By JBern
Reviews
dogbertcarroll posted a comment on Saturday 29th September 2007 11:22am
Hermione screwed Harry over and now it looks like the shoe is on the other foot. The fun bit is that because of the oath, Harry has to do his 'best' which means that sex is on the menu, dating just won't do, because the amount of emotional energy won't be nearly as much as a good shag session. I wonder if she'll earn that 'Head Girl' badge.
Can you imagine how Ron will react? *snicker*
JBern replied:
Well, we haven't got around to Ron just yet. What is his story anyway?~Jim
psianogen posted a comment on Saturday 29th September 2007 8:44am
From reading the other reviews I guess I'm the only one that liked how Dumbledore manipulated Harry. In most of the political Harry stories, he just suddenly starts cutting deals and dancing rings around people vastly more experienced than he is. I think you did good in how you depicted Harry, he was a bit over confidant after his successes and really needed a good reminder that he's a very young predator, and surrounded by others vastly more experienced.
Dumbledore was playing political games long before Harry's parents were even born, so I found it a pleasant surprise when, even with Kwan and Bill looking over the wording of the oath, he still was able to get Harry to dance to his tune. I doubt very much that Dumbledore will be replaced any time soon, if and when he's forced out, it will be because it suits his plans.
JBern replied:
Glad you liked it. In so many stories, Harry tries to say, "I'm nothing to you but a weapon." Dumbledore fiercely denies it and so forth. Dumbledore isn't really going to deny it here. He likes Harry and hopes for the best out of him, but stopping Voldemort is his primary goal and he truly believes he is doing what is best.
You are correct that Harry needs to be taken down a peg every now and then. Otherwise this becomes just a super powerful unstoppable Harry fic.
Regards,
Jim
Melissa posted a comment on Friday 28th September 2007 3:33pm
Yeee Haw!!! Up and running again! I always though Albus was an A$$hole! Gimme more... gimme gimme gimme...
Oops, I mean Pretty please with sugar on top?!
JBern replied:
Glad you liked it. Next chapter coming in about 2 weeks.~Jim
RheaN posted a comment on Friday 28th September 2007 8:23am
I absolutely love this story and its predecessor. Good chapter, very well-written. You make me loathe Dumbledore more and more.
JBern replied:
Thanks for the review. Next chapter in 2 weeks.~Jim
Prospero Hibiki posted a comment on Friday 28th September 2007 4:27am
w00t!
This was the perfect gift for me to receive coming off the the Mids to Days switch.
Shorter than I'd like but it did bring up some very interesting points that will prove interesting in the future.
- P. Hibiki
JBern replied:
Sometimes short is a good thing, but it sets up the next chapter nicely.~Jim
Jearom posted a comment on Friday 28th September 2007 3:08am
An excellent Chapter 2. Damn your Albus is a piece of work! To bad for Luna, she'll have to wait for Harry to figure out how to untangle from Hermione, lol.
JBern replied:
Thanks for the review. Next chapter in 2 weeks.~Jim
ShadeHawk posted a comment on Friday 28th September 2007 2:15am
Gaaah, cliffhanger. You are evil
The fabled Hogwards security. I do wonder with portrait spying, is Snape compromised, and used to pass false information to Dumbledore (blind triple agent??)?
As to filial relationship: wouldn't it be easiest to adopt Hermione as either homorary Potter or honorary Black? But the crack about intercourse to solidify bond... it is not so nice when it is on other foot, isn't it?
ShadeHawk
JBern replied:
Evil is my calling...
Glad the chapter raises more questions. You raise a point about filial relationships. I'm sure Harry will be thinking about things like that for a long time to come.~Jim
Ravenclawchaser68 posted a comment on Friday 28th September 2007 1:51am
Wow. The hits just keep coming. Great stuff. I'm suprised at the continuing extent of Dumbledore's idiocy. Screwing Harry over like that was clearly a bad idea. He needs Harry, even if just to fulfill the prophecy. I'm interested to see Harry's interactions with the other students, especially Luna, but I'm certainly willing to delay that for another horcrux.
I hope Harry's old friends realize how badly they've messed up...eventually. Not that Harry will necessarily ever be close with them again, but at least to the point that he thinks they've suffered enough and he doesn't need to attack them every time he sees them. He can't stay that bitter for the rest of his life.
So far I think this is even better than Bungle. The chapters just fly by. If you can keep this pace going the whole way it'll be very impressive. Thanks for writing such a brilliant story!
Jay
JBern replied:
Glad you liked the chapter. I hope to continue impressing you. Dumbledore had a good plan. Now he's somewhat backed into a corner with what he can do.
Next chapter in 2 weeks.~Jim
MarinePotterfan posted a comment on Thursday 27th September 2007 1:44pm
Cliffy to Cliffy, that is so mean. Harry and Hermey fun bags, have to be a couple I don't think that is going to happen. Maybe Luna would go for a threesome. Hermione can now charge DD with a crime by linking her to the blood wards without her knowledge.
MPF
JBern replied:
I'm sure something will happen, probably not what Dumbledore envisions. I suspect Hermione's faith in authority will be badly shaken by all this...~Jim
DobbyElfLord posted a comment on Thursday 27th September 2007 1:15pm
Hey Jim,
Loved the chapter. I read it last night but the conversation with Dumbledore really made me angry. I wanted Harry to rip off Dumble's head and s$*t down his throat! (Ever play Duke Nuk'em?)
Great writing. I am looking forward to the next one!
Rick
JBern replied:
I'm glad I could evoke an emotional response from you. That's a very lofty compliment. Hope your sequel is coming along as well. The next chapter of this in 2 weeks. Chapter 39 of Darkness in a few days.~Jim
pyrodaemon posted a comment on Thursday 27th September 2007 12:50pm
Look I go on vacation and you've updated 'The Lie I've Lived' and started this one with two chapters! I'm so happy.
