yerocfponk posted a comment on Sunday 2nd September 2007 1:16pm

Wow this chapter is great. I've read your other stories but I never got to reading Bungle in the Jungle till today, so I cruised through it and went along to Turn Me Loose.
I love your writing style in all your stories and the second person in BitJ and TML is cool, it's quite refreshing to see someone use something different to keep fan fiction from staying stagnant. And I love Harry's group of "Merry err Men"

JBern replied:

Wow, you cruised through it in a day!   That's a healthy chunk of reading!   Glad you enjoy it.   Next chapter in 2 weeks.~Jim

Frank Hacklander posted a comment on Sunday 2nd September 2007 7:51am

What a rollicking start to a new adventure! Can't wait for the next update.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   A new chapter coming in 2 short weeks.   Hope to hear from you again.~Jim

robesh posted a comment on Sunday 2nd September 2007 6:23am

Great! Your stories are uncomparable.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Next chapter is coming in 2 weeks.~Jim

Jonny Hughes posted a comment on Sunday 2nd September 2007 4:25am

Quality ... I've read Bungle, ohh about four times and It's good to see the sequel is here. I hope you don't feel the need to incorporate too much of the books the originality and the unusual perspective (which works really well) have been a breath of fresh air.

JBern replied:

Mostly when I borrow from HBP, it will be like the Katie necklace scene where I give you something hopefully much more intriguing.~Jim

Quizer posted a comment on Sunday 2nd September 2007 3:22am

Great chapter! Glad to see you started this up again. The action-packed non-stop roller coaster ride was implemented successfully - there hasn't been a chance for a breather for Harry yet. I sure hope he can keep up with the pace.

I'm looking forward to the next chapter. The events you hinted at all sound very promising.


until next time!


Quizer

JBern replied:

Finally catching up on the giant review backlog.   I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter   No breathers in store for some time to come either!   It's good that I seemed to have maintained the same level of intensity that I ended the original on.   Next chapter in 2 weeks.~Jim

kainboa posted a comment on Sunday 2nd September 2007 3:02am

great chapter as always, loved the scenes with scrimgour and dumbles.

keep up the great work :)

JBern replied:

Thanks.   It was fun to write those scenes.   Who am I kidding?   It's fun to write the whole story!~Jim

Teaos posted a comment on Sunday 2nd September 2007 2:15am

100th review!

Reviewed on DLP just wanted to have the 100th here.

JBern replied:

Well thanks for the 100th review.   I do appreciate it and all your other reviews and comments on DLP.   Next chapter in 2 weeks.~Jim

ShadeHawk posted a comment on Sunday 2nd September 2007 2:13am

Thanks for long awaited "Turn Me Loose"

I wonder a bit about Harry preferring power over finesse; why for example only he was able to kill Death Eater? Although this might have been cause by the fact that DE didn't thought that they have to escape Harry Potter boy ;-)

JBern replied:

Actually, there's a good chance that Hack's DE died as well, Daemon club and all that.~Jim

keebler_elmo posted a comment on Sunday 2nd September 2007 1:49am

good stuff. I love hack and his demonic alterations. Keep up the good work and update soon.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Glad you enjoyed it.   Next chapter in 2 weeks.~Jim

5th_horseman posted a comment on Saturday 1st September 2007 7:38pm

I like it! "Bungle in the Jungle" was a terrific alternate HP story line, and this looks like it will just as good.

JBern replied:

Thanks for the review.   I hope you'll still be saying that when I finish the story.~Jim

Jason9 posted a comment on Saturday 1st September 2007 5:09pm

Had a super long, super nasty day at work, it was very cool to get home and read the chapter to a sequel of one of my all time favorite stories that I had just got done re-reading. Can't wait to see the next chapter.

-J

JBern replied:

Glad I could make an improvement on your day.   Next chapter in 2 weeks.~Jim

stuart posted a comment on Saturday 1st September 2007 3:43pm

alright i have been looking forward to this for awhile now! great chapter, what is the update schedule looking like?

JBern replied:

Next chapter in 2 weeks.   I'm trying to get TFtCD finished in short order.~Jim

Gullwhacker posted a comment on Saturday 1st September 2007 3:00pm

Well, I'll anticipate this, read The Lie I've Lived with gusto, and enjoy the next few chapters of Darkness. Good writing for all three - I note that you've covered all three perspectives. Oddly enough, I think I've come to prefer first-person or second-person perspectives in general; this may reflect on my fic preference. Mind, Darkness's setup is such that we see many sides, so it wouldn't really work with that.

I ramble while I should sleep!

JBern replied:

As a writer I wanted to try new things, so I have experimented with all three perspectives.   I've come to enjoy writing 1st person and 2nd person the most.   It gives a level of intimacy with the character that most 3rd person stories just can't.   Hope you got some sleep!~Jim

scott2 posted a comment on Saturday 1st September 2007 2:04pm

Great story and chapter, I'm all atingle at the 'reunion' to come :)

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Next chapter coming in 2 weeks.~Jim

Rick D Gale posted a comment on Saturday 1st September 2007 1:46pm

Oh, this is going to be a great story! It will be nice to see how Harry can make everybody's life a little harder.

