Kinsfire posted a comment on Saturday 21st April 2007 1:21pm

"Hack nods appreciatively, but wants the straps adjusted slightly higher and made a bit more taunt."

I think you meant 'taut'.

Now that the minor nitpick is out of the way, all I can say is:

DAMN! Can I get you to write all my multi-chapter battles from now on? *grin*

Beautifully written, and I look forward to the sequel, if only to see how Remus, Hermione and the Weasleys try to explain why taking away his free will was a good idea.

Personally, I'd be quite impressed if you managed to explain it such that he ends up forgiving them, but I doubt that will happen.

JBern replied:

Thanks for the compliments on my action scene writing.   I am so far behind on my replies.   The sequel will be coming soon, but I need to finish Darkness before jumping onto the sequel.~Jim

Claudia R posted a comment on Saturday 21st April 2007 1:21pm

Loved it!!!
Specially the way they are do relieved/cheery in the end... well not exactly that but... similar
i loved the will but I couldn't get
the significance of the sickles!

and good trip to disney!

JBern replied:

30 pieces of silver was the price Judas was paid for betraying Jesus.   Sorry for the delay in my reply, but I was on vacation.   Glad you enjoyed it.~Jim

pyrodaemon posted a comment on Saturday 21st April 2007 1:21pm

OMG!!!! this was awesome! I wanted to skip forward toward some of the parts to get to the end and see who all died but then I wanted to see what was happening at the same time and I ended up having to take a break to calm down, lol. I think this was your most exciting chapter yet. I love how you've got that witty sarcasm going on throughout the story. It's funny but not out of place humor . Your a really, really good writer and I can't wait for the next chapter.

Now the major questions left...Will Kwan lose his leg? Will Luna ever get over her snit and forgive Harry? And how badly will Fleur want to kill both Harry and Bill? Only time will tell. Lol. I really do love your story!

JBern replied:

Gald you enjoyed it.   It's nice to see that it impressed you.   The epilogue is now posted.   Hope you enjoyed it.~Jim

Gibby posted a comment on Saturday 21st April 2007 12:57pm

Wow. Just wow. I can't think of anything better at this time, but hey it works. Anyway the sequel is going to take dur the school year, right? As always love all your works and hope you keep writing.

-Gibby

JBern replied:

Thanks glad you enjoyed it.   Hope you continue to follow my other stories.~Jim

Yonexcannon posted a comment on Saturday 21st April 2007 12:54pm

THAT! WAS! BRILLAINT!!!!

JBern replied:

Thanks.~Jim

kainboa posted a comment on Saturday 21st April 2007 12:54pm

LMAO!!!!!

great chapter all in all, but i really love the last few paragraphes where they talk bout the demon's bones.

keep up the great work :)

JBern replied:

Glad it gave you a nice laugh.   Hope you enjoyed the epilogue.~Jim

Tim Henderson posted a comment on Saturday 21st April 2007 12:37pm

Jim, after that battle maybe you should name it "The Kid is Hot Tonight"!! Hot damn that was cool!! Hope your CCIE certification is going well.

Tim H.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Sorry about the delay in the reply.   I took the ccie written to keep my ccnp current.   I don't work enough with the network infrastructure to really go all the way and would need a good deal more practical experience before attacking the dreaded lab practical.~Jim

Highschool Nerd posted a comment on Saturday 21st April 2007 12:33pm

Update soon!

JBern replied:

New chapter posted yesterday.~Jim

Greg Johnson posted a comment on Saturday 21st April 2007 12:31pm

Great fight!!! That was a lot of fun to read. I eagerly await the next installment of this story. Keep up the great work.

JBern replied:

Thanks glad you enjoyed it.   Sorry for the delay in my reply, but you probably wanted the next chapter sooner anyway.~Jim

happyreader posted a comment on Saturday 21st April 2007 12:31pm

most enjoyable,, you should be proud.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Glad you liked it.   Hope you liked the epilogue as well.~Jim

Jim_xinu posted a comment on Saturday 21st April 2007 12:22pm

I liked Harry's will. :-)

Very good battle. Despite the situation, it didn't have the sense of frantic desperation that the earlier ones had. I assume that was intentional. The reasons I can see for it are that most of those were unexpected--this time they have good intel, a plan and some prep time. And Harry's a lot more seasoned now.

The jaguar Patronus and the conclusion that went with it were very nice.

The final appearance of Thundercloud was very nice. Not quite enough to contradict "You’ll save yourself," but a helping hand and final twist.


Great job. Thanks for sharing this with us.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Sorry for the delay in the reply, but I'm sure you'd rather see the epilogue anyway.   I hope I've set a new standard for epic battles in fanfics with this one.~Jim

AJ2 posted a comment on Saturday 21st April 2007 12:17pm

Wow! I love it. This was a great battle scene. Very well written, probably one of the best battle scenes I have read. You did a really good job of showing the layout and I found it very easy to follow what was happening.

JBern replied:

Glad you enjoyed it.   Hope it sets the bar higher for what people look for in a final battle.~Jim

Michael69 posted a comment on Saturday 21st April 2007 11:18am

Awesome. Can't wait for your next chapter. Loved the fight!

JBern replied:

Thank you.   Glad you enjoyed it.~Jim

John Lee Howard posted a comment on Saturday 21st April 2007 11:11am

This is a great fic. I have to admit the writing style threw me off a bit at first, but the more I read, the more I liked it and now I think it's great. I can't wait for the next installment. Great job.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Glad you enjoyed it.~Jim

dwilken posted a comment on Saturday 21st April 2007 11:01am

Jim, this was *good*. Now go have a good time in Orlando.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   We had a pretty good time, but I'm still catching up now.~Jim

Vincent posted a comment on Saturday 21st April 2007 10:54am

Now that's what I call a serious battle, blood, gore and guns.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   Glad you enjoyed it.~Jim

Fasor posted a comment on Thursday 12th April 2007 11:21pm

brilliant story :)

JBern replied:

Thanks.~Jim

joe lemen posted a comment on Tuesday 3rd April 2007 11:18pm

I don't know how much I am looking forward to the up coming fight! I don't believe the entire crew will make it back to Hoggyville, but that place is beggin for a huge pile of Korean Hitwizard.

As for the great and powerful Albus, I'll quote on of your other stories "Oh, I’ve got a song to sing when the reaper finally catches up with that worthless bag of ass spackle!"

Keep up the great work!

Joe from DC

JBern replied:

Thanks for the good laugh.   I apologize for my very late reply.     Your review must have slipped through the cracks somehow.~Jim

MrRobertsIII posted a comment on Monday 2nd April 2007 2:50am

Great fight scenes. My favorite idea though is Voldy being a copy cat of Chilotha's.

Nice work with the demon. I've come across them in fanfic before, but your handling of it doesn't seem so totally out of bounds as the others. Probably because they usually appear in TooSuper!Harry fics.

I have enjoyed the pov of this story. Hope you keep this fic going past getting out of the dead city. I'd like to read of Harry's return to England.

Exceelent jod with Dumbledore's letters. They sound very in character.

JBern replied:

Glad you enjoyed it.   I hope it has raised the bar for what people look for in a final battle.   The epilogue is now out, which is why I am so far behind on my replies.~Jim

mikek posted a comment on Saturday 31st March 2007 3:55pm

The first person perspective was a little odd at first but once I got used to the style it made the story seem more funny(with harry's commetry) and more intense at times.

JBern replied:

Wow.   I don't know how I missed replying to your review.   Sorry about that.   Hope you have continued to enjoy my story.~Jim