By JBern
Reviews
gregstar posted a comment on Friday 2nd January 2009 2:16am
Happy new year. Great to see you are back and writing this masterpiece.
I love the way that you write the quandries that HJ faces and the differences that make him HJ instead of just Harry or just James.
I am really looking forward to seeing who is being saved and I hope you don't leave us waiting for more for too long.
Thank you for sharing this with us!
JBern replied:
More coming soon. Thanks for the review.~Jim
Zicou posted a comment on Thursday 1st January 2009 8:12pm
That was awesome!
I'm eager to see frank come back (i guess it's him) and to see his reaction to Neville treatment from Augusta!
Continuuuuue, it's great!
Z.
JBern replied:
Thanks. More coming soon.~Jim
CosmosGravitation posted a comment on Thursday 1st January 2009 7:09pm
Good stuff, as usual.
Harry's conversations with Aimee and Fleur came across well. Glad to see Harry backed off the James approach.
You have the ability to make original characters appealing, a rare talent among fanfic authors. Bodes well for your original works.
Sirius comments that Alice was a housewife, but didn't Alice become an Auror? Even if she's not as talented a dueler as her husband, I imagine she's no slouch and might have other talents that helped her get that job. If Harry picked her, hopefully he had a logical reason for it.
I wonder how much of a help Frank and Alice would be in a fight in the near future considering their muscles and such are bound to have atrophied after all this time, although I suppose there might be magical means to prevent such things. Oh, even if there's not, I suppose the elixir of life would probably aid in the healing. Duh, never mind.
Looking forward to whatever you're working on next.
JBern replied:
Thank you for the compliments. I hope you take the opportunity to try my collection when it goes on sale (middle of February if the proof on its way to me is acceptable).
As for Alice, I'm assuming she went through the 3 years of training, served a bit and then went on a maternity stint, while Frank kept improving, hence the housewife comment.
Regards,
Jim
Jim_xinu posted a comment on Thursday 1st January 2009 4:51pm
"The trick is to make certain you position the pillow right." Very cute exchange.
And a very interesting sub-plot with the Longbottoms. Doesn't mean you aren't a bastard for cliffhanging it. :-)
Dumbledore in this one is much more believably human than either the evil or saintly DD's we normally see.
Good chapter, thanks for sharing it with us. And good luck with your original works.
JBern replied:
Thanks for the compliments on my Dumbledore. More coming soon.~Jim
liquidfyre posted a comment on Thursday 1st January 2009 4:45pm
ARGGGHHHH YOU VILE VILE MAN may weasels gnaw at your liver for all eternity for stopping there
other than that though damn good story and i am grateful for the update
JBern replied:
Of course you know that driving off all these gnawing weasels cuts into my writing time. More coming soon.~Jim
fyrecat posted a comment on Thursday 1st January 2009 1:27pm
Haha! That would be one hell of a family motto! But would he want to burden potential future generations with it?
Another evil cliffhanger!
Thanks for posting before the new year!
Editorial notes:
"...at this point and time."
- at this point in time.
JBern replied:
Thanks for the editorial note. Goes to show why I still need extra eyes looking at the chapters. I'll fix it when I get a chance.~Jim
tangentsferret posted a comment on Thursday 1st January 2009 12:29pm
Yeaurgh. This is the third time I've tried to read this. Every time, I make it as far as "lung butter", and just have to stop. Sorry dude, too gross for me. Have a nice write.
JBern replied:
To each his own. I hope you find something you enjoy on this site or others.~Jim
stgilman10 posted a comment on Thursday 1st January 2009 11:32am
This was a good filler chapter. Some necessary development, with the tournament kind of on hold. So, is Aimee out of the Tournament, and out of the story as well?
I do like that you finally got to the Harry/Fleur, and then said, "Eh, maybe not. Wait a little longer." It gave us confirmation that the story is going in the promised direction, but the decline was well done.
The duelling with Sirius and Remus reminded us of HJ's true skills, which I think we may have forgotten about. Really looking forward to the magic duels.
I thought you were going to scrap the water task? I did notice that "and run an obstacle course" bit that would make it different from the canon task. Are the "treasures" still going to be people? Can the hat drown?
The update surprised me, coming so soon after the last one. Thanks a bunch. It seems like you're the only author on FFA.net updating his fics.
