By JBern
Reviews
a_wanderer posted a comment on Wednesday 14th March 2007 3:22pm
I am a Christian and a pastor but if you've done in Bill I must consider hurting you.
Seriously nice twist. Although I suspect all is not what it seems. Perhaps Thundercloud had some important information but Harry, once again, plays the fool running where angels fear to tread.
JBern replied:
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
James16 posted a comment on Wednesday 14th March 2007 3:16pm
You are an asshole... why this ... gah update fast ... this cliffhanger sucks.
JBern replied:
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
Fishburne posted a comment on Wednesday 14th March 2007 3:06pm
Holy Harpy on a hogpile.
Bill is gone, Harry is pissed, Collins is, well, Dead.
Damn, son, when you do battle, you do BATTLE.
Fanboy for at least a few weeks more...
Fish.
Never ever ever tell an irritated woman "Relax".
Worst 5 day lecture I ever received.
JBern replied:
You only got 5 days of lecture. Damn! You got off easy.
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
Greg Johnson posted a comment on Wednesday 14th March 2007 3:05pm
You really need to put out the next chapter fast. I can't wait several weeks to find out if you really killed Bill.
I can't believe how hooked on this story I am. Keep up the great work and update again soon!
JBern replied:
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
Particle_Accelerator posted a comment on Wednesday 14th March 2007 2:40pm
Holy Smokes!
You killed Bill!
Or did you....?
Well, I sure hope that we get to see another episode of suped-up Harry. Ought to be fun!
JBern replied:
Answers are coming soon. I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
uNople posted a comment on Wednesday 14th March 2007 2:33pm
Wow. You killed Bill. Do you have the balls to make him stay dead though?
Nice chapter by the way, I enjoyed it.
JBern replied:
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
Michael69 posted a comment on Wednesday 14th March 2007 2:29pm
Oh man! This isn't even fair! I hate clifhangers, especially a cliffhanger in THIS story. I'm nice and pissed now cause I'm realizing your other two stories will probably come before the next installment of this one. I will say, once again...great chapter, but until the next chapter's up....I'll be thinking of you with mild churlishness.
JBern replied:
I hope a quick turnaround will curb the churlish thoughts. I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
Lostchyld posted a comment on Wednesday 14th March 2007 2:23pm
Bill isn't dead, you'd have shown a body if he were. *hopes to be right*
JBern replied:
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
swordchucks posted a comment on Wednesday 14th March 2007 2:15pm
No... you didn't kill Bill... actually, scratch that, you probably did. Well, not happy about that development, but a) I'm not certain he's really dead and b) it's not THAT big a deal.
Anyway, good chapter. Now that Harry is in on the secret, there's no reason for him not to retreat to civilization to restock, resupply, and recruit more help. Is there? Sounds too easy, actually.
JBern replied:
Oh there might be a reason or two...I even foreshadowed it with Hack's song choice.
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
Jim_xinu posted a comment on Wednesday 14th March 2007 1:57pm
I really like the line about tomb raiding vs grave robbing. :-)
Harry's rant at DD via journal feels a little tired by this point, but then, so's Harry.
Statue de Soto is kinda freaky, but apparently quite helpful.
Daemon? Ooooh, that sounds bad...
Bill's dead? Oh man, that sucks.
JBern replied:
Thanks for the compliment on Tomb Raiding vs Grave Robbing. It made a lot of sense when I wrote it.
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
David13 posted a comment on Wednesday 14th March 2007 1:46pm
I'm sorry to say that while killing Bill is a big turn in the story and I guess a suprise, personally It takes something away from the story. Harry has just been betrayed by everyone he cares about back home and now he has lost the only person besides Fleur who was in his corner. Bill was someone he could talk to and not worry about their motivations behind helping him. I guess I can see how it advances your story making Harry have to deal with everything on his own. But again killing off a character that makes "Bungle in the Jungle" what it is doesn't seem right. That is not to say that I didn't enjoy the chapter, I did the ideas you introduced with regards to possession and the statue are interesting, just killing Bill makes me think of you other story which is pretty well a kill fest. I will be interested to see how Harry will be able to survive upon his return, because he has lost his whole support system, Fleur is not going to be any help and Luna hates him at the moment and finally he has pretty well disowned Dumbledore, Remus, Hermione and the Weasleys. To me it seems like there is little point of him returning besides to tell Fleur how he Bill died. Anyways I will be interested to see how the rest of the story turns out but I will says this, I really wish you didn't kill bill.
P.S. Keep up the great writing.
JBern replied:
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
noylj posted a comment on Wednesday 14th March 2007 1:40pm
Gaaahhhh...a horrible cliffy.
Is Bill dead? Does harry get Fleur? Can Harry have Fleur and Gabby?
Harry has to get past a Daemon?
JBern replied:
To get Fleur and Gabby would you fight a Daemon? :-)
Jim
Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Wednesday 14th March 2007 1:16pm
Fantastic chapter. Cruel cliffie.
The letter to Dumbledore was delightfully sharp. Multiple face slaps in one missive. I want to see the responses from the Order and Luna once they get back to an area of receptivity. Hope springs eternal for the hopeless romantic.
Just a gripping tale!
JBern replied:
Thanks for the compliments. We'll see a response from DD probably in this chapter. I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
aemon_targaryen posted a comment on Wednesday 14th March 2007 1:03pm
Holy Cow! I can't believe you killed him! I know his death would have the greatest impact on Harry, but I figured he was safe for a while longer, to serve as friend and mentor. I'm wondering if he's really dead though-there's hasn't been any here-is-the-dead-body confirmation. Perhaps the curse works differently on transfigured targets? Perhaps the villain's abilities are fading with his undead, possessed state? I hold out hope. Great chapter-really looking forward to more new threats.
JBern replied:
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review.~Jim
Prospero Hibiki posted a comment on Wednesday 14th March 2007 12:56pm
...!
Nooooo!
I get back from helping someone study for CMR1 and I read this?!
Noooooo!
Good writing though as usual.
-ET3 Mongoose
JBern replied:
I've altered my update schedule to do chapter 21 of this one immediately. It's not really fair for me to leave all you readers twisting in the wind on this one. I should have it ready by the end of the week. Glad you enjoy it so much. Thanks for the review. Good luck on those nasty essay answer only exams!~Jim
Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Thursday 8th March 2007 10:44pm
Computer lost the first version of this so I'll try again, apologies if it's a little short:
I can't believe I missed this chapter before but it just means more cookie-like fanfic goodness now. The toughness of that cookie just makes it more entertaining. I really like the way this story has taken a turn for the dark side. Suddenly there's a feeling that things can't always be fixed by magic and that anyone can die. Maria was a great character while she was in it, I'm still shuddering over the underwear thing, but her death makes it more believable. Poor Bill too. It's rather like reaching the end of the Goblet of Fire and realising that anyone can die and it can all go horribly wrong for Harry. Superb story so far. More please. Poor Luna and I will be waiting desperately for the next update from Harry on tenterhooks.
JBern replied:
Good lord! It's the final reply before I'm actually caught up! Maybe this reply to every review policy isn't such a bright idea.~Jim
Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Thursday 8th March 2007 10:15am
I re-read chapter 1 and yes things make far more sense now. I loved Hack knowing the words to Hotel California. Bill's anger seemed very real. I can't imagine this is all a plan of Dumbledore's, though thank you for giving a humanity to his manipulative bastard role. Too often he is simply that. In this it can almost, though only ever almost, understandable. Necropegasi is a wonderful word. It conjures up such images! I also like their grim shooting game and Collins's brief backstory. More please. Excellent story so far.
PS - You need to thank MonkeyAxman1302 for this spate of reviews. He's been telling me for weeks that this story is superb, one of his favourites, that I couldn't resist any longer and I was very well rewarded. Fantastic so far.
JBern replied:
The Axman has been a prolific reviewer. I appreciate the plugs for the story. Next time I hear from him, I'll be sure to thank him.~Jim
Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Thursday 8th March 2007 9:37am
I love the way you make Luna so believably angry. Her letters are fantastic. I also adore the detail you put into the curses and cursebreaking. It makes it a much better read than the vague "Harry twiddled his wand, red lights glowed and the curse was lifted" you sometimes read. Brilliant way of looping it back together. Now I have to re-read chapter 1 before I move on.
JBern replied:
I wanted the relationship to be full of missteps on both their parts. Luna is a complex character who is struggling with her own inner demons (or is it daemons?).~Jim
Rebel Goddess posted a comment on Thursday 8th March 2007 7:32am
I didn't think this story could go higher in my estimation, but the subtle Princess Bride reference managed to do it. You really, really like throwing in Naked Veela whenever you feel things are getting a little too dark, don't you? At least Harry should be pleased by Fleur considering him larger than average. Most puppies not being afraid of Charlie was a very funny idea. I had this vision of him trying to glare at a load of labrador puppies and them just fawning over him. Poor Mr Lovegood!
JBern replied:
Dontcha just love the Princess Bride. In the sequel, I'm tempted to have Harry showdown with Voldy start with "Hello, my name is Harry Potter. Fifteen years ago, you killed my father. Prepare to die."~Jim
DvorakQ posted a comment on Wednesday 14th March 2007 3:40pm
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