PerfesserN posted a comment on Wednesday 28th November 2007 6:29am for Censure and Sensibility

Talk about synchronicity. I started re-reading this fic yesterday, just to get a fresh perspective of the vitriolic hat (very well done BTW). Lo and behold, a new update today.
Spooky.
In a good way.
Leaving Rita with the hat was brilliant. I'd love to have been the fly on the wall for that conversation.
Nice way to begin a relationship, referring to the girl as a tart.
The again, I like tarts. . .
They'll find each other in the end, but they'll have to work at it. They'll have to build their relationship from the basement up.
Maybe that's why it's called "making love?"
Looking forward to the next update, of whatever you’re working on.
Write on.
N!

JBern replied:

Glad you enjoyed the chapter.   Well he did think she was hot in a vapid beauty pagent way.   I want them to have a few bumps along the way.~Jim

Quizer posted a comment on Wednesday 28th November 2007 6:20am for Censure and Sensibility

Another very enjoyable chapter. I see nothing wrong with your portrayal of Rita Skeeter, you seem to capture her quite well. But I don't quite like the effects her story will have on Harry's reputation. Likewise, Moody requesting the Marauder's Map does not bode well. With him actually pointing Harry's attention to it, it's a given that Fake!Moody's presence does not register on the map anymore... wait, do we even have Fake!Moody in this story? Because I can't really imagine he'd take the gamble of pointing Harry's interest at the map while there's still a possibility that he shows on it with his false name... Any statement you care to make on this?

Somehow Harry seems to attract a whole lot of adversity in all of your stories. Do you think this is one of his character traits, or is it just the typical stupidity of the English wizarding world? Because I notice that Harry does have quite a few friends and casual acquaintances in Bungle who don't turn on him on a moment's notice.

I liked how Harry got the Hat onboard as advisor. That should prove interesting and gives him an excuse to have the thing with him whenever he wants. I loved the 'Hat, tell her a joke' line.

I'm looking forward to the next chapter, and how you plan on building a rapport between Harry and Fleur, with them being off to such a bad start.

until next time,
Quizer

JBern replied:

I do like writing as Rita.   You'll see what I have in store for Moody next chapter.   Without adversity, there would be no fanfiction.  Anyway, more of that adversity coming up next chapter.   At least in the last 2  chapters no one was  actively trying to kill him!  

As for our French Tart, I like a relationship born in hostility.   Hopefully, I  can give a depth of character to Fleur's character that is rarely seen.  Thanks as always for the lengthy review.   No further comments at this time.~Jim

Darak1 posted a comment on Wednesday 28th November 2007 5:11am for Censure and Sensibility

My favourite Rita Skeeter story is still the one in which she gets crushed in her beetle form when Harry happens to take a walk on the terras during the ball. I'm willing to bet this Rita will suffer the same form of fate.

JBern replied:

It sounds like a waste when she could have been writing all kinds of juicy gossip.~Jim

ahsun92 posted a comment on Wednesday 28th November 2007 5:04am for Censure and Sensibility

Hmmmmm. Is Crouch discovered early?
Will Harry blow apart Krum's legs?
Good that you're not making Them Best Of Buddies In The Entire World like in other fics.
Does Harry just kill evryone in Gryffindor?
That would be an excellent plot twist!!
#Love# the regular updates!
Keep up the work, I admire your ability to carry on a Hiated Fic: most authors just give up.

JBern replied:

No, I just had to struggle to finish Darkness.   It was the one in danger of being abandoned   I'm glad to be finished with it and on to new things.~Jim

warpwizard posted a comment on Wednesday 28th November 2007 4:52am for Censure and Sensibility

Really good chapter, and I haven't really been a fan of this fic. This chapter seemed to have a lot more forward drive than the others. The way you write Rita is fun.

I want to praise you more, but your writing is good enough that my mind says, "He must know it's good, so it feels silly to tell him." But I know it's nice to hear, so I'll just say, you write at the level of good original novelistic fiction.

Just in case you were in doubt. ;)

JBern replied:

Thanks for telling me anyway.   Next up is TML chapter 4, but I'll have another chapter of this one out before Xmas.   Hopefully, my original works will be as well received as my fanfiction.~Jim

Crys posted a comment on Wednesday 28th November 2007 4:48am for Censure and Sensibility

Ooh, nasty history with Sarah Underhill, Snape, and Sirius you created there.

Good touch with the French. In two places.

> "Humor me."
> "Okay. Hat, tell her a joke."
> "There was a witch who walked into a bar…"
*hysterical laughter*

Liked that press conference. And Rita's article. For some reason, that quote from Victor is tugging at me.

