kainboa posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 7:42pm

great chapter as usual, can't wait to see what happens next and which memories HJ gets.

keep up the great work :)

JBern replied:

Thanks for the review.   In the forum area on this site, I added a long post about what I was thinking when I wrote the characters and somewhat rationalized their behavior.   You might like it.~Jim

The Resident posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 6:29pm

Quite an interesting story. I have never, in all my reading of HP fanfic, seen this premise presented. You are carrying it of quite nicely as well. Keep up the great work. I hope you will be able to update soon.

JBern replied:

Thanks for the compliments!   In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

Aaron Blackwell posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 5:23pm

i enjoy this alot...its harsh, but more true than the love conquers all stuff alot of people put out. I look forward to reading more of this one.

JBern replied:

Realism is my one true calling.   I try not to do anything in a story that can't be explained and be believable.   In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

Black's Phoenix posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 5:06pm

Realized that I left something out and it is the main point on why Remus and Lily would never sleep together after Lily got married to James, or for that matter after Lily and James started dating, and that is simply the unwritten guy rule.

Simply put as a guy you never ever do anything romatic with the girl that is with your friend no matter what. Especially if they have done something really important to you, such as James becoming an animagus as well as saving Remus from possibly killing Snape. With the way Remus is presented in canon and the way that Sirius forgives Remus in the shrieking shack it means, which would not happen if Remus slept with Lily as Sirius and James were like brothers, shows that Remus could have never done something so immoral. If anything Remus has the most morals of the marauders and as he has so few friends he would never do something to betray them in such a manner.

JBern replied:

I like that you challenge me on this, but having had the unwritten guy rule violated  by one of my friends I know it can happen.   (True I wasn't married to this particular woman, but you get the picture.)   As for your other comments along with the others that disapproved, I wrote a long reply in my section of the forums on this site.   Give it a look and see what you think.  

In the final analysis, everyone is human and capable of mistakes.   Read my arguements and see that they are plausible.   You could easily look at Remus as a man who shunned physical affection from females because of his condition.   In a moment of weakness for them both he could have succumbed to the temptation.  

Similar arguements to the ones you make for Remus could be made on Peter Pettigrew's behalf, but we know he did betray James and Lily.~Jim

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 5:06pm

Heh, this is getting interesting. He appears to have all of James' memories and knowledge, but the body's capabilities are those of Harry. Now, if he can train up using James' knowledge, he'll definitely be formidable - if he can stay sane after some of the less savory things he's learning. His absconding to Godric's Hollow should be fascinating for the shockwaves it generates, if nothing else.

JBern replied:

In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

Patches posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 4:52pm

This is a really interesting story. It is a concept I hadn't thought of. I can see why Harry/James is confused and frustrated. I am really glad Dobby is there to help him and take care of him. If he really needs to train and he does he doesn't need to do it on an empty stomach. Thanks for writing and I look forward to all of your updates. pms

JBern replied:

The question is, "Is HJ happy that Dobby's there?"   The elf's not your usual self.   In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

Michael69 posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 4:40pm

Lovely...great chapter. No really...I mean it...but I'm still a bit miffed about your little cliffie.

JBern replied:

You mean my cliffie on Bungle.   Chapter 21 is done.   It'll be up this weekend.   In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

Jearom posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 4:19pm

So far I love this story. This is one of the better first-person fics I've read and this is definately an original plot bunny; I've never seen a Harry-is-James/Harry- has-James's-memories story.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   I still think Draco664's first person stuff is better, but I am improving.   In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

Dellaran posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 4:17pm

This continues to be one of the most original premises I've seen in HP fanfic for a while. I'm looking forward to the next installment!

JBern replied:

Thanks!   In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

mathiasgranger posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 3:05pm

This is wonderful, it is such a strange but great take on the Potterverse.

The vulgarity in this isn't just there for show either, having the memories of a twenty something year old man, that had the life experience of someone far older is an amazing dichotomy to show in a teenager's body.

I like that you didn't make Lily a saint, although I don't know about Remus sleeping with her. The imperfections make the characters amazing and lushly detailed. I hope you update soon.

Thanks for writing,
Matt

JBern replied:

I'm glad you find my work unusual.   I've rather enjoyed the credit given universe, but I have been rather behind in my reading and haven't looked at it in months.

In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

Sterling posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 2:51pm

Great update. I like it how you add depth to Jame's life by adding less then perfect things about him and his life (Lily, Remus, et. al.)