I can't tell you how much I laughed during the first chapter, it was *killing* me. Dumbledore is a right bastard isn't he? And Remus! Well I can't wait to see what happens to that little traitor. Harry should make some remarks about James getting it one and three, Sirius- Good friend, Peter and Remus -bad.
I'd make the review longer but I've really got to run.
Great chapter and I can't wait to see more from you.
JBern replied:
Wow! Must have been a nice vacation. Glad you enjoyed it. I hope my stories continue to impress you.~Jim
Terry Swain posted a comment on Thursday 27th September 2007 12:25pm
Great chapter. :)
JBern replied:
Thanks glad you liked it. Next chapter in about 2 weeks.~Jim
warpwizard posted a comment on Thursday 27th September 2007 10:45am
Twisted is definitely the word. Nice opener, looking forward to more.
Error check:
The man you see before you is indeed your former classmate and now the junior ambassador from the wizard a* nation of Brazil.
*wizarding
Well that isn’t exactly true, you would* mind taking her in your arms * wringing her scrawny little neck!
*wouldn’t
*missing "and"
It makes you wonder if Ginny couldn’t have you, that* she went for "the next best thing."
*then
The report* you heard were correct; she looks more like a third or fourth year than a sixth year. Never really a very large girl, she’d lost quite a bit of weight and her face is much thinner than you recall.
*reports
You’re* senses tell you, he isn’t Alpha.
*Your
Dumbledore allows his aura to flair* and radiate with power almost causing Hermione to fall from her seat.
*flare
JBern replied:
Thanks for pointing out the errors. I'll do some housekeeping at some point on the story. Next chapter in 2 weeks.~Jim
magus213 posted a comment on Thursday 27th September 2007 8:33am
Wow. Tftcd is good, but tlil and this in particular are both brilliant!
JBern replied:
Glad you enjoyed it. Next chapter of Darkness in a few days. Next chapter of this one in 2 weeks.~Jim
Voldemort is Dead posted a comment on Thursday 27th September 2007 8:31am
I hope Harry gives Dumbledore the HUGE payback he so royally deserves once he gets rid of Voldie!
JBern replied:
Well like Harry said in this chapter - "Hope is a 4 letter word" We'll see what happens.~Jim
draalder posted a comment on Thursday 27th September 2007 6:12am
Possible way out of the "Do your best to protect the school" thing; When the time comes for Harry to do a bad thing to Hermy Kwan could merely stun him from behind for a while, hide Harry, and then threaten Dumbledore not to wake him for a time till he is out of his oath. Kwan didnt sign anything and he is a sneaky, viscious, yet protective friend of Harry's. Plus it would be a great thing to see a showdown of Dumbledore vs. Kwan.
JBern replied:
We'll see how Harry plans to fulfill his promise. Will he win? Probably not. Will he lose? Probably not entirely. The result will be somewhere in the middle.~Jim
PerfesserN posted a comment on Thursday 27th September 2007 5:57am
Good to see a "Turn Me Loose" update, and the cliffie? AAAAAAAARRRRRRRGGGG!
Is Hermione really that gullible or is she being the manipulative one here? Brightest witch of her age, remember?
Given Bill's understanding of "workarounds," Kwan's plain old orneriness and Luna's brains Harry should be able to work it so that Dumbledore is the one to break the magically binding oath.
Looking forward (over the edge of the cliff) to the next thrilling episode. . .
N!
JBern replied:
What's wrong with a good cliffhanger? Don't confuse books and cleverness with wisdom. She's a bit too trusting. Recall all those, "Are you practicing your Occlumency?" "You should go to Dumbledore."
She's a bit too trusting and I think it shows. Next chapter in 2 weeks. Chapter 39 of Darkness in a few days.~Jim
skulLXeon posted a comment on Thursday 27th September 2007 5:40am
damn... they got him, again! Well, seems like Harry has to do something about that oath now. hm... great chapter.... and a kinda interesting twist at the end, other than that, great work as always... and see you around....
AGX[TAIL]
JBern replied:
Well, Harry needs Dumbledore to help with Voldemort. Glad you liked it. Next chapter in 2 weeks.~Jim
veive posted a comment on Thursday 27th September 2007 3:50am
Much too soon for your liking, Albus Dumbledore arrives grasping the leg of his Phoenix. You want to catch the look in his eye, but Fawkes hovers right in front of you hissing angrily. It trills which sounds like a beautiful song played far too loudly forcing you to shy away from it. It turns on the Troll just as quickly and everyone realizes that the office, while quite spacious isn’t the best place for a Troll and a Phoenix to get nasty.
This bugs me, and it is not just you, it is a lot of people.
A pheonix is NOT a light creature.
it is neutral.
the pheonix is eternal, the whole point of a pheonix is that it is nither good nor evil, it existed before those forces were born and it will exist after they are gone.
Aside from that a wonderful story.
JBern replied:
It depends. In this story a phoenix is a creature of light. You'll see a different theory when I post chapter 39 of To Fight the Coming Darkness. You'll also see a 3rd theory when you read The Lie I've Lived where Fawkes appears to have a sense of humor and is amusing itself. I take different characterizations. Harry is vastly different in the three stories.
It isn't established in JKR's universe exactly what a phoenix is. It could be a symbol of the light or what I use in Darkness. Let me know what you think of that. It'll be up over the weekend.
The next chapter of this story coming in 2 weeks.~Jim
00_Knight posted a comment on Saturday 29th September 2007 1:58pm
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