Death, Rememberance and Dark Magic

I like it - nice touch on an original plot for offing Tommy-boy. (*snickers*) Obviusly he doesn't succeed, as it's over 40 chapters and this one is twenty-something. (damnable short-term memory problems... *grumbles*)

How's the original fiction coming? Can't wait to get my hands on (... *grimaces* ... Dead somethings? My memory's playing with me again - I have the email saved, thank goodness!!!)

Good luck with all your projects

M*T*D*L*

JBern replied:

Thanks also for this review.  I'm glad you like the original take on voldemort. 

The original stuff is coming along well.  We hope to be available by the end of summer.  The title is going to be Dead Eye: Pennies for the Ferryman.  With any luck, it will be the first of many Dead Eye novels.

Regards,

Jim

Brian Donnely posted a comment on Friday 28th December 2007 5:12pm for Of Death, Rememberance and Dark Magic

Those Abbott sisters piss me off.

Such a smart plan, though we've still got a round twenty chapters to go... something tells me it doesn't work out as planned. :)

JBern replied:

Long way to go, huh.  Thanks for the reviews.~Jim

David305 posted a comment on Thursday 15th November 2007 5:12pm for Of Death, Rememberance and Dark Magic

"consequences be dammed!" damned
"A white Volvo station with the Grunnings logo" station wagon

JBern replied:

Ack!  Shows what happens when you rush.~Jim

KingsleyforPM posted a comment on Sunday 5th August 2007 12:15pm for Of Death, Rememberance and Dark Magic

wooo amazing idea, great letter from hagrid too

JBern replied:

Thanks.~Jim

Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Wednesday 18th April 2007 8:29am for Of Death, Rememberance and Dark Magic

The manticore made more sense of Hagrid's kamikaze move against Voldy, but yet I suspect he would have done it even if he'd been in full health. Giggled over the subtle twist on the Goblet of Fire badges. That change of prophecy was brilliant. I would be screaming in rage if I didn't have more chapters waiting for me at that cliffhanger. Nice to see Viktor isn't evil for once (so bored of that). Loved Harry's dark idea too, maybe he's more like his Mum than anyone thought.

JBern replied:

Thanks.  Wow, I've been delinquent on these replies.  Lots of catching up to do...

Jim

dogbertcarroll posted a comment on Wednesday 28th March 2007 9:22am for Of Death, Rememberance and Dark Magic

LOL! Love the ending.

JBern replied:

Glad you enjoyed it.~Jim

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Saturday 3rd March 2007 6:53am for Of Death, Rememberance and Dark Magic

Your marvelous complexities are stirring to read. The life debt/practice/Ginny/Wormtail thing is a work of genius.

Excellent funeral talk but Harry.

Fine chapter all around.

JBern replied:

I'm surprised that no one had ever done that one before.  I hope I don't burn up all my originality in my few stories and have some left for when I start my own original work.~Jim

M. R. Moore posted a comment on Tuesday 12th December 2006 2:28pm for Of Death, Rememberance and Dark Magic

I'm in the process of reading Grendel by John Gardner and I swear you took lessons from him on dark humor.

JBern replied:

I've always had a thing for dark humor.  I will have to try Mr. Gardner's works, if I remind you of him.  Thanks again for taking time to write so many reviews.~Jim

dboris posted a comment on Friday 17th November 2006 10:03pm for Of Death, Rememberance and Dark Magic

Just wanted to ask why do authors believe keeping the prophecy secret would help?
It will, but only on short term. As soon as Voldemort begins attacking (like Azkaban, etc.) there is no need to keep this prophecy secret. If Dumbledore kept the prophecy secret from Potter, it's because Voldemort won't risk an attack and will keep low as he doesn't know the prophecy --> since he "died" once, he doesn't want to take any chance.

JBern replied:

It's a good question.  FWIW, I believe Knowledge is power.  If the prophecy were released on a grand scale, it may cause Voldy to go on a killing spree knowing that only Harry Potter could kill him.  Similarly just because only Voldy could kill him doesn't necessarily mean that Draco couldn't go up and say blow Harry's wand arm off.  It wouldn't kill him, but it would put him at a severe disadvantage for later.  Something to think about.~Jim