Musings of Apathy posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 1:06pm

Getting quite a bit confusing, but altogether a great story. The revelation about Lily and Remus's one time affair hurts, all the more that they died before they could patch it up. It will certainly make Harry's relations with Remus stilted, at the very least.

This will gain a lot from some Beta work, but I won't point out how and where right now.

Thanks for writing.

Mike (MoA)

JBern replied:

If I don't see anything from my competitor by the time the next chapter is ready, then I'm going to call it off and start working with my team.   It's annoying to know that I'm doing my best and still go back and see the gaffs, areas where it made perfect sense to me, but not everyone else.   At some point if there is a priori incantem effect there should be an interesting minute of discourse with HJ and Lily...

And now for the cut-n-paste section of the reply...

In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

QOShea posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 1:05pm

Good chapter. The hat still hasn't been burned, I'm shocked!

Will Harry deck Remus the next time he sees him, that is the question!

JBern replied:

Of course the Hat stays around.   I'm beginning to wonder whether it will push the bounds of good taste with it's song this year....

As for HJ and Remus, you'll have to wait and see.   In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

Particle_Accelerator posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 12:58pm

Hmm, that was an interesting chapter. The revelations about Lily's sexual behavior were a departure from the norm, but from what we know about Remus and Lily, one could make a case for them being involved at some point. LOVED the imagery about JP summoning the ladies' panties, I need to learn that trick. :D

I realize this is part of a contest, but there were some punctuation mistakes that, if fixed, would make some of the passages more readable.

JBern replied:

Imagine the trauma if Neville found out what JP did to his mother with that trick!   Glad you liked the chapter.   If I don't see something from my competitor by the time chapter 4 is ready, I'm just going to start working with my usual team on it.   There's no sense in delivering unbetaed work when I know I can do better.  

In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

Black's Phoenix posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 12:43pm

That was some unessesary shit, no offense but Lily and Remus are both the type of characters where they never would have engaged in what happened. THat was over the line I mean really that would never happen and it shouldn't have been even put into the chapter. Now I am not saying that Lily was all good, but it is just compeletly out of character from her as given by JKR to cheat on James just as James would not cheat on Lily. Sure they might have fights and they will have flaws but it was well known by everyone that knew James and Lily that niether would cheat on the other no unless they were drugged or under a spell and had no control over their actions.

JBern replied:

Again, I like the challenge, but I do disagree with you on your points.   All humans are capable of weakness.   You need only look at the TV each night to see someone admitting the errors and asking for the public's forgiveness.

Of course Harry would only recieve the ideal version of his parents from Hagrid, DD, McG and the rest.   Hell, DD won't even say bad things about Snape!

Regards~Jim

reimanr06 posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 12:24pm

drat i forgot to add "of James's mindset and the general situation right before the end"

JBern replied:

Thanks.~Jim

reimanr06 posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 12:23pm

wow, the characterization of James is pretty standard, but this is the first time I've ever seen Lily portrayed as she is here. Authors tend to make her into some kind of perfect saint. This is probably the best and most realistic representation ive ever read.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   I strive for realism and making the readers see the characters in a whole new light.   In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

Yojo posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 12:22pm

Very nice chapter, esp the insight about James being left handed; that truly threw a curve ball that I had not anticipated into the story. Hermione would pick up on that in an instant, not to mention ripping apart Harry for doing something so drastic. I loved the little part about James' sex life, and really want to hear more about his failures: surely he wasn't born smooth like that, right? So just throw in a few memories of him screwing up and I'll be laughing my ass off.
Keep up the amazing work.

JBern replied:

I'll work a failure or two into the mix.   Probably about the time HJ starts pursuing FD...

Glad you liked the left handed thing.   It's always perplexing how Harry would suck at some spells, but then turn around and learn a difficult one like the Patronus.

In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

Crys posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 12:09pm

Though I dislike what you've done to Lily's character, it does make sense. She's human. With human weaknesses. Rubbing Harry's nose in it, while possibly cruel, is the quickest way to get him to see reality.

Interesting story you're brewing.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   I'm never a fan of long and drawn out angst.   Though if there is a priori incantem event in this story the discourse between HJ and Lily's echo might be fascinating...

Plus I am aiming to finish this story before I even get close to the 80K mark.   Something that I was blatantly unable to do in my other 2 stories.   Heck, TFtCD will probably reach 300K before it's done.  

In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

fuddledone posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 12:08pm

Pretty damn good. I have read a few stories with good twists but this one is definitely original. Your version of the hat is funny and has a more realistic personality than any other I have had the pleasure to read.

JBern replied:

Thank you.   In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

AK posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 12:02pm

I really like this story, the crude style and a good first person POV is something that's hard to come by. Accompanied by more than decent writing quality and you've got a winner.

I do hope that you will update more often than in a month.

JBern replied:

Alas, my other two stories take precedence until they are completed.   Darkness has about 8 chapters left in it and Bungle has about 4.   After that, you should see an increase in this story's production.   In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

Greg Johnson posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 11:53am

Another great chapter! Can't wait for more. Keep up the good work.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

Prospero Hibiki posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 11:50am

Sweet!

