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Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Sunday 10th June 2007 5:26pm

Ah, this is getting rather interesting and invovled. I suspect getting everything merged properly is still going to take time. I do admit, the Sorting Hat is an entertaining bit of habdashery.

Quite the interesting chapter here, with the dynamic tension between the older James and the young Harry in personality and preferences. How this settles out should be "fascinating".

JBern replied:

Glad you like that HJ is still and evolving person.   Obviously James Potter's knowledge of teenaged girls wasn't quite as useful as HJ had hoped.   I hope I can continue to impress you.~Jim

Musings of Apathy posted a comment on Sunday 10th June 2007 5:00pm

That was excellent. Harry/James is really going around the bend with the women in this chapter. That sucks, all lead up and then the rug pulled out from under him. I would like to see the sorting hat song with influences from Harry/James. It could be interesting, if you can pull it off.

Thanks for writing.

Mike (MoA)

JBern replied:

Thanks for the review.   I appreciate it.   I don't know if I can do the Hat's song justice.   I'll play around with it in what little free time I seem to have nowadays and see what I can come up with.

Regards,

Jim

Prince Charon posted a comment on Sunday 10th June 2007 5:00pm

You're very good at this. Just the right mix of funny and dramatic.

Thank you for the update.

More soon, please.

JBern replied:

Next update in 2 weeks.   I have to go help Neville whack someone in TFtCD.~Jim

draalder posted a comment on Sunday 10th June 2007 4:20pm

I am liking this story just as much, if not more than Bungle; good job! I am not sure you even need to go through the whole sorting song though. We all have an idea of what Hat is like and if we have a lead in I am sure we all can fill in the blanks. The payoff for that part in the story is the reaction to it from everyone. Whatever you go with, I am sure it will be entertaining. Looking forward to your next chapter, take your time.

JBern replied:

Thank you very much for the review.   Next chapter is in 2 weeks.   Maybe I'll be able to craft a Sorting Hat song, but I won't fixiate on it.~Jim

Sterling posted a comment on Sunday 10th June 2007 4:00pm

Wonderful work as always. I look forward to your next chapter :-)

JBern replied:

Thanks~Jim

tdougla posted a comment on Sunday 10th June 2007 3:28pm

Great chapter, I agree that you moved quickly through the summer, but it was a part of the story that seems to be more set up/prolog for the rest of the plot. You did a good job of making sure we knew what was different from cannon in your story, and then kept moving without getting bogged down.

As for the song, I can think of a way to skip it that might be moderatly funny if you don't have a song planned out and don't want to take the time to write one. If you take the narrative right up to the point of the song and then cut away, you can then referece back to the song with out useing specific lyrics, letting us, the readers, use our imagination to fill in the blanks. For example (and I'm compleatly makeing this up as I go along):

"Oi Dean, what kind of twisted mind would think of doing THAT with a flobberworm!?"
"You're right Seamus, I'll never get that image out of my head as long as I live!"

I'm not sure why you would cut, perhaps something dramatic happens somewhere else, or HJ is distracted for some reaseon. Just a general thought and would get you out of composing a whole song if you didn't want to. Otherwise, keep up the good work!

JBern replied:

Thanks.   I'm glad you appreciate it.   I may even use some of your suggestions.   There's a good chance HJ may miss the sorting ceremony only to see a pair of newly sorted boys exiting saying 'Hey what was  word it used that rhymed with Delores?   I don't think I've ever heard that before?'

Jim

Greg Johnson posted a comment on Sunday 10th June 2007 3:22pm

Another great chapter!! Can't wait for more. Keep up the great work.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Next chapter in 2 weeks.~Jim

gadriam posted a comment on Sunday 10th June 2007 3:21pm

A complete riot!

Well, he sure does the best of a bad(ass) situation.
It would be fun to make him sort of "explore" Ginny's possibilities, but i think this partially failed casanova thing is too great. The real options he has are ones he just don't want. Life's like that, sometimes. Great job.

