By JBern
Reviews
Charles Slone posted a comment on Wednesday 6th January 2010 8:53pm
Finally something decent to read once again. Welcome Back Mate lol
flynhghr posted a comment on Saturday 21st November 2009 3:00pm
DAMN DAMN DAMN!!! Ugh, at least let Harry cast a Crucio or ten on the abomonination. His mind might take longer than the longbottoms, but at least it wouldn't be a loss. Even Riddle can't crack a comatose mind.
Does this mean the elder wand is Snapes since he administered and thought of the potion, or Harry's because he wanted Dumbledore removed from the picture first? Hmmm, interesting.
flynhghr posted a comment on Saturday 21st November 2009 2:36pm
Ok, now I KNOW it was Dumbledore's scheme to have the blood anchor stolen. Cagey bastard has to have his own bloody way, wether or not there's a substitute. I DO hope he succombs to a torturus death from the curse wounds instead of a nice quick AK. I'd bet money they put Hermione on fertility potions because the mix of the two will help the wards more. Sickening. I'd bet even more money that come her due date they stage a miscarriage and hide the child in the castle, destroying Hermione, not caring because the child can help the wards better than anything. Ugh, your version of Bumbledore is more despisable than Snape, and that's saying something. Hope I didn't let any kneazles out of any bags, lol, I hate it when I guess correctly and ruin it for myself.
flynhghr posted a comment on Saturday 21st November 2009 1:21pm
I'm wondering if the Great hall heard his statement about shagging Svetlana/Baba whatever. Things would be especially awkward with everyone hearing that. Especially relations with Hermione/Luna.
I'd bet money Dumbledore arranged for the theft of the blood anchor, in hopes that it would be used in a way to ensure Harry was finished once Riddle was mortal. Use the blood anchor on a useless blood ward then trap Harry whilst sapping his very life force, like it was doing to Hermione. Harry seemed disgusted by the idea of hitting the Hookah, but heck he's harboring a piece right in his forehead. As the last-created shard I wonder if it would've collapsed sooner if she fed off it, course she'd probably have to feed off Harry's soul too...
flynhghr posted a comment on Saturday 21st November 2009 12:28pm
Interesting choice of Harry's 'bed warmers'. First some unnamed witch Fleur sets up then the guide they stumbled upon to find their destination. This is an improvement for sure, less angsty, more fun. Good fight too. How come 6 blasters wear Harry out but he can do two of those lightning curses? Kind of contradicting your own information. Good chapter, allthough I think they should've stopped to wipe out the camp of warders/goblins/etc.
flynhghr posted a comment on Saturday 21st November 2009 11:32am
It surprised me that you actually put a line in the beginning of this chapter referencing the angst. While it was a big part of canon, I like the fact that your first book of this story line had much less angst than this one. I still like your writing, but hope you chill on the angst levels. Oh, and Fleur infatuated with Harry? It's perfect, and rather funny.
flynhghr posted a comment on Friday 20th November 2009 5:29pm
The conversation with Ron was interesting, you actually put the most typically hated character on a pedastal (compared to other characters), which has me worried. What are you planning on doing to him later... Tonks is perfect, exactly how I would expect her to react. The Harry/Luna is fun, and I'd like to see how your Harry handles a semi-serious, slowly paced relationship, instead of the 'hey, lets screw' right off the bat. You did say Lauren was emotional, which was weird for me, second day you hang around someone and jump in the sack as more of a business deal than a relationship, yet it's emotional? OH well, neither here nor there really. The Narcissa characterization is perfect, off-handedly threaten Draco but immediately retract it so it still leaves that glimmer of fear so she can be controlled in the future. Not to mention she gets all frisky when in the presence of frightening power. Or at least the illusion of such. Makes me want to meet her actually, is that bad? Keep up the great work!