...and now i have to rush into the building and study for RP-2!
ET3 Mongoose @ 0900

JBern replied:

What's the point of adding heat?   To make steam!!!!! BWAHAHHAHAHHAHAHAH

To anyone else reading the replies it's an inside joke....

Thanks for the review.   In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

uNople posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 11:49am

Aah, the mystery unravels. I'm really enjoying this story dude, you're doing an awesome job.

The way that you don't immediately unravel everything is sweet, because it keeps us guessing. I look forward to the next chapter of this

JBern replied:

Thanks a bunch.   Bungle 21 will be out this weekend.   In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

Matthew Sands posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 11:39am

Crap, the sheer irony of me rereading Lord Dwar's fic and finishing just to see this posted is a bit mind-boggling, not to mention creepy.

The Hat being not just a foul-mouthed bastard, but also a dirty old goat is a great touch. As always, the interesting spin you put on characters and events is a joy to read.

JBern replied:

Thanks Matthew.   I didn't clear the title of the chapter with Lord Dwar, but I don't think he will object.   He writes a very good Independent Harry as well.   I take pride in my characterization of people.   I want them to seem as real and believable as possible.

In my section of the forums on this site I have a long rambling on my rational behind the personalities of James Lily and Remus in this particular story.   Check it out.   You should find it interesting.~Jim

MrRigger posted a comment on Thursday 22nd March 2007 11:05am

I'm enjoying this story. It's a great deal different than anything else I've read so far, mainly because the premise is just a lot different. And the Sorting Hat is just funny as shit. I'd like to see more in the near future, but understand that you have other things you're working on.

JBern replied:

Who doesn't love a foul mouthed sorting hat.   As my other projects wind down this will pick up steam.   The premise certainly has struck a note with you readers out there.~Jim

dogbertcarroll posted a comment on Tuesday 20th March 2007 12:54pm

Excellent work. Loved your version of Dobby and
the Sorting hat. Yeah, a reworked tournament
would be a good idea. With all the time they
had you could really leave in the original tests
without crowding the number of events.

JBern replied:

Well now chapter 3 is up!   Hurry you must read and review soon!   The opening line of the chapter should be enjoyable...~Jim

Boofers posted a comment on Sunday 18th March 2007 9:20am

Have to say that I like the start and that the summer should be interesting.. actually I'm not sure if I already said that or not.. I have trouble keeping track of my own reviews sometimes.. anyway I was just wondering if there was a progress report that you could give us for this story? I know you've been busy, as I've seen 3 chapters of your other stoies published since chapter 2 of them.. I'm just hoping that you haven't abandoned the idea since it seems like your little contest has been forfeited by the others..

Anyway time to wrap my ramblings up.. good luck to yous with your future chapters and keep up the good work

JBern replied:

Definitely not abandoned.   I have about 2000 words of chapter 3 done, but I put up chapter 20 of Bungle and realized the awful cliffhanger I have left the viewers in, so I am working on chapter 21 of Bungle first, but then chapter 3 of this is next, but just because you're a nice reviewer, here is the opening paragraph to chapter 3.

"And I wonder what revelations await us tonight, Potter? I never had Evans pegged for doggy style stuff the face in the pillow type. She always seemed like such a missionary prude. Just goes to show you how the years can change a person, doesn’t it?"

Jim

mac_gin posted a comment on Saturday 17th March 2007 12:28am

Sorting Hat - is a very foul mouthed object, but dealing with Stumbledork for many years would send most people nuts. And DD bashing can be fun!

Interesting twist on the memory merge, time travel harry has been overdone. The question is when does the "James" memories stop?

JBern replied:

Glad you enjoy it.   Chapter 21 of Bungle is next, but then I am coming back for chapter 3 of this.   The next 2 chapters should answer your questions.~Jim

cjonbloodletter posted a comment on Thursday 8th March 2007 9:57am

Nice a first person story. Way to many people only tell them in third person, which is cool and all, but you don' get the depth of character with them like you do with first persons. And the story type is actually perfect for the type of story you're trying to make(this is assuming that I actually know what kind of story you're trying to make), as you can't really get the self conflicion, or how close to the edge of insanity Harry's pushing it wih this whole possession thing.
Alright I'm done saying a whole paragragh of nothing.
Keep up the good work,
Cjon the Bloodletter
Conqueor of the Dark Realms

JBern replied:

Thanks for the review.   I mainly wanted to try 1st person because I haven't done one yet and the storyline fits perfectly with 1st person.   Chapter 3 will be out soon.   I hope to hear from you again.~Jim

Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Wednesday 7th March 2007 2:08am

I've read the Happy Sorting Hat, the Alcoholic Sorting Hat, the Slytherin Sorting Hat, but never the filthy-minded, foul-mouthed, skull-fucking Sorting Hat and it's wonderful. I can't wait to see what you do with the Tournament. I agree that spreading them out that far always seemed a bit strange. More please. Great chapter.

JBern replied:

Glad you liked it.   Chapter 21 of Bungle is coming first, but then I am back to chapter 3 of this one.   As a thank you for all the reviews, I will leave you with the opening paragraph to chapter 3.  ~Jim

"And I wonder what revelations await us tonight, Potter? I never had Evans pegged for doggy style stuff the face in the pillow type. She always seemed like such a missionary prude. Just goes to show you how the years can change a person, doesn’t it?"