Hmm. Moody. I can't remember if this is one where Moody really is himself or Crouch Jr (or someone else for that matter). *blink* *snicker* Ooh, I just had an evil premonition. We'll see if that one comes true. Let's just hope Harry looks at the map before bringing it to Moody (if it'll help ;).

Looking forward to when the entire thing blows up in Gryffindor's (and Fleur's) faces. The duels will be great fun if HJ actually tries instead of Harry-only.

Looking forward to the next thing you write.

JBern replied:

Thanks for the review as usual.   I look forward to writing the nex chapter and getting the tasks started.   Hopefully, I can write an exciting enough broom race.~Jim

Meteoricshipyards posted a comment on Wednesday 28th November 2007 4:46am for Censure and Sensibility

Wonderful. Glad to see a new update.

Ten events? That's different. Looking forward to seeing what you're going to do to Harry.

Shame about him being without peer support except Hermione. Are the 'Puffs going to come rescue him from loneliness? Although it sounds like Hermione will probably be his date.

The Hat is in fine form. Loved the interaction between it and Skeeter.

Moody -- now that Harry's suspicions are aroused, will he see Crouch Jr. on the map and get Moody early? It will still mean that he has to compete.

Great story. Thanks for writing it.

Tom A.

JBern replied:

On its own the TWT wasn't that interesting.   Two out of three events weren't even viewable.   I think the puff harem is the last thing on HJ's mind right now.   Next up is TML 4, but another chapter of this one will be out before Xmas.~Jim

magus213 posted a comment on Wednesday 28th November 2007 4:37am for Censure and Sensibility

Brilliant. More of this!

JBern replied:

More coming soon~Jim

mathiasgranger posted a comment on Wednesday 28th November 2007 4:21am for Censure and Sensibility

A good dip back into the pool with this chapter. Gryffindor house should change their mascot from the lion to the sheep. Those Weasleys, save Arthur, are a pretty sad sack lot, aren't they?

Apparently being narrow minded and idiotic is a dominant hereditary trait for purebloods.

Thanks for writing,
Matt

JBern replied:

Thanks for the compliments.   I just can't bring myself to write a story where every Weasley is a likeable character.   Anyway, next chapter out before Xmas.~Jim

Alex00 posted a comment on Wednesday 28th November 2007 4:13am for Censure and Sensibility

Great work keep em coming.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Next chapter before Xmas.~Jim

Lee Steele posted a comment on Wednesday 28th November 2007 4:11am for Censure and Sensibility

Hi, I am really enjoying your story, it is so different, can't wait to see what direction you take it next. lee

JBern replied:

I think East is a nice direction.     Sorry, I'm tired and catching up on all these reviews.   Glad you enjoyed the chapter.   Next one coming before Xmas.~Jim

skulLXeon posted a comment on Wednesday 28th November 2007 4:11am for Censure and Sensibility

Nice chapter as always. Hm... seems like Angelina really screwed up, hm... good job as always. See you around....

AGX[TAIL]

JBern replied:

Well hopefully, a spiteful Angie is something you haven't seen before.   Next chapter due out before Xmas.~Jim

ruby tripton posted a comment on Wednesday 28th November 2007 4:10am for Censure and Sensibility

brilliant - as always.

JBern replied:

Thanks - as always.   :-P

uthamm posted a comment on Wednesday 28th November 2007 4:01am for Censure and Sensibility

Nice job. I love the savvy HP/JP hybrid that you have here - somehow I picture this Harry as what he would have been having grown up with his Dad. Pretty cool.

Nice job on the Rita thing and I like the isolation that you have created with the censure. Full Marks!

JBern replied:

Glad you enjoyed it.   I'm almost caught up on my reviews!   Now HJ is growing up as his dad!   Creepy huh?   Next chapter due out by Xmas.   TML chapter 4 is up next.~Jim

MrRobertsIII posted a comment on Wednesday 28th November 2007 3:40am for Censure and Sensibility

love that hat.

I like your twist on the tournament, especially the duelling.

The idea of a formal censure was excellent.

Cannot get the image of Flitwick and Madame Max out of my head.

JBern replied:

I bet it's a creepy image of the too!   Glad you enjoyed the chapter.   As always, I hope to continue impressing you readers with my keystrokes.~Jim

Miles Hance posted a comment on Wednesday 28th November 2007 2:42am for Censure and Sensibility

Snape....has been a bad boy. Playing around with polyjuice? I hope he gets his just desserts, just like in To Fight the Coming Darkness. Death, or at least serious maiming would go over well with me.

