By JBern
Reviews
Prospero Hibiki posted a comment on Saturday 24th February 2007 2:25am
Looks good as usual if slightly darker than normal. Death. Mayhem. Destruction! Tribbles!...okay maybe not the tribbles.
Keep up the work.
-Mongoose @ NNPTC
JBern replied:
Damn. I forgot the Tribbles. Oh well perhaps next chapter, but then again they might not fit in with what I have planned... insert random evil laughter here.~Jim
Syaoran posted a comment on Wednesday 21st February 2007 7:28am
Holy crap. This is one of the best well written story's I've every read. Your ideas are ingenious and very breathe taking. Nice job. Hopefully you update soon, can't wait for another Bungle in the Jungle!
JBern replied:
Thanks. The new chapter is up and I hope you enjoy it as well.~Jim
gaul2000 posted a comment on Monday 19th February 2007 2:11am
great chapter, wonderful story, wonders what kind of other creatures will be inferi in the city, and the different kinds of wards that would be inventive with mass destruction of inferi, byes
JBern replied:
Thanks. The new chapter is up and might answer some of your question about other wards and whatnot.~Jim
Alan Salazar Slytherin posted a comment on Sunday 11th February 2007 2:56pm
sorry, comp messed up the links slightly me, that last review of mine was meant for living lies fic of yours you just started ^^;;;;
JBern replied:
Figured it out. Was slightly confused at first. Glad you like both the stories.~Jim
Alan Salazar Slytherin posted a comment on Sunday 11th February 2007 2:53pm
Heya! Just me again, I went back and read something that confused me the first time through and thought I might point out to ya ;)
Wouldn't the part where Harry pointed out the mistake in Runes paper of the seventh year show that he was channelling a bit of Lily seeings as I remember in the books JK mentioned that Runes was one of Lily's specialties in school where Jame's was Transfiguration and Charms?
Not criticizing ya here, but was something that I thought you might want to know, asides I still stick by my first review in saying that this is a great fic you got started here and a nice original path that you are taking with Harry :)
Alan
Alan_salazar_slytherin@yahoo.com
JBern replied:
I think I answered in the correct thread, but there's no reason that James couldn't have taken Runes as well. Lily was always pegged as being great at charms. There's no real indication that she took runes, other than a fanon assumption because Hermione does as well. Still, the Marauders came up with the map and it had to use some Rune work as well as charms work~Jim
Blackstone4005 posted a comment on Saturday 10th February 2007 11:09pm
Outstanding story. Your style is very witty, well paced and a complete delight. Thanks for a great read. I look forward to the coming chapters.
JBern replied:
I don't know. Given that only 8 weeks have passed in a story of nearly 150k words my pace might be a bit off. Still glad you are enjoying it. New chapter is now up for your enjoyment.~Jim
uNople posted a comment on Wednesday 7th February 2007 12:16pm
Wow. Your story just keeps getting better chapter by chapter. Harry's maturing well, and learning lots of skills. I can't wait for him to get out of the city, and have his confrontation with Dumbledore, and see Luna again.
JBern replied:
Thanks. I start on the next chapter probably this weekend.~Jim
Cass posted a comment on Friday 2nd February 2007 9:38am
This story is addictive, truly. Every time you update, I have to go through and just read as much of it as I can to enjoy the sheer quality of it.
JBern replied:
Thank you for the compliments. The fact that so many people tell me that my stories stand the test of rereading that makes me think I am doing somehting right.~Jim
Foolhammer posted a comment on Friday 2nd February 2007 8:29am
Less zombies soon, please. Am definitely looking forward to that (doubtless) distant chapter where Harry confronts the Order in person. More Luna too, please!
JBern replied:
Less Zombies by request. By the end of the chapter with the group on the balcony taking potshots at the crowd below, they had become marginalized as a threat. Clearly, that means that there must be something else down there. The Order confrontation is in the sequel, though we should begin to see some communication with them as soon as the Gobs fix the Bulk Transfer System they can send their journals outside the wards to get them updated. The Order will clearly reply. The question is, did Luna take the journal with her? Is it stuffed in the back of the trunk? Has she read it already and is too ashamed of herself to reply?
Questions, questions, and more questions...
Thanks for the review.~Jim
Alan Williams posted a comment on Thursday 1st February 2007 3:41pm
As with many others I am looking forward to seeing how Luna and the Order responded, I am also looking forward to the sequel. And having reviewed some of the other reviews I saw you plan to finish your other story before starting the sequel. How long will we have to wait? One comment on the chapter. When did Harry learn the portkey spell? I'm pretty sure he did not know it in chapter 2. And Kwan's speed learning for the pain deprived was for apparating and silent casting.
JBern replied:
After the incident with the Dragon at the first ruins is when Harry learned how to make a Portkey. I didn't specifically include it in his training, but considering the number of sticky situations Harry gets himself into he'd learn it. Thundercloud taught him. I'll mention it in the next chapter. Thanks for keeping me honest.
This story has about 5-7 chapters left in it. The other has roughly 10. Assuming I can keep my pace, it'll be about a month and a half after Bungle finishes that TFTCD is wrapped up. I'll start laying out Bungle's sequel after that. I have a 3rd story started that I will post in the interim period.
Hope that makes sense.~Jim
Lufio posted a comment on Thursday 1st February 2007 10:20am
Huh. So there'll be other critters besides the living dead? Interesting. Or are you referring to traps?
JBern replied:
Thanks for the review. Yes. How's that for a vague enough answer. You'll see soon enough... ~Jim
MonkeyAxman1302 posted a comment on Thursday 1st February 2007 5:38am
You really like the word "Necrodragon". The concept is great and works equally well both in TFtCD and Bungle.
I need to catch up and review some of the previous chapters coz this story is so unbelievably good. I really like To Fight and I kind of hate you for writing two such totally awesome stories, but because this has the humourous side I think this is a better all round story. I still love T fight and its an almost impossible decision to make but Hey I made it!
Random questions, are the "Abraxan" winged horses named after the author of the same name on this site?
Thanks for writing, please write more!
Monkey
JBern replied:
Necrodragon just flows off the tongue doesn't it? The Abraxan were the horses used to pull the Beauxbaton carriage for the Triwizard tournament. It might have been where my colleague pulled his name from, I haven't asked him.
I like the darkly humorous aspect of this story as well. It is actually much easier to write this story than my other. I don't know what that says about me!~Jim
atlantis-rob posted a comment on Thursday 1st February 2007 12:00am
Excellent update as usual. Good bits with the slight background on why collins is half a jerk due to what happened in his youth. Harry's air battle with the undead was very enjoyable and an exciting read for sure. The various treks to the up levels as they cleared em were entertaining. Awesome job on the letter to the order from bill. Cheers!!!!
JBern replied:
One reviewer was kind enough to praise me saying that she hadn't seen a story with such rich and believable OC's before. I think it is their flaws and the tiny bits of info I hand out that help. If I give you a paragraph or two on them every now and then, it makes them more believable and increases your emotional investment in them.
It also has the nice effect of making it more meaningful when I start eliminating them. (Insert evil laughter here).
Thanks again~Jim
kainboa posted a comment on Wednesday 31st January 2007 10:45pm
lmao, i especially liked the ‘Today’s forecast gloomy, with a prevailing sense of doom and chances of Necropegasi falling from the sky at just around one hundred percent!’ comment, more like that :P
keep up the brilliant work :)
JBern replied:
Well, I figured that if I was going to use such a limiting POV for the story, I better damn well make it entertaining. Since I am a sarcastic little bastard and these thoughts are always occuring to me (not about Necropegasi though - mostly about the idiots driving on the highway...) I figured a sarcastic Harry was in order.~Jim
Lourens posted a comment on Wednesday 31st January 2007 7:40pm
Another very good chapter. I couldn't wait to see what happened here after I read chapter 1.
JBern replied:
Thanks. It took me almost a year to get from point A to point A+1. I plan to complete this story in 5-7 chapters, but rest assured there will be a sequel.~Jim
Manatheron posted a comment on Wednesday 31st January 2007 5:36pm
Excellent chapter,
The flight of the Necro-Horse was interesting, but I can't help but wonder how they managed to stay airborn, I'd think the whole rotting bit would have caused their feathers to fall out... or do Inferni have some sort of Preservation charm built in?
Bill seems to be getting kicked around alot doesn't he :) Poor bastard, Probably paying for the 'Sins of the father' or some such thing.
Anyways just wanted to tell you that you've got me hooked, Can't wait for the next installment.
Sincerly,
Manatheron
JBern replied:
You are correct about the preservation charms otherwise they'd all be just skeletons after 35 years of lying around in a cave and zombies are much more terrifying than skeletons. As for magical flight by the undead (both horse and dragon), it had to do with the innate magic of the critter. After all, I recall seeing something that said for a real horse with wings to fly, the wingspan would have to be beyond ridiculous. So lets go with the magic answer. Much easier that way. :)
Thanks again for the kind words.~Jim
Shawn Cullipher posted a comment on Wednesday 31st January 2007 5:30pm
I'm a long time fanfic reader, so I'm probably a bit jaded. That being said, this story is absolutely amazing.
Your storyling is unique enough in it's own right, but it's probably your little experiment with the point of view change that make it really stand out. Please, please keep it up, and thank you so very much for sharing it with us fans.
JBern replied:
I really wanted to write this story first, but I am glad that I started writing the other one which is a more 'traditional' style first. It allowed me to improve before attempting this.
Most people who get past the intial confusion caused by both the POV and the opening chapter seemed to have really enjoyed the story. Personally, I don't think that it would have done so well in the first person and definitely not in the third person POVs.
Thanks again for the kind words.~Jim
Fishburne posted a comment on Wednesday 31st January 2007 2:49pm
ROFL - Nice choice of weapons for Collins.
Excellent chapter, and I just love the idea of tossing bricks at dragon. Inspired.
Im figuring they were the Mark One Mod Zero Self Propelled A2A homing bricks.
Wicked Cool, and I am fanboy happy for the next 4.2 minutes....
Fish
JBern replied:
I thought a Barrett Light 50 would be a bit of overkill. The M-21 is a solid serviceable weapon, from what I understand it's really an evolution of the old M-14.
Well Harry's intial plan of hit it with a brick wall didn't go so well, so he had to look for something else. Nah, he just banished them. A real dragon would have evaded them easily. A necrodragon only knows that it needs to kill whatever it is chasing.
I was glad to make you fanboy happy for 252 seconds. Hope my next chapter will break the 300 second threshold!~Jim
Renzo7 posted a comment on Wednesday 31st January 2007 12:56pm
nice work with the flying scene, very fun to read. keep up the good work!
leaves us thinking about Luna... did she read the message, would she answer... will the journal update once out of the wards?... excellent work, as always.
JBern replied:
Again, everyone seems to want answers. Almost as bad as Harry wants them! I must be doing my job. Thanks for the review.~Jim
Renzo7 posted a comment on Saturday 24th February 2007 2:53am
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