flynhghr posted a comment on Friday 20th November 2009 3:44pm
Oh, the scene with Snape is the stuff of my dreams. Showing that arsehole up is definitely one of the best things to happen yet. I'm terribly upset you did away with McGonagall, as she always seemed a fairly neutral character despite being overly strict. I wonder what plans you have for the future that she would interfere with. The Filch killing was gratuitus and just what I wanted to see happen to that particular sack of manure. The cat being made a pelt for Hack is a bit over the top, alls it ever did was follow orders of it's familiar. The Hermione scene was interesting, and it's quite a surprise she agreed to Harry's (not so) proposition. Poor girl must need a friend or something. The Luna scene was almost too much with the broom stunt, I don't think even a stoned Looney could really pull that off. I'm surprised Harry didn't bag the broom, wary about misc. curses. After all, the Weasleys cannot be trusted, wether or not the potion target switch and obliviation was their scheme.
flynhghr posted a comment on Friday 20th November 2009 2:37pm
Oh man, right off the bat the Fit hits the SHan!
Interesting stuff. I actually feel bad for Hermione, I really don't think she would have gone along with this without a lot of mind-meddeling or compulsion charms from Bumbledore. I like Harry's solution to the wards and admission of his virginity. Poor Hermione isn't going to recognise him so it wouldnt even be like sleeping with an old friend. I wonder about a demon-bone charging setup to replace whatever is powering the blood wards would work. Loving it!
flynhghr posted a comment on Friday 20th November 2009 2:10pm
Crazy way to start the story! I like the fight at the Airport, would've loved to see the one guy eat lightning. Bellatrix running away? Priceless! Somewhere Sirius is cheering. You say the Demon bone spear, I thought Hack had a Dragon bone spear.... the Demon bones are still in the trunk, and it seems a waste to turn one into a petty weapon.
warpwizard posted a comment on Wednesday 18th November 2009 4:17pm
I like the ending. :)
Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Monday 9th November 2009 2:08pm
Methinks that Albus is not going to appreciate the payback this little gimmick (or set of gimmicks) will earn him. As he told Tom, there are worse things than death; papercuts all over followed by immersion in lemon juice sounds like a nice warm-up exercise in this case.
Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Monday 9th November 2009 1:55pm
I have to admit, I love that ending where his own words get turned against him. 'Tis a pity things haven't currently worked out between him and Luna, he's going to need someone to ground him and I'm not sure Hermione's up to it any more. 'Twould be interesting to see a historian truly interview the Sorting hat one of these days and get the *real* story on some events.
jono74656 posted a comment on Sunday 8th November 2009 11:43pm
Please excuse me a minute while I check and make sure the Devil got his ice skates..... Harry and Snape working together to carry out a coup against Dumbledore????? I have to hand it to you, that is the first time I've ever seen that one.
As I've come to expect from you, a truly unique twist, and an excellent continuation to a saga that grows better as it goes on.
joeBob posted a comment on Saturday 7th November 2009 6:45pm
Good chapter. Thanks for the update.
razor_M posted a comment on Saturday 7th November 2009 8:58am
...I friggin' love you. That's the most creative way to deal with Dumbledore that I've ever seen.
Meteoricshipyards posted a comment on Friday 6th November 2009 8:39am
Yeah! They finally got that smug look off of Dumbledore's face. Love it!
And the clue to it in Harry's and Snape's first meeting... well, I didn't figure it out.
Excellent job.
Tom A.
Fenris Ulf posted a comment on Wednesday 4th November 2009 9:23am
great update! glad your back :) Downloaded Deadeye and look forward to reading it. I'll review on amazon and such when I'm done.
Thanks
Rob
Dale Dietzman posted a comment on Wednesday 4th November 2009 8:18am
In a few places where I think you meant to have Dubledork saying "the greater good" it just says "the greater". Very nit picking, but should be fixed by a "pro from Dover" like yourself.
Anthony May posted a comment on Wednesday 6th January 2010 9:31pm