As far as Fleur goes, a volatile relationship leading into something romantic? Works for me. Harry Potter, bringing Fleur Delacour, the prima donna back to the real world? That could be the basis for the romantic side of this.

Just...update more often. Please! Turn Me Loose and this one are the best. Originals are all good and fine, but you do this very well.

Too well....I'm suspicious...

JBern replied:

As much as I enjoy doing this, I do want to see my own name up in lights. Hence the reason I write original stuff.   I'm about 35000 words into an original novel that I hope to have published before next summer.   Hopefully, you'll read it one day and say why did you waste time writing fanfics.~Jim

Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Wednesday 28th November 2007 2:41am for Censure and Sensibility

Nice title and so good to see this continued.

LOL at Harry's introduction to Fleur. What a way of bringing those two together! I love your reasoning behind why Sirius wasn't expelled for the whole Snape incident. This whole scene was simply superb, with the more James-ish side of Harry coming to the fore. The whole "tart's meagre aura" sentence was laugh my head off funny.

I think the Flitwick / Maxime comment is as filthy as the person that reads it and thanks to Monkey, that's pretty filthy in my case. Love your assessment of Viktor being everything Draco wants to be. Harry's reflexes would have to have been pretty quick to be faster than the Hat's mouth, and Loki it's good to be reading the Hat again. He's so entertaining. The Hufflepuff harem was a giggle-worthy line.

Grinned my head off at the McGonagall scene and loved your reintroduction of Penny. You're quite correct in thinking you write good Rita, suitably vitriolic and downright mean but still cutting. I also love that final scene with Moody.

As to the biggest change we see in this chapter, I think it's necessary to the plot as otherwise Harry is far too much of a Gryffindor to start being excluded enough to talk to Fleur or behave like himself. Excellent chapter. I have faith in you to make their change of heart make sense. More please.

JBern replied:

Three hours later, I'm rethinking my whole reply to every review policy.   Glad you enjoyed the chapter and I hope for more coming your way soon.   HJ is still trying to figure out who he is.   He hopes   to live long enough to grow into his new personal.

As always, thank you for the review.~Jim

Wonderbee31 posted a comment on Wednesday 28th November 2007 2:26am for Censure and Sensibility

Very well done, and you captured Rita's personality really well imo, given that she's such an awful person that seems to have no love for anything but herself, and not sure if she has that at times. The Hat continues to be a hoot, though McGonagall is still staying ahead imo, much better than the canon version at least. Gryffindor, well, my hope is that their actions will come back to haunt them even more, and that when the first time Ron apologizes for doubting Harry, if he does, that Harry won't just throw up his hands and so, no prob buddy, something that annoyed me in canon. I'd prefer to see Ron and the rest of the house get ripped a new one. Going to be fun to see how this goes from here on, and what will happen with the other champions as well as to see if Victor does his stalky thing with Hermione this time around, and if she feeds into his fantasy. I mean, he meets her the first time that year, and she's already what he'd miss the most? Well, great part here, and can't wait to see what happens next.

JBern replied:

Thank you for your review.   I don't think HJ is the foolishly forgiving sort.   Viktor probably won' t be doin the stalker thing in this one.   I'm going to portray Viktor definitely OOC.   I just don't see how he can this aw shucks kind of guy.   He's 17 and on top of the sports world in an ultracompetitive sport.   I can't see how he doesn't have a big head.~Jim

nesparatu posted a comment on Wednesday 28th November 2007 2:09am for Censure and Sensibility

Great part. One thing I find myself curious about is Fleur's involvement. The story is listed under Harry/Fleur, but right now their relationship is rather...harsh. Did Rita misinterpret her quote? And what event will occur to bring them closer together? Perhaps they go to the ball together, or something Fleur's date to the ball does will bring them together? Will the 2nd task remain the same, given the extra participants, or will it be changed preventing Harry from saving Gabrielle? However it happens, I have confidence it will be good. Please get the next part out as soon as possible.

JBern replied:

Rita certainly worked her magic during the article.   Yes it's HJ/Fleur.   Yes it's going to be a bumpy ride.   There are 10 total tasks and plenty of time to interact.   Next chaper out before Xmas.~Jim

Exarikun posted a comment on Wednesday 28th November 2007 2:06am for Censure and Sensibility

quite good, but unless i'm mistaken, also shorter than your usual chapters. anyway, as i say, quite good, and i'm hoping to get to read more. i did spot one error along the way, but i've forgotten where it was, it was either a word too much or one too few in a phrase...

JBern replied:

Actually, it's over 10000 words making it longer than my usual.   Thanks for the review.   Next chapter before Xmas.~Jim