Taegeous posted a comment on Thursday 15th January 2009 2:03pm

I hope that when the showdown between Harry and Dumbles actually happens, that the old man suffers to the bitter end. Pansy, Draco, Dumbles, and even Fawkes...there's a lot of debt to be settled. And why would Dumbledore care about the homunculus and

the dark magic.

He can't care about Harry's soul, when his actions have clearly demonstrated that he doesn't care about his own. The road to hell is paved with

the greater good.

millercommamatt posted a comment on Thursday 15th January 2009 2:02pm

Given everything that been going on in this story. I think Dumbledore may have actually done them a favor. Well, maybe not with that fertility potion part, but getting laid might solve a lot of interpersonal issues.

Cuey posted a comment on Thursday 15th January 2009 1:57pm

Wow. Can't wait to see how you make Harry respond, it'll have to be a doozy. This Dumbledore is definately one of the more unlikable versions I've ever read. Keep up the good work.

Gardengirl posted a comment on Thursday 15th January 2009 1:57pm

That's damn sneaky, making them do the wild monkey dance that way!

Glad to see an update of this one. Enjoyed it muchly :)

Clell65619 posted a comment on Thursday 15th January 2009 1:55pm

- Great Googley Moogley. Magical spanish fly works both ways. Harry's right, Dumbledore needs to die, slowly and painfully.


- Uh, where would one find some of that cream?

Magus posted a comment on Thursday 15th January 2009 1:47pm

The manipulations are coming full swing from the old coot.

I would have loved seeing kreacher becoming more maniac with that kill pansy order, for a strange reason I really do like that ancient brownie

RoseWolf posted a comment on Thursday 15th January 2009 1:45pm

Very interesting chapter. The scene with Hermione was a bit surprising, but certainly in character with the Dumbledore of this story. A logical progression from his manipulative nature in canon to this extreme.

I'll be interested to see what Snape's reason for being so protective of Draco is.

One question, though. Why is Snape so sure that he'd be Headmaster when Dumbles dies? Dumbles having been the only thing standing between Snape and Azkaban for many years, I can't imagine Scrimgeour would be too eager to see a marked Death Eater in charge of Hogwarts. Seems that with Dumbles dead, Snape would be in a very precarious position.

Wolf

DrT posted a comment on Thursday 15th January 2009 1:29pm

Congrats on the book. Hope you sell a lot more than my next monograph will!

Dumbles is really a piece of work here, and deserves anything that happens to him

Jason9 posted a comment on Thursday 15th January 2009 1:15pm

Nice chapter, short, but always a welcome update. I enjoyed how you bastardized Dumbledore a bit more in this one, and played up the hopelessness of Harry, and all of Wizarding England's situation. Keep up the good work!

fyrecat posted a comment on Tuesday 13th January 2009 1:20pm

Great chapter, and yet another fantastic battle scene!

"After all, she is incredibly flexible." LOL!!!

Editorial notes:

"Kwan, can you find us some replacements."
- ... can you ~~?"

Zicou posted a comment on Saturday 3rd January 2009 9:17pm

That fic is a great one too!
Continuuuue!
Z.

fyrecat posted a comment on Monday 29th December 2008 8:37am

Woohoo! Magical Blitzkrieg! So is Harry Rudolph?
Lots of action, sex with the hot alien girl, and a cobbled together, super-fast mode of travel; sounds like an episode of classic 'Trek!

I love it!

Editorial notes: (and I thought this part was over with)

"...the fervor he throws himself into it ..."
- ...fervor *with which* he throws himself into it...
- OR -
...the fervor he throws into it ...

"...If they didn't take us seriously before, I know they are now."

- If they weren't taking us seriously before, I know they are now."
- OR -
- If they didn't take us seriously before, I know they do now."

"Tell me what you know about the Horseman themselves."
- Horsemen

"...a bad place to lose sight of why we're and what we're up against."
- lose sight of why we're *here* and what we're up against.

fyrecat posted a comment on Monday 29th December 2008 7:28am

What a fun chapter!
- And no editorial stuff for three chapters in a row! Either you or your beta / editor has gotten much better. Well done.
I'm curious to find out more about this Svetlanna character.

Thanks for another great chapter

fyrecat posted a comment on Monday 29th December 2008 5:26am

Great chapter!
I like the name Albus Severus Potter, it would be so fitting!

Editorial notes:
- None, again! congratulations!

fyrecat posted a comment on Sunday 28th December 2008 8:26pm

LOL! The Hagrid / Hack scene was hilarious!
I also loved seeing Snape finally get some if the payback he has earned.

Thanks!

editorial notes:
- none. Well done!

fyrecat posted a comment on Sunday 28th December 2008 7:14pm

And the various plots thicken!
Fantastic chapter, as usual.

Editorial notes:
"...In additional to that memory..."
- in addition to...

fyrecat posted a comment on Sunday 28th December 2008 5:56pm

I love the continuing and growing relationship with Luna. Well done.
The Message to Narcissa was masterful!

All in all a fantastic chapter!

Thank you again.

Editorial notes:
"...but they’ve been trying to nice to me."
- trying to *be* nice...

"...when you here a sickly sweet voice..."
- hear.

fyrecat posted a comment on Sunday 28th December 2008 3:59pm

Wow, nothing like a nice, relaxing, uneventful couple of days to ease back into life at Hogwarts, eh?
It's a bit sad to see McGonagal go, but I cheered at the death of Filch.
The changes in Harry's Jaguar form are interesting. I look forward to learning more about that. The Daemonic infusion is obviously what sets Fawkes off about Harry and Hack. How long until everyone figures that out?

I'm definitely enjoying this sequel as much as the first!
Thanks!

Editorial notes: Mostly just typos.
"...surprised that the meat didn’t have move fight in it,..."
- have more fight in it,...

:...you remind yourself that you’re in an underground in a tunnel."
- ...you're in an underground tunnel. - OR - you're underground, in a tunnel. The first is better.

":...you’d rather not uses ..."
- rather not use ...

"Snap pounces,"
- Snape - typo

fyrecat posted a comment on Sunday 28th December 2008 7:49am

Amusing. So what will become of Dumbledore's little whore?

fyrecat posted a comment on Saturday 27th December 2008 9:41pm

Interesting first chapter. What was that thing that attacked Katie?

Editorial notes:
"..roots is moving."
- roots *are* moving.