Just let him get enough rest before he kicks Voldemort's back-side... Then Dumbledore's... Then the Ministers.

I look forward to your next chapter.

Rick

JBern replied:

I hope when I'm done it and Bungle will count among your all-time favorites.   Next chapter coming in 2 weeks.~Jim

dc1 posted a comment on Saturday 1st September 2007 1:35pm

there is a god! seeing this story was up certainly made my day. not having read this style of your writing for a while, reminds me how much i enjoy it.

excellent chapter, can't wait for the next one

JBern replied:

I'm glad this story made your day.   Next chapter coming in 2 weeks.~Jim

Sonicdale posted a comment on Saturday 1st September 2007 12:11pm

While you were on hiatus from this series, I recovered. The shakes, the twitching, the bursts of erratic energy from my earlobes -- all gone. I was cured.

And then you go and continue this without posting 12 chapters at once! So now the twitching, the shakes and the bursts are back. And now I've got this odd ache in the back of my skull, somewhere behind my right ear, but closer to the top of my head. It's throbbing, pulsing with an inordinate amount of pain.

So...
To keep me from turning into the raving lunatic I almost am, please post soon. I really enjoyed this fic. Second person fics are few and far between. Ignore the detractors - they don't know a good thing even if it rode up on a dragon and bit them in left pinky toe.

Loved the Weatherby quote. The Heathrow fight was nice. And the showdown (at least the first part of it) with DD is great.

Good work.

JBern replied:

Sorry for the return of the shakes.   It'll be 2 more weeks for chapter 2, but I think you'll find it interesting.~Jim

Miles Hance posted a comment on Saturday 1st September 2007 11:37am

what can be said? i've read all of your other stories at some point, and this one excites me just as much, if not more. bungle was beyond a great start, and this looks to be even better.

if i had to say anything, i'd say concentrate on turn me loose and the lie i'be lived. as for your third story, whose name escapes me at the moment, it's good, but these two are better. partially, it's just the style in which you write. the premise for the lie i've lived, it jumps the shark on the time travel motif and the upgraded harry in a VERY good way. in regards to that, i'm all for a harry/fleur pairing. perhaps you should focus on the fact that they are both underdogs, fighting against people's preconcieved notions of them. fleur as some kind of sex kitten/barbie doll, and harry as hero or villan alternately.

in regards to turn me loose, perhaps 3 things need to be adressed off the bat. one, how badly will harry whip the weasleys who crossed him, and hermy funbags? perhaps calling her that in public in the great hall would be quite therapeutic. I have an idea for a great line for Ron:

Harry: "Ickle Ronnekins. How nice to see you again. I'd like to assure you, I'm quite sure I could cast all three Unforgivables, and you and most of the Weasels have given me the...proper motivation."

modify that line however you see fit, if you use it.

the second thing taht would need addressing will be luna, and that dynamic. it would have to be delicate work, telling luna at some point that harry has a child with another woman and the reasons behind that. he should at least be honest with her.

third, how to further dodge dumbledore. the old man's oath surely is'nt the end of his attempts to get one over on harry, and you have to take that into consideration.

again, great stories! just...think about putting your harry/susan bones story on hold. the lie i've lived and turn me loose...they just seem better, in my opinion.

JBern replied:

I'll jump in and reply to this one real fast.   I appreciate the sentiments and thank you for the review.  

In most instances, I do my best to accomodate reader requests, but in this case I won't.   The reason is simple.   As an author staring at a story that is in sight of a definite conclusion, I can't shrug off To Fight the Coming Darkness with only three chapters and a half written epilogue left.   Call me greedy, but there is a sense of achievement in hitting the complete button on a story.

Longtime readers might remember that I put Darkness on hold while I finished the last few chapters of Bungle back in March/April.   As Darkness is my first posted fanfic, it is important to me to get it done.   I agree it's not my strongest story, but I can't justify shelving it so close to the finish line.

I hope that clarifies my position.   Originally, I wasn't going to post TML until I had Darkness wrapped, but I made a few promises to people to post it by the end of August.

Regards,

Jim

rekdivr posted a comment on Saturday 1st September 2007 9:34am

Thank you for continuing this verse. I absolutely love this storyline and your method of telling it. While I like your other stories, the updates to this one have made me late for work because I didn't want to wait. Tell the Alpha Fight Club thanks for getting you writing this one again.

JBern replied:

AFC is a great bunch of people.   Sorry about making you late for work.   Hope it was worth it.~Jim

Phoenixdor Dragonclaw posted a comment on Saturday 1st September 2007 8:42am

WOOt Great start!! I can't wait to see Harry's reunion with all of his "friends", and their reaction to his troll.

JBern replied:

Ron, I've replaced you with a troll and it's an upgrade!   Thanks for the reveiw.~Jim