You don't have to write the song. Just write HJ's reactions to particularlely saucy lines and you'll be home (poetry)free.

Keep at it, polish Darkness off and start the new one.
I'm really looking forward to both the Dark conclusion and Turn Me Loose.

g

JBern replied:

Glad you enjoyed it.   I'm running out of steam after replying to all these reviews so forgive my brevity.   I'll do the song if I can do it justice.   If not, I'll use some innuendo and leave it up to everyone's fertile imagination.~Jim

david abbey1 posted a comment on Sunday 10th June 2007 3:04pm

Hey Jim,
please oh please use the lyrics from this chapter! you've got me laughing my ass off already and its only ch. five! can't wait to see six. i swear, this site is addicting all the writers are the bomb!especially you!
bigD

JBern replied:

Maybe, if I can do it justice.   Otherwise, I won't hold up the chapter just to write a song.   Next chapter in 2 weeks.~Jim

Mark Blaine posted a comment on Sunday 10th June 2007 2:32pm

Good work. I feel sorry for Ginny, I guess, but she kinda deserved it.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Ginny kind of gets a raw deal in my stories, but she has entire websites devoted to giving her her happily ever after, so I don't feel too bad.~Jim

johnbr posted a comment on Thursday 7th June 2007 5:54am

This story is bloody awesome. I've seen a few harry possession stories either by his older self, Lily, or Godric Gryffindor, I like this one, it has a whole lot of promise, especially with the foul mouthed hat and Dobby, its like Harry James has the Wizarding version of the angel and devil on his should with added Terrets on the same time.

Good luck and may Merlin be with you.

JBern replied:

I'm glad you like it.   Next chapter is coming in 2 weeks.   I hope I continue to impress you.~Jim

dogbertcarroll posted a comment on Tuesday 5th June 2007 3:48am

"I’d bear witness for you. It’d be justifiable…"

I love the hat! Evil little bugger that it is, it
makes some very good points.


Not to mention, everyone’s pretty sure you offed Quirrell.

*snicker*

Great chapter.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Sorry for the delay in replying, but I've been busy.   Glad you liked this and chapter 5.~Jim

busted posted a comment on Wednesday 30th May 2007 7:24pm

I think this story is heaps good :D Its funny it actually makes me laugh. I want HJ to hurry up and bone Katie :P I like the sound of him actually have some conquests in the year that would be funny.. The only part I didn't like so far is that Lily supposedly had an affair with remus but i just pretend i didnt read that and everything was peachy ;)

JBern replied:

Thank you.   Sorry for the delay in my reply, but I do try to reply to every review I get.   You have your answers about HJ and conquests.   Probably not the ones you wanted, but they should have amused you.~Jim

Wonderbee31 posted a comment on Wednesday 30th May 2007 3:18am

Go Hat! Looks like he's definitely got the right idea, even if its a little crass about it. Can't wait to see what the repercussions of this conversation with Katies like, either she's going to be really intrigued, or abvoid Harry like the plaque, can't wait to see.

JBern replied:

Wow!   This is the last one.   I'm finally caught up on my replies for this story.   Thank goodness!   I'm glad the story continues to impress you.~Jim

jeffstrauser@yahoo.com posted a comment on Tuesday 29th May 2007 4:13pm

AWESOME CHAPTER!!!! I can't wait to see what happens in the next chapter. I think the hat is cool especially with attempting to set up Katie with Harry, I thought that part was the funniest part ever. Any chance they'll hook up and he'll "seal the deal" as the hat said? If he does who's he gonna move onto next? DO keep up the awesome work and update soon please:):):):)

JBern replied:

Man that's a lot of reviews to reply to.   Thanks for this one as well.   Since ch 5 is up, you have your answers.~Jim

dboris posted a comment on Tuesday 29th May 2007 12:07pm

Well, I don't really know what to say. I like it, but I also dislike it. Strange, huh?

There were a lot of failed attempt at humour, I don't see where the story is going, and I can't even have ideas because it leaves no room for ideas. I can't see this fic becoming an action/adventure one. The beginning just makes it impossible. That's what I dislike. I think.

Now, the good part, is that I tell myself: Don't think about the bad things and enjoy this Jbern(c) new first-person story and laugh at the somehow funny situations. I read way too many story with a powerful Harry getting knowledge from god knows where, being a pussy or having a 100 old mind in a body's boy.

Sometimes Harry seems to be just, like a two year old boy. Though it's rare.

I liked however the sorting hat. Some insults are just funny, like the one where he threaten to skullfuck (you couldn't have choosen a better term) Harry. Though when Harry and Katie were eating ice cream, I found it a little strange.

It for sure isn't as good as Bungle in the Jungle or TFTCD, but your unique way of writing compensate it largely.

For what I've seen in DLP, it is apparently some kind of contest with Vash or whoever, and so I get the feeling you rushed this a little too fast.

My teachers used to tell me "You could do much better because you have the potential". I believe the same could be said here.

Maybe once it finished you could rewrite some part of the story, and I guess it will make this much more enjoyable.

Doesn't matter if there isn't a specific plot. Just because one doesn't have one doesn't mean it's bad. Just different.

lnky

JBern replied:

I could have sworn I replied to this, but I guess not.   Thank you for the long review.   I can see that we don't share the same sense of humor, but that's okay.   I appreciate the criticsm regardless and hope that the story will continue to grow on you.~Jim

taxzombie posted a comment on Tuesday 29th May 2007 6:34am

Quite enjoying this tale. Very much so. But I must admit that if I were in Harry's place I would be sorely tempted to throw a certain hat on a pile of burning leaves.

This tale is extremly interesting in that I am curious as to what Harry's final personality is going to be, provided he says sane that is.

Please, keep it coming.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   As you can see the next chapter is up.     Sorry for the tardy reply and hope you like what you saw in chapter 5.~Jim

Ken Warner posted a comment on Tuesday 29th May 2007 5:43am

great story in this chapter - It will be interesting to see how you handle the embarrassment with katie, but the foulmouthed Hat does have 1000 years of experience in human nature more than harry does - that 10 to 1 ratio should be good for something.

Is the bad temper caused by something akin to the 'self aware computer' problem that Larry Niven used in a couple of his short stories?? Not enough input available to maintain interest in the outside world??

thanks for sharing

JBern replied:

Really, I look at the Hat as an object created in the 10th century.   It has a 10th century mindset and if you think about the times and the people then, would the Hat be out of place there?

Plus if you'd been unfairly detained for over 200 years, you'd be angry too.~Jim

MrRobertsIII posted a comment on Tuesday 29th May 2007 5:28am

I love your version of the Hat and the colorful history of the founders that won`t be in book 7.

Very amusing and original. Haven`t come across this premise before. Harry turning to Oliver for help was a nice change as well.

Loved the reason for James not choosing Remus as the secret keeper.

My favorite part was the Hat insulting the Goblins.

JBern replied:

My guess is the hat would have a low opinion of a creature that chooses to serve Wizards and Witches.   Glad you like the premise and hope it continues to impress you.~Jim

Ravenclawchaser68 posted a comment on Tuesday 29th May 2007 3:46am

This is a really good story so far. The sorting hat's language is a bit disconcerting at times, but I think I'm getting used to it. I like how Harry is developing relationships with his older friends, and I'm looking forward to seeing your take on how he interacts with Ron and Hermione. It seems to me that Hermione would have less trouble dealing with a suddenly mature Harry than Ron would. If nothing else though, Harry and Ron will always have Quidditch to talk about. Can't wait for the next chapter!

JBern replied:

There will be more on the relationships next chapter as HJ struggles with who he was, who he is and who he is becoming.   Hope you'll stick around for the ride.~Jim