GaelicDragon posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 9:58am

You know, I hope you continue this...mainly so that I don't feel so lost.

It so-far seems to be very interesting, it is just being thrust into the middle of things that is problematic for me.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Things should clear a bit in chapter 2.~Jim

swordchucks posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 9:55am

I love it! When you put Harry and James together you get... a pretty good character. Harry is a lot like Lily, and Lily was a strong balance for James, so it looks like you're now going to have a single character with a good balance. Not to mention he's a charming devil.

A good job with the first person, as well. Having seen he amazing work you do with second person, it's not a big shock to me, though.

One comment:

"There are aches in parts of my body that shouldn’t exist on a thirteen year old."

For some reason... I first read this as meaning that Harry had breasts. I need to get out more...

JBern replied:

Yeah.   I agree you should get out more... :)

Thanks for the review.   I hope you will enjoy how the character develops.~Jim

Blackstone4005 posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 9:49am

Looks to be a very good begining. I like Harry's first person voice. The plot is very interesting.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Chapter 2 coming in 1 week.~Jim

uNople posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 9:47am

Nice story.

I think that Harry's skills are either because he's really his father, or his father's possessing him.

JBern replied:

Stay tuned for the answer.   Next chapter in 1 week.~Jim

Wolfric posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 9:36am

I think it has promise. It is a wrinkle I haven't run across before. I look forward to further installments. Thanks. W.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Chapter 2 due out next Friday.~Jim

Princess Fictoria posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 9:34am

Awesome story! I love it and am very interested as to whose memories he is absorbing... especially if its Riddles... as I never saw him as a quidditch player. Though his father was a chaser, and his mother was probably into runes... maybe his parents memories? Hurry and post more soon.

JBern replied:

For a hint read the story description.   Chapter 2 Next Friday.~Jim

duke_bonez posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 9:31am

I solemnly swear you are up to no good. Actually that was great. My only real complaint is that now I have three of your stories I have to wait for new chapters off. Which for the most part is a good thing....if you get rid of the wait.

Didn't spot any mistakes, but I wasn't really doing the critical reading bit. Now I'll have to find the other author and see how the stories compare.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   I appreciate it.   Next chapter in 1 weeks.   Hope I'm not spreading myself too thin.~Jim

James posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 9:31am

This is just cruel ... Now there are 3 stories to eagerly wait, Excellent first chapter

JBern replied:

Three is a great number isn't it?   Next chapter in 1 week.~Jim

stgilman10 posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 9:20am

That was great. I didn't even realize until Ollie's line about a chasing machine that James played chaser and it's coming out. For those that missed it, you made it obvious with the runes, but it was still well done. Please keep up with the others along with this though, especially Bungle.

JBern replied:

I plan to keep up with the others.   This came on as a challenge I issued to another author at DLP.   Chapter 30 of TFtCD is due soon.~Jim

DrT posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 9:10am

oops, ignore most of the previous comment, as I didn't see this under Harry/Fleur. So james had a thing for unobtainable witches, now I understand!

"T"

JBern replied:

Well with an older mindset, Cho, Ginny, Luna and the rest would look like teenyboppers to someone mentally around 20.   Fleur on the other hand is an exotic beauty...~Jim

DrT posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 9:06am

Interesting story. This will drive Hermie crazy! Wonder if James liked red heads or smart Muggle-born witches better. . . .

"T"

JBern replied:

Would have been interesting, but not for this vehicle.~Jim

PhoenixAnkaa posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 9:03am

Hmmm… intriguing beginning. I don’t think I have ever read a plot line where Harry’s confrontation with the Dementors caused a change in his abilities. I greatly like the novelty of the idea, and look foreword to seeing where you take this.

PA

JBern replied:

The irony is his father really did save him at the lake...   Sorry couldn't resist.~Jim

jzysman posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 8:49am

COOL! This just simply isn't fair. I mean I just don't know what to root for anymore. This is a really awesome beginning. I am looking forward to more. Thanks!

JBern replied:

Thanks.   I'll work hard to keep up on all 3 stories.~Jim

clt_71 posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 8:43am

OOOOH! This looks like it will get good and interesting. Looking forward to seeing where it goes.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Next chapter in 1 week.~Jim

jeffstrauser@yahoo.com posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 8:28am

Very nice story. I can't wait to see what happens next. You're doing an awesome job at a first person seeing as you've never done one. DO keep up the outstanding work and update soon please:):):):)

JBern replied:

Thanks.   I wanted to prove I can write all 3 perspectives.   I do have to give props to Draco664 for showing how good 1st person can be.~Jim

aemon_targaryen posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 8:25am

Ack! Another story to occupy your time!

Intriguing start, although I'm not sure where this is going-a re-do time-travel fic? Past lives? Partial possession? James & Lily Potter Redux through genetic memory(a la Stargate SG-1)? All seem possible at this point. It's odd reading this perspective, given the style of the other two stories you have, but nothing like stretching one's wings I guess. As always, looking forward to more, and very curious about the direction this will take.

JBern replied:

Ack!   You're right!   The storyline itself will eventually become apparent and I wanted to prove to myself that I could do all three POVs (didn't want to do it at the same time, but oh well...)

Jim

Carlos posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 8:21am

wow, so far so good, waiting on how this story will turn out!!!
good luck on it

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Next chapter in 1 week.~Jim

amulder posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 8:19am

Interesting start. Another take on a redo fic? Or something else? Hmmm.

Your Brit-picker will no-doubt turn Ollie's one finger salute into a proper two-finger one.

I like the quick/light chapter. Nice to have quick reading chapters every now and then.

Good snarky internal monologue from Harry, without being completely over the top. What other interesting abilities will he discover - apparition?

But what caused it - not the time turner, or it would affect Hermione also. Why would the Dementors do this?

Hmm, Dementors... is it NOT a redo fic? is it actually bits and pieces of other peoples souls being absorbed by Harry after tussling with and defeating all those dementors?

Hmm,

thanks
...art

JBern replied:

Sadly, no beta or britpicker on this one.   The challenge I agreed to says I fly solo.   After the story ends I will solicit the services of anyone who'd like to clean the story up for me.

The irony is it was his father that saved him at the lake...

Jim

Cary1 posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 8:11am

Very nice.
You've got me reading three stories now!

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Now if I could just win the lotto, I could write full time....

Jim

reimanr06 posted a comment on Friday 9th February 2007 8:06am

sweet story... I can't say I've ever heard of this idea being written before. I look forward to reading it, especially if its the same quality as your other work.

JBern replied:

The storytelling should be, but my mechanics are lackluster and the challenge prohibits betas and britpickers, so we'll see.~Jim