JBern replied:

In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

Jim_xinu posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 2:33pm

Well, I'm sure that a lot of people will be put off it, but I think that the flaws you've introduced in the Potters and friends really make them a lot more human. I think I may have said that before. :-)

It was a very stressful time and the fact they weren't paragons, while distressing to Harry, makes them a lot more real to me. So often everybody in HP fic exist only in relation to Harry.

I'm looking forward to the next time Harry/James meets Remus. Promises to be interesting in the chinese proverb sense of the word.

You might also address at some point the reason why Lily or James wasn't the secret keeper. It's never explained, that I recall, and I've always thought that was a major "what were you THINKING?!" point in canon. Is it weakened while the keeper is within the charmed area? Is it painful or harmful to the keeper? Considering your talent for complicating canon things (in a good way), I bet you could do something interesting with it.

Another idea that might be cool: if the Potters (or others) had a 'scorched earth' home defense in place. If nobody survives when LV comes knocking anyway, he should at least be made to regrow his eyebrows afterwards. That sounds like something that fit your style to me. :-D

Good chapter, thanks for sharing it with us.

JBern replied:

I think realism adds to the story.   I won't do anything in a story unless I can justify it.   I like your point about the Secret Keeper.   I agree that it causes pain to the secret keeper if they are in the secret place for too long.   Probably why DD never spends that much time in #12.   At least that's what I am going for in this one.

In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

Jalimar posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 2:02pm

excellent!! wasnt sure where u were goin with this at first, but its a dam good read. keep up the great work

JBern replied:

Thanks for the review.   In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

millercommamatt posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 1:57pm

I'm getting the impression that Harry is now more James than Harry. I think I was expecting more of a blending of the two, but it looks like James has taken over. Is that by design?

JBern replied:

Not so much.   The readers have 3 books of canon Harry to mull over.   By design I have to show what JP's life was like.   HJ will be a blending of the two.   In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

björn nilsson posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 1:57pm

Exelent work as alvays, keep them coming

JBern replied:

Thanks.   In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

Boofers posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 1:52pm

Where is the Rambo referance? I missed that hmm..

Anywho.. like the chapter, and I also like how you make it a point to say that HJ just can't be attracted to the younger girls.. there are too many stoires out there where a 30 year old Harry goes back in time to his younger body and starts hooking up with a bunch of 11 year old girls.. That just seems iffy to me.. I also like how Harry has a sense of resolve at the end of this chapter.. like he is done whining and is finally ready to move ahead and take control.. I've always been a big fan of the independant Harry fics.. I guess thats all I have to say for now.. I think that this review is quite long enough..

so until next chapter.. good day to you.. and good luck

JBern replied:

Darned if I know what Rambo reference they're talking about either?   I've always been a bit put off by the go back and snuggle with 11 yr olds too.   HJ's problem is not too many 16-20 yr olds are going to want to snuggle with a just barely 14yr old waif of a boy.   In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

Fishburne posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 1:49pm

BOOYA! Awesome and wicked!

Fanboy for another week!

Keep it up old man, its getting really good!


Fish

4 favorite shirts shrunk - gotta love overzealous teenagers

JBern replied:

Thanks F-Man.   Sorry about the shirts.   I'm still trying to get my 5yr old to pick up her toys, but I'm sure I'll be saying that when she's a teen too!

In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

FULLMETAL posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 1:35pm

Remus screwed Lily! Now that's definitely a better reason not to trust him than "we didn't trust him because he's a dark creature, although we didn't seem to mind all those years when we would transform into animagi and spend the fool moon with him." I wouldn't hold it past the old pedophile to do it. Makes you wonder if he has alternate reasons why he's banging Tonks. Great chapter! and thanks for the food for thought!

JBern replied:

Well thanks.   I always thought that whole reason for not trusting Remus was pretty Vanilla.   Why wouldn't they say, "We can't trust Sirius because he comes from a Dark family!"

In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

millercommamatt posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 1:34pm

You made a Rambo reference. I think that's a HP fanfiction first.

JBern replied:

Email me back and tell me the Rambo reference.   It wasn't intentional.   I'd just like to know where I made it!~Jim

in-fanficauthors posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 1:21pm

Interesting. I guess HJ and Riddle are equals in sanity. An interesting way for them to be equal, but whatever works.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Well HJ can get better.   Riddle - not so much...

In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim