The Lie I've Lived
Every Rose has a Thorn
By JBern
Reviews
dwilken posted a comment on Friday 25th January 2008 9:44am for Every Rose has a Thorn
Excellent!
JBern replied:
Thanks. Glad you liked it. Turn Me Loose chapter 5 in 1-2 weeks and next update on this one in 3-4 weeks.~Jim
FireFairy posted a comment on Friday 25th January 2008 9:04am for Every Rose has a Thorn
That was really good and I can't wait to see what will happen with Fleur. This is such a great story and I can't wait for an update! Thank you so much for another great chapter.
JBern replied:
Round 1 of the dueling pits HJ versus Fleur...
How's that for a tease?~Jim
DvorakQ posted a comment on Friday 25th January 2008 8:42am for Every Rose has a Thorn
Wow. Both stories you've been cooking up are so much fun to read. The broom race was great, but I'm more interested in how you're going to handle the dueling. Seems like theres gonna be a lotta duels, and in addition the puzzle room sounds vicious. Will they be dumped all together like the final task or will they be timed separately?
JBern replied:
Everyone timed seperately. Not all at the same time like the canon maze. Persons with the least point total go first giving a slight advantage to the ones with higher point totals.
Yes lots of duels and why not?~Jim
dc1 posted a comment on Friday 25th January 2008 8:42am for Every Rose has a Thorn
this was an enjoyable read. the way you introduced Fleur was well done. the overall brrom race was good, was interesting to see Fleur as actually competent in this story compared to JKR's version. the puzzle box is going to be great. i can't wait for Harry to go Ollivander on everyone and turn up with a wand he enchanted.
cheers
dc1
JBern replied:
Yeah, Fleur was just window dressing in book 4. The TWT was as crappy plot device to transport Harry to the graveyard and nothing more. There was alot of wasted potential there.~Jim
Wolfric posted a comment on Friday 25th January 2008 8:02am for Every Rose has a Thorn
I enjoyed the chapter. Our boy will need to watch his back even more. The next two tasks look to be 1 on 1 on 1 against the room so treachery may be off the field of battle but I suspect it will still be a factor. I look forward to learning of the hat and Hermione's interaction. Thanks for writing. W.
JBern replied:
People cheating during the duels! Impossible I say! Blasphemy!
In other words, wait and see. Round 1 features HJ versus Fleur, VK vs CD and AM vs AB.
Jim
silverleafhp posted a comment on Friday 25th January 2008 7:06am for Every Rose has a Thorn
Loved it. Really loved the fact that HJ didn't win the race. It puts him behind and if he really wants to win the overall tournament he's going to have to buck up and go all out in everything.
Really can't wait for the dueling, you tend to write such good action scenes that I am looking forward to a truly amazing chapter.
I like the way you subtly added that Fleur is really not that bad of a person. She misses her home, and is constantly hounded by well wishers (mostly men I assume), that she uses rudeness as a tool to keep people away from her.
Although, I must admit, I am still very much intrigued on how you are going to pull off a HJ/Fluer pairing. They still don't have one iota of chemistry going as of now.
Only thing I am a little leary about is that you are raising the possiblility that HJ will be telling Hermione what's going on. While I like Hermione most of the time, I am just not sure it would work in this fic. Mainly because if HJ gets to chummy with her, it will cut down on "Hat" time, and well, I just may have to do something bad to you if we cut down on Hat time :).
Lastly, I am still waiting for a little bit of Weasley twins revenge action. Still can't wait to see them get put in their place.
It also looks like Harry has some very good compitition in the dueling if the little tidbit you left us about Amii is any indiacation.
Can't wait for the next chapter.
JBern replied:
Thank you for the long review. HJ should keep in mind that he's facing off against 5 of the most talented 17 yr olds from the 3 best schools in Europe.
Fleur is and should be a complex character. I hope I can deliver someone who is just that.
Both HJ and Hermione are going to be terribly busy. I haven't really touched on the Interhouse squads, but Hermione will be up to her ears in work shortly.~Jim
rune1806 posted a comment on Friday 25th January 2008 7:01am for Every Rose has a Thorn
The pool was very well done and something different from what I was thinking you would do. The race was great, I was pull in by your writing of what Hary was thinking while flying. Great update.
JBern replied:
As always, I like to keep you readers on your toes and mix things up. Sadly nobody died in this chapter, I must be slipping.~Jim
ahsun92 posted a comment on Friday 25th January 2008 5:41am for Every Rose has a Thorn
Hmmmm, love the prize part of the Tasks, I do hope Harry gets the pensieve... Philospher's Stone!!!
Anyhoo, I feel that the race could of been done better and with a lot more obstacles of sorts. However, there haven't been many broom races in fics so there isn't much to compare against.
Keep up the Good work!
JBern replied:
HJ will definitely have to work for it if he really wants it. For the race, I wanted the magical equivalent of NASCAR. Without the crashes, how interesting is it to watch? Yet millions do! ~Jim
Stonewar posted a comment on Friday 25th January 2008 5:28am for Every Rose has a Thorn
I love how this is so international.
JBern replied:
Thanks. I wanted it to seem like the biggest thing behind the Quidditch World Cup.~Jim
Amit Patel posted a comment on Friday 25th January 2008 5:24am for Every Rose has a Thorn
Nice update; I liked how you had Harry lose the race. Too many fanfic authors have Harry winning this kind of contest with little competition.
Makes me wonder if you will show us a good ass kicking for the competitors from Harry!
Thanks for the update
JBern replied:
HJ shouldn't just walk through this competition. These are 5 of the best students in all of Europe.~Jim
morriganscrow posted a comment on Friday 25th January 2008 4:34am for Every Rose has a Thorn
Excellent broom racing!
The prerequisite Naked Veela Scene was nicely done, as was the set-up for the next chapter.
All in all a fun read.
JBern replied:
Why is it a prerequisite? Not that I'm objecting or anything!~Jim
skulLXeon posted a comment on Friday 25th January 2008 4:13am for Every Rose has a Thorn
very good as usual...
Adios for now... and see you when you update... =D
JBern replied:
Glad you liked it. Next chapter in 3-4 weeks for this one.~Jim
Cuey posted a comment on Friday 25th January 2008 4:13am for Every Rose has a Thorn
Wow. Fleur is much nicer with her clothes off, Harry should try to get her in that state as much as possible. Looking forward to the dueling tournament and the enchantment contest, I think with the way you write that those two tasks will be highly interesting.
JBern replied:
Eventually, HJ will have to use that line during the story...
Glad you are looking forward to how this plays out.~Jim
impatientuser posted a comment on Friday 25th January 2008 4:05am for Every Rose has a Thorn
Great chapter. The broom race was excellent. I was prepared to be bored or to see a few lines of: they're off, person x wins, yay. I do hate having to wait for the duels though.
Thanks for writing =)
JBern replied:
Hopefully, you've come to expect more from me by now. Dueling is next chapter HJ's first opponent - Fleur.~Jim
dic posted a comment on Friday 25th January 2008 3:58am for Every Rose has a Thorn
I really liked the broom race, it was quite exciting to read.
and the rest of the chapter was good as well...
it'll be interesting to see what harry does with the staff duel.
so... keep it up!!
JBern replied:
Thanks. TML chapter 5 in 1-2 weeks. Lie 11 in 3-4.~Jim
uthamm posted a comment on Friday 25th January 2008 3:49am for Every Rose has a Thorn
Wow. Can't wait to see the scene when Fluer finds out that HJ saw her in the sanctuary. That will be epic - massive fight and make up sex? SWEET!
I have to admit that I did not see the loss coming - I figured that you would show him to be a contender by winning, instead you took the obscure route and did even better!
Nice setup for the pranking revenge on the slytherns. That will work well for some opportunistic plot relief.
Please - tell me that the dueling strategy will be WANDS BLAZING!
Way cool setup on the dueling and puzzle room. I am looking forward to reading that!
Oh, and: "Hopefully, somewhere in France, Padfoot is in bed with two women and a four pack of Rejuvenation potions". Wow. What an image.
I'll uh, be in my bunk. Full Marks!
JBern replied:
Wands Blazing is the only way to go. Having HJ lose, but still do well keeps the story interesting. He did after all lead for almost half the race. It keeps all the other students wondering if he's hoplessly out of his league and getting by on luck or if there is something else...
Jim
Alex00 posted a comment on Friday 25th January 2008 3:45am for Every Rose has a Thorn
Awesome chapter.
JBern replied:
Thanks. Glad you liked it. Turn Me Loose chapter 5 in 1-2 weeks and next update on this one in 3-4 weeks.~Jim
MarinePotterfan posted a comment on Friday 25th January 2008 3:43am for Every Rose has a Thorn
Another great chapter, I can't wait to see Fleur's reaction when she finds out it was Harry checking her out at her Sancuary. Maybe Fleur's problem is when she is around a lot of people she feels there desire to her, and it drives her crazy. The broom race was very well done, I really enjoyed it.
MPF
JBern replied:
You make some valid points about Fleur's state of mind. Yes when she finds out it should be very interesting.
Jim
mathiasgranger posted a comment on Friday 25th January 2008 3:27am for Every Rose has a Thorn
Yes, the Hermione and Harry friendship has come along nicely the last couple of chapters.
HJ is in the position to bring out the best in Hermione in both her intelligence and emotionally. In canon Harry and Ron did manage to pull her out of her shell emotionally somewhat, but they also held her back in other ways.
HJ's approach to her house elf crusade is respectful and he understands her worth without mocking it.
FYI the broom race was plenty interesting, but for comparison's sake, it was sort of like trying to watch a nascar race. There are many who prefer to skip everything but the crashes.
JBern replied:
I'm toying with a scene where instead of HJ ripping into Ron that it ends up being Hermione that does it. We'll see how it plays out.
Well since I was going for NASCAR, (which I don't particualrly care for either) it looks like I got it.~Jim
dogbertcarroll posted a comment on Friday 25th January 2008 9:50am for Every Rose has a Thorn
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