JBern replied:
Aimee will be back for the sequel. This story will likely run 25 chapters.
I decided to reuse the water task in a modified state. You'll have to wait and see what will be down there. More coming soon.
warpwizard posted a comment on Thursday 1st January 2009 11:05am
Good stuff. Nice cliffie. I'm too sick to comment further.
JBern replied:
Finally catching up on my replies. I hope you got better quickly.~Jim
Patches posted a comment on Thursday 1st January 2009 10:32am
Wow! This was a great chapter. I really like the choices that HJ is making. The fact that he could have saved Aimee a lot of pain and suffering but didn't is understandable. He would have like to save all three I am sure but he had to make a choice and I think he made the right one. Neville needs to have one of his parents back. Someone that could love him for the person he is and not the person his grandmother wants him to be. I like the way that Harry and Dumbledore had their conversation about Harry's weekend. That was very well done. I look forward to more of this story especially since you left us with a minor cliff-hanger. Thanks for writing. pms
JBern replied:
Thanks. I'm glad you liked the chapter and I'm about to start the next chapter, so more coming soon.~Jim
KConley posted a comment on Thursday 1st January 2009 10:15am
Gah! What a cliff hanger!
JBern replied:
Thank you. More is coming soon.
Galadrion posted a comment on Thursday 1st January 2009 8:20am
AAAARRRGHHH! Didn't narrow down the choices AT ALL! The way you finished this one didn't eliminate ANY possibilities... even the "split the potion between them" one. (It'd be an awkward grammatical conjugation, but it could be justified.)
JBern, I've gotta say that you're talented - this cliffy hooked me the way few can.
But dammit, now you'd BETTER get the next chapter out quickly, or you're going to start causing deprivation-related medical issues amongst your readership!
JBern replied:
I'm starting the next chapter tomorrow. Hopefully you'll hold out a bit longer...
Wolf550e posted a comment on Thursday 1st January 2009 5:26am
>>his parent's killers<< - apostrophe after s.
>>Good to see you're boyfriend is standing by you<< - your
Good chapter, I like how HJ "resolved" the conflict with Lupin.
JBern replied:
Thanks for the review and the correction.
whatareyouevensaying posted a comment on Thursday 1st January 2009 4:58am
Such a giver you are, providing your beta team with a whole hour and thirty-five minutes off.
Brilliant update, but then again, this whole story is brilliant. You have a real gift with character development. That, and keeping your readers desperately wanting more.
Happy new year.
JBern replied:
Well technically it was longer in my time zone, but what can I say? I'm a giving kind of guy!
Cuey posted a comment on Thursday 1st January 2009 4:27am
Sorry for the late review since I read this last night, but better late than never no? Thanks for the chapter, I really think it was the right way to bring in the new year.
I am expecting HJ to try to bring Alice back. No real reason why, but it just seems like what is going to happen. I was kinda torn between Alice and Lockhart but in the end I think HJ is secretly hoping to win "Best Smile" award this year.
Looking forward to more of the Triwizard Tournament and other competitions there, although HJ probably didn't think what it would look like with Cho riding his Firebolt while Aimee is in a hospitol in France.
JBern replied:
Sorry for the late response, but I figured that I'd clear out all the reviews before I start on the next chapter. Thanks for yours.~Jim
Carol Layland posted a comment on Thursday 1st January 2009 4:14am
As with all the authors on this site you are a wonderfully imaginative writer and I enjoy every one of your wonderful stories. This one is absolutely unique as I have never read any thing like this on any of the several sites that I frequent for reading material. Thank you for this New Year's gift and Have a very good year yourself. Carol
JBern replied:
Thank you, Carol. I hope your new year is going well also and I also hope to continue impressing you.~Jim
dwilken posted a comment on Thursday 1st January 2009 3:01am
Very nice. :)
JBern replied:
Thanks. More on the way.~Jim
Orion posted a comment on Thursday 1st January 2009 12:47am
Thanks for the great update and Happy New Year.
JBern replied:
Right back at you!
morriganscrow posted a comment on Thursday 1st January 2009 12:37am
As always a fabulous read. I can't single out any specific part as I totally enjoyed all of it. I did like the last section very much - HJ having to make that choice. How will Neville react?
JBern replied:
Glad you enjoyed it. More on the way.~Jim
Loopy Dane posted a comment on Friday 2nd January 2009 2:32am
JBern replied: