Amit Patel posted a comment on Wednesday 19th March 2008 2:40am

Wonderful story; I love the sense of justice you have with Draco getting the Cur's mark as well as the trouncing that HJ gives both Drumstang competitors!

Cannot wait to see what is coming next

JBern replied:

You won't have to wait much longer.   My fanfics start back up next week.~Jim

MOD posted a comment on Wednesday 19th March 2008 2:06am

NIce chapter... eagerly awaiting the next one!

JBern replied:

The wait is almost over.   I start back up next week.~Jim

brianjt posted a comment on Tuesday 18th March 2008 3:48pm

This was a great chapter, the dueling was great and the Harry / Fleur dynamic is developing nicely.

Eagerly waiting for more for more and I hope your original novel goes smoothly.

Brian JT

JBern replied:

Thanks for the review.   More coming soon.~Jim

Marc D posted a comment on Tuesday 18th March 2008 3:12pm

That was a great chapter...for a bit of hilarity it would be great to hear a rumor starting on just why Snape keeps that particular potion stocked in his personal storeroom...and how Draco immediately knew which one to choose...I bet it could get bad enough to have Draco wishing he had admitted to brewing it himself...and it would certainly add to Snape's problems...especially as they look into just who Sarah Underhill is!

Great chapter, can't wait for your next update!

Marc D.

JBern replied:

Thanks for the compliments.   You'll have to wait and see how Snape and Draco fare.   I suspect they won't do so hot.

Next update coming soon.   Sorry for the delay in my reply.~Jim

Minerva Granger posted a comment on Tuesday 18th March 2008 2:12pm

Very, very nice. This is a great story, and I can't wait for the next installment.

JBern replied:

The wait is almost over.   My fanfics start up next week.~Jim

Prince Charon posted a comment on Tuesday 18th March 2008 1:57pm

This continues to interest me. I wonder what Dumbles will do, when Harry sends off his letter.

Thank you for updating so fast.

More soon, please.

JBern replied:

I suspect Dumbledore's reaction won't be a good one.   Next update coming soon.   My fanfics start up next week.~Jim

Patches posted a comment on Tuesday 18th March 2008 1:28pm

Wow! Really great duals. It was too bad Harry didn't get to claim his win with Fleur but I think he gained something in that dual. Fleur is starting to realize Harry isn't what she thought he was. That is a big plus. That was good about Bill being shot down as a casanova but it looks like Fleur is trying to figure things out for herself. That is good. Maybe Bill will turn out to be ok in the long run. I'm glad Harry retaliated against Fred and George. They needed to be put in their place. I hope they learn from this encounter but it is the twins we are talking about. Ginny did the right thing by not bringing Harry into the aftermath. It is better that the Griffindors are mad at the twins for this one. I'm glad Harry isn't being vindictive against Athena. He beat her but he didn't try to humiliate her. That was very sporting of him. His dual with Vicktor was good. I'm glad he won but of course he had to take some punishment. He wouldn't be Harry otherwise. I'm glad he warned Hermione about the effects of his spider attack on the twins stores. That was good. He and Hermione had a good laugh too. That was excellent. I look forward to more of this story when you get back. Good luck on your book. I look forward to reading that. I also look forward to chapter 6 of Turm me loose! Thanks for writing. I really enjoy anything you choose to write. pms

JBern replied:

Thanks for the long review.   Sorry for the delay in the reply.   The first draft of Dead Eye is just about done and my fanfics are about ready to start up again.   TML chapter 6 is up next.

Regards,

Jim

Muggleborn Prince posted a comment on Tuesday 18th March 2008 1:20pm

Good luck on Dead Eye!!! I intend to buy it.


Now for Critique.

Overall good chapter, great fight scenes, and mixture of Harry and James' personalities. Sad parts where there was little creative cussing by the Hat. Keep on writing! What do you intend to do on the Fanfic side after Dead Eye, Turn Me Loose, and This?

JBern replied:

Thanks for the vote of confidence on Dead Eye.   I intend to deliver a quality read and I'm within 10 thousand words of the finish line (at least for the 1st draft).

My fanfics start up next week.   Visit my page off of this site and you'll see what I plan next.

Regards,

Jim

EricThorsen posted a comment on Tuesday 18th March 2008 11:54am

This story has steadily improved since it began. I especially like the creative ways you are having Harry James deal with the problems he encounters. It will be interesting to see how the rest of this plays out. Keep it up.

JBern replied:

Thanks for the compliments.   I hope to continue to improve as a writer.   New chapters coming soon.~Jim

delta16669 posted a comment on Tuesday 18th March 2008 11:07am

Good luck on the novel and this chapter was awesome.

JBern replied:

Thanks.   My fanfics start up next week.   Sorry for the lengthy delay between your review and my reply.~Jim

Banner posted a comment on Tuesday 18th March 2008 10:37am

Ha, Ha!
He's smart, tough, and vicious - I think I'm in love. What a terrific hero: someone we can respect. I really enjoyed the duels, but I think my favorite part still is watching the two original personalities merge into a true gestalt; the best of both.
This story has been a delight.

JBern replied:

The wait is almost over.   HJ will be back in a couple of weeks.   I need to put out TML chapter 6 first.   Thanks again for the review.~Jim

Ravenclawchaser68 posted a comment on Tuesday 18th March 2008 10:33am

A nice send off before your break. The action scenes were exciting. The switching spell was great. I was a little surprised that Harry volunteered to fulfill the bet. I was expecting him to just wait and see what Fleur did, but I suppose if he's trying to do the opposite of what she expects, he succeeded. It'll be interesting to see how Ginny develops. Maybe she'll grow up a bit if she actually listens to what Harry tells her. Anyway, great job here, and good luck with your novel.

Jay

JBern replied:

My break is almost over.   Glad you liked the switching spell.   I wanted to feature transfiguration heavily in the duels since it usually.   The first draft of Dead Eye is almost done.

Thanks for the reviews.   It's regulars like you that convinced me that I could write a book and it might actually sell.~Jim

Carlos posted a comment on Tuesday 18th March 2008 10:05am

great chapter, good fighting and overall great how harry kicks culo!!

JBern replied:

Thanks.   I appreciate the compliments.~Jim

smog2187 posted a comment on Tuesday 18th March 2008 9:24am

As always another fantastic chapter, I was hoping it would be the Mark of the Cur that Malfoy'd get. Somehow whipping or ransoming his wand didn't leave as nice a flavor in my mouth. Thanks for writing!

JBern replied:

Glad you enjoyed it.   More coming soon.~Jim

Aelita posted a comment on Tuesday 18th March 2008 8:55am

Well, good luck on your novel and i can't wait for these to be finished! great chapter by the way, loved it

JBern replied:

I'll take all the good luck I can get.   Hopefully, I will continue to impress you with both my fanfics and original works.~Jim

Tom Mathews posted a comment on Tuesday 18th March 2008 8:50am

Hmm. Since Bumble-twat said that Hogwarts was the aggrieved party, then Snape, as head of Slytherin house, should be the one to apply the Cur's Mark to Draco. In that way, both of them will feel the humiliation of being bested by HJ

You know the twins are going to try something once more. Strangely enough, I can see Percy swinging around and siding with Harry against the twins.

As to HJ, I think he should tell McGonnagall that if she takes the job in Portugal, that he would transfer there.

Apparently, HJ is thinking of transferring out of Hogwarts anyway.

Good story so far. :)

JBern replied:

In my original version HJ mentioned to McGonagall that he'd be interested in following her if she left, but I opted to go a little more vague in the finished product.

Thank you for the reveiw and I hope to continue to impressing you in the future.   My fanfics start up again next week.~Jim

MrRobertsIII posted a comment on Tuesday 18th March 2008 8:32am

Another excellent chapter. The duelling was fast paced and creative. I like how you are handling his relations with his housemates: Hermione spending more time with, Ginny trying, and all the other Weasleys either ignored or under fire.

Nice bit of payback on Bill. Looking forward to reading how Fluer treated him.

His revenge on the twins had me laughing.

I'm glad to read that you have a shot at a real book. Good luck!

JBern replied:

Glad the story continues to impress you.   My original writing "break" is almost over and I'll be back on my fanfics next week.   I'll take all the luck I can get on the original novel.~Jim

John Howell posted a comment on Tuesday 18th March 2008 7:42am

THis is really good. I like the length of the chapters. Also you a good at duel scenes. Keep it up!

JBern replied:

Thank you for the review.   Next chapter coming soon.~Jim

Silo posted a comment on Tuesday 18th March 2008 7:26am

so what r u going to do agter this one make one that takes place in year 5 and so forth

JBern replied:

Depends.   I have to finish year four first.~Jim

Wonderbee31 posted a comment on Tuesday 18th March 2008 7:22am

Very much worth the wait, and looking forward to your book when it comes out. I enjoyed the way things went with Harry here, and fun to maybe see Minerva start to make her own decisions again, as well as how things went in the last duels. Harry could have been a lot worse than he did, and I think that with all this, along with Draco's punishment, a good way for the gang all around.

JBern replied:

I'm looking forward to it as well.   I'm in the home stretch and about to start up my fanfics again.   Thanks for all the reviews.   It's the regulars reviewers like you that convinced me that I'd have a shot at selling an